Skylet Posted July 10, 2008 Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 Very Nice Nobody Can See The Truth About Me I Give You A Glimspe Of Things About Me I'll Talk To You You'll Walk With Me Nothing To See So Walk Away From Me You're Comfort I Seek When I Feel Oh So Weak You Can Open Me Up And See What I Kept Shut I'll Talk To You You'll Walk With Me Nothing To See So Walk Away From Me When We Speak I Stop With Lies I Tell The Truth If It Means Goodbye I'll Talk To You You'll Walk With Me Nothing To See So Walk Away From Me It's Been Great To Be With You You've Helped me Into You I Cannot See But I Hope You Agree This Is Something We Need To Keep Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UrLittleDecoy Posted July 10, 2008 Report Share Posted July 10, 2008 boredom kills: i can't pretend anymore baby,it's like you were more my feelings are mixed inside of me this current desire cannot set me free twisted and broken what's going on? it started like a silly game but not it's not that game we play the reality's almost gone away i cannot find the words to say distraught confused what's going on? blah. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
closesttoheaven Posted July 11, 2008 Report Share Posted July 11, 2008 this is the first thing i ever wrote.... the summer sun is setting the winter light is fading and you still remain the brightest shining light oh oh oh sing this song can't you see? this song is to you one more dance and maybe i could get another change you're like that spider on the wall i try to grab it but it keeps running away getting away going away you let go of me without saying goodbye you let go of me without saying goodbye oh oh oh sing this song can't you see? this song is to you it's just for you Just one more dance and maybe i could get another change i can't live without this bright light Please don't fade away like the rest please don't go away with this mess 'cause i need your light please keep shining oh you let go of me [without saying goodbye] oh you let go of me [without saying goodbye] oh you let go from me without saying goodbye you let go away from me without saying goodbye goodbye no wait it's fading please don't fade ..and now it's gone LAME LAME LAME LAME LAME. IT'S SO FREAKIN LAME. i thought this up in bed last night. i have an account but i was too embarassed to post this. what do you guys think? is it that bad? i really want to write more songs but i don't know how or where to start... suggestions would be nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skylet Posted July 11, 2008 Report Share Posted July 11, 2008 There's Nothing Wrong With It Songwriting Is A Tough Thing To Explain Just Write About Strong Or Important Things In Your Life Or Maybe Things That Fascinate You Remember Everyone Writes Songs Differently A Song Can Start Anywhere If Someone Says Something That You Like The Way It Sounds Write it Down Free Bird By Lynyrd Skynyrd Started With The Line If i Leave Here Tommorrow Will You Still Remember Me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 12, 2008 Report Share Posted July 12, 2008 I thought it was good, Being your first and all. Not saying that it's good for a first also. (EDIT!: I DID NOT MEAN THAT AS AN INSULT!!! Now that I read it back I kind of picked it up wrong) Note To Self Well here you are once again Sitting among the young night You rarely gain any friends Unless they are, What you are too A loser is what they classify you But you don't care, You're much nicer than them Even you know that, So you're good to go anywhere You're concerned with their opinions About you You wonder what they think When they view you You want everyone to be your friend You seek attention But you have nothing to offer So you receive no mention At all, Not at all Are they really nice, Are they really bad How could you even know Sometimes you should just Find a place to go Where you can think slow Where you don't have to think for anyone But yourself You're only patient to yourself But thats alright Because you're your friend How can I season my mind Or embellish it When my thoughts are filled with fiction revenge I wonder how Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 13, 2008 Report Share Posted July 13, 2008 Tears in a dark shade of black Finding their way down my cheeks I want them to heal what the world Can't see, is it too much to ask I close my eyes and start to pretend That this has a happy end I try to believe Can it be explained, the way I feel inside The emptiness, the loneliness The reason that I cry It feels like no one's by my side When it is like a whole crowd Feels like I'm left behind What's there to do, When it feels like the Night sky is out of stars ------- Invisible I can be in the middle of a crowded room and no one sees me I can cry, I can scream, but no one will ever hear me It can hurt inside for a very long time without anyone noticing I can feel the pain, but my tears are washed away in the rain When I wanted them to save me no one was there When I stood up for myself no one was listening why can't they see, how much it hurts when no one ever sees me I can take a few steps nearer the edge, and no one stops me I can fall and no one would ever see the girl that I used to be It will hurt inside, for a very long time without anyone noticing I will feel the pain, but my tears are washed away in the rain When I wanted them to save me no one was there When I stood up for myself no one was listening why can't they see, how much it hurts when no one ever sees me If anyone just could stay with me, Close their eyes and listen, I just want to be seen I am visible, I am real, Can't you see When I wanted them to save me no one was there When I stood up for myself no one was listening why can't they see, how much it hurts when no one ever sees me I am real, I'm not invisible x4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feli Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Alright so I got inspired by a movie on TNT and just had to write this lol. She looks out through, her windowsill is gleaming with The touch of snow that’s falling from beneath the clouds She breathes up a breeze of anguish that’s been running through her heart since They told her, “You will never get further from here.” They told her it wasn’t worth to dare it all, But would the desire disappear? She glances once more up to the dreadful silence She can’t even touch the song that has been whistling through her parents’ dorm, But how can a song just run so still through a mind of deserted feelings, That’s what she asks herself and once more They told her to give it up and move on But what if the opportunity roamed near? The girl had a dream, And would she let it slip? Chorus: No! That night she left her home to find out What that one calling was for It was quite unusual for her to believe It was something deeper than how they made her feel And she wouldn’t look back Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed: “Gone to get far for more”. And so she kept on, her fingertips were falling, they were falling Into an undetermined state of cold, she felt cold, she would not deny But her will just roared inside like a little flame that starts to lit in the middle of a dark empty spot residing in every person’s heart And even though they told her making illusions out of reality was insane, She stepped up and told them, “This is my game; no pain, no gain.” They stared at her in awe; she just moved on, she had to keep on panting Up the frozen heaps of blizzard air that would hit against her lips, They told her to keep going, just keep going, could she believe her ears? They told her to breathe in now, breathe it out, they held their fears To provide her the support she had been awaiting oh, since so long, Wondered if snowing would turn into storm? The girl had a dream, And would she let it slip? Chorus: No! That night she left her home to find out What that one calling was for It was quite unusual for her to believe It was something deeper than how they made her feel And she wouldn’t look back Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed: “Gone to get far for more”. That’s when she saw the truth, and it was glowing like eleven lights Held up candles in the middle of a fight to stop piercing blades of victorious thirst And they used to tell her it would come to an end, before it would begin But look at her now, look who has blasted in, who’s kept going until this day, In which all the good seeds finally set in growth And the girl had a dream, And she made it happen. She made it happen. Chorus: That night she left her home to find out What that one calling was for It was quite unusual for her to believe It was something deeper than how they made her feel And she wouldn’t look back Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed (She signed with her own hands, into the patches of white) “I’ve found what I was looking for”. And so she found what I’ve been looking for. And so I’ve found what I’ve been looking for. Any C&C? lol. Yep, very long, sorry, I just typed away without noticing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Defiance Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 your amazing ♥ as always Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feli Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Aww thanks so much. :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 that. was. AMAZING. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feli Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 I'm glad you liked it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 I dunno if this is a song or just a poem but here it goes. The Truth of Sadness Inside of these four walls lies the secret of a life A glorious light burried within human flesh The story of her troubled existence makes it crawl under my skin No contact with reality made the scars on her arms Wishes of happiness pushed down and put a lid on Mr John Smith, someone, Hi are you aware of how she's feeling inside Drowned with depression and people who doesn't care Pressure of how everyone wants her to be Is pulling her down, down and everyone lets her go Tell me what you think 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 18, 2008 Report Share Posted July 18, 2008 Blah...Since when did I get so lovey dovey....Must have been my crush again Her eyes, Rival the skies In the middle of May I wonder who she loves I'm sure that its not me Yesterday I seen a tear escape her eye As I kept on walking by I wanted to ask what was wrong But as a coward, I kept walking along Somehow She Steals My Eye Shes Always In My Sight Yes It's Safe To Say That I'm In Love I've Found Someone Worth My Fight But I'm Too Scared To Even Talk I Bet She Would Laugh At Me But Sometime Soon, I'll Talk To Her And Then I'll Never Leave Her Be Well the kids make you feel bad And I know they do Its such a pity, What you let them do You know you should be stronger And not take any of it Because I know they'll grow up But until then, Just guard yourself 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
holleh Posted July 18, 2008 Report Share Posted July 18, 2008 HEY YA'LL, DIS IS SARAh! I'M HOLLIE'S FREIND... FIRNED? FRIEND? YEAH! KAY YA'LL, SOME HAIKU! IS ABOUT ROD. AND TOM. I can already smell the matcha tea. rody smells like farts he needs to take a shower smells worse than tims dick Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 18, 2008 Report Share Posted July 18, 2008 Okay, another poem that I've written in an atempt to make a difference. Or something Here it goes. Please say what you think. Constructive critisism is welcome Long green fields in the sunlight A boy stands and looks out On the creation of God Happiness, Sadness, Light and dark Truth and lies, black and white Tears and smiles, Any similarities between day and night He strikes his hair away from his eyes See me, see me He whispers to the world Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nimo Posted July 19, 2008 Report Share Posted July 19, 2008 nice and simple linney!!! here's one i wrote after a failure i had in being together with the girl i used to love.. (please note i'm greek!!! lol) no music in my doom look at me and i will look back at you or just keep on smiling as you always do.. life isn't short enough to stay the same.. just when you think that you're winning, there's no game.. -drown in thoughts, my life is getting cold. now your face has replaced the moon.. did i leave so soon? no colours in this room.. refrain: cav u give me a sign? because i don't really know who u are.. no more. maybe i'll have to get to know u all over again.. well, maybe some other time. because right now i am falling apart. but u don't seem concerned.. so i'll be leaving, but not very far.. -mind grows older as the time goes by.. but i'm out here just too young to say goodbye.. not feeling like it, but almost forced to go.. i now leave u, having spent a life or so.. -drown in thoughts, my life is geting worse. i can't cry my way back to you.. as i always do.. no music in my doom.. refrain etc,, impressions? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skylet Posted July 19, 2008 Report Share Posted July 19, 2008 I dunno if this is a song or just a poem but here it goes. The Truth of Sadness Inside of these four walls lies the secret of a life A glorious light burried within human flesh The story of her troubled existence makes it crawl under my skin No contact with reality made the scars on her arms Wishes of happiness pushed down and put a lid on Mr John Smith, someone, Hi are you aware of how she's feeling inside Drowned with depression and people who doesn't care Pressure of how everyone wants her to be Is pulling her down, down and everyone lets her go Tell me what you think Amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xxbecksyxx Posted July 28, 2008 Report Share Posted July 28, 2008 He had that fantastic look of lust in his eye as he bent to one knee, where he produced a blue, velvet box wrapped in red ribbon. Before he said a word, Faith knew exactly the phrase he was going to speak. She waited, anticipated, until the words exited his throat. “Will you marry me?” He asked softly. At that very moment, the world had stopped and there was no room to breathe. Faith glanced out of the window to the left of her. The tip of the sun was poking out beneath the clouds; the earth continued its wonderful orbit, and she looked down at Damien, smiling. “Yes,” she whispered, “Yes I will.” opinionzz. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 29, 2008 Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 Becky, that is really good. Cute Is there a continue? Would like to read if there was? Or if you could post something longer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
closesttoheaven Posted July 29, 2008 Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 so quick so quick try to focus on a way closer we're close to ending don't let this feeling take over your mind (don't let go) [Chorus] your close to heart but furthest thing to touch keep our distances keep dreaming you have to see this is the only way it could be history is only repeating itself it's only talk why don't you try, begin some action you can't photograph these words learn my method. understand my way. is this how you wanted it to be? (don't let go) [Chorus] so quick so quick you'd wish i'd ring so clear now so quick so quick i won't let this water fill your lungs (don't let go) [Chorus] a mask on this untold feeling (closer now, we're getting closer now) do you know how to live any other way? (closer now, we're getting closer now) [Chorus] give me something to help for give me something to cry for give me something to love for give me something to live for tell me something i don't know and i won't think back i won't look back anymore you'd wish i'd ring so clear now so quick so quick i won't let this water fill your lungs (don't let go) my second song. can you guys please tell me, is it bad, okay, or good? and if it sucks, how could i make it better? yeah, i know some lyrics are familiar with conditions lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 29, 2008 Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 so quick so quicktry to focus on a way closer we're close to ending don't let this feeling take over your mind (don't let go) [Chorus] your close to heart but furthest thing to touch keep our distances keep dreaming you have to see this is the only way it could be history is only repeating itself it's only talk why don't you try, begin some action you can't photograph these words learn my method. understand my way. is this how you wanted it to be? (don't let go) [Chorus] so quick so quick you'd wish i'd ring so clear now so quick so quick i won't let this water fill your lungs (don't let go) [Chorus] a mask on this untold feeling (closer now, we're getting closer now) do you know how to live any other way? (closer now, we're getting closer now) [Chorus] give me something to help for give me something to cry for give me something to love for give me something to live for tell me something i don't know and i won't think back i won't look back anymore you'd wish i'd ring so clear now so quick so quick i won't let this water fill your lungs (don't let go) my second song. can you guys please tell me, is it bad, okay, or good? and if it sucks, how could i make it better? yeah, i know some lyrics are familiar with conditions lyrics. I really like it, especially this part: a mask on this untold feeling (closer now, we're getting closer now) do you know how to live any other way? (closer now, we're getting closer now) I can't really put my finger on what it is that makes me like it, but I really do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
notoriousfat67 Posted July 29, 2008 Report Share Posted July 29, 2008 Okay, another poem that I've written in an atempt to make a difference. Or something Here it goes.Please say what you think. Constructive critisism is welcome Long green fields in the sunlight A boy stands and looks out On the creation of God Happiness, Sadness, Light and dark Truth and lies, black and white Tears and smiles, Any similarities between day and night He strikes his hair away from his eyes See me, see me He whispers to the world wow this is amazing. especially the last two lines. they hit close to home im inspired. im gonna try to write something later Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 30, 2008 Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Thank you Mike! Glad to hear that you liked it Lookin' forward to read yours EDIT* I found a poem/text (something) that I wrote about 2 months ago, And I wanted to share I know that the last sentence kinda already exists.. The hardest part with letting someone go Is that you'll always be alone No one's there to be the shoulder you cry on No one's there to help you get better The only thing that is holding you back From drowning in misery Is the memory of all the good times you had What doesn't kill us, Only makes us stronger Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted August 1, 2008 Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 There is almost no one who writes in this thread I just wrote a song and I wanted to share. Inside Herself She's Bound Voices echoing inside Screaming, saying: you're behind Walls built up around Inside herself she's bound Forced herself to open her eyes So she wouldn't see the bleeding soul inside People saying: You don't deserve to live She is trying hard not to see the ending [Pre-Chorus] Six more steps and she will fall Six more minutes and finished is all [Chorus] Whispers in the wind Telling her to jump down Failure, misfit, loser Not a single hand reached out Not a single tear shed for her Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud Hopes that a miracle will pass by Waiting for a day when the sun will shine Surrounding peoples seem to adore Living to bully, that's what they're for Watches life through a linse Can not find the amazing things Patterns created to knock her down Echoes of the shattering sound She lives a retouched life Where whoever wants leaves a scratch inside [Pre-Chorus] Six more steps and she will fall Six more minutes and finished is all [Chorus] Whispers in the wind Telling her to jump down Failure, misfit, loser Not a single hand reached out Not a single tear shed for her Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud Hopes that a miracle will pass by Waiting for a day when the sun will shine Sitting down, watching the sun But it never shines on her Soon to be, letting go In belief of a better place Where there'll always be someone Who'd like to be her rescue Her life is shattered like broken glass And someone needs to fix it fast Surrounding peoples seem to adore Living to bully, that's what they're for (x3) [Chorus] Whispers in the wind Telling her to jump down Failure, misfit, loser Not a single hand reached out Not a single tear shed for her Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud Hopes that a miracle will pass by Waiting for a day when the sun will shine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted August 1, 2008 Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 You're very good! I'll tell you a secret, I'm jealous and I hate you for being this good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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