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Very Nice

 

Nobody Can See

The Truth About Me

I Give You A Glimspe

Of Things About Me

 

I'll Talk To You

You'll Walk With Me

Nothing To See

So Walk Away From Me

 

You're Comfort I Seek

When I Feel Oh So Weak

You Can Open Me Up

And See What I Kept Shut

 

I'll Talk To You

You'll Walk With Me

Nothing To See

So Walk Away From Me

 

When We Speak

I Stop With Lies

I Tell The Truth

If It Means Goodbye

 

I'll Talk To You

You'll Walk With Me

Nothing To See

So Walk Away From Me

 

It's Been Great

To Be With You

You've Helped me

Into You I Cannot See

But I Hope You Agree

This Is Something

We Need To Keep

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boredom kills:

 

i can't pretend anymore

baby,it's like you were more

my feelings are mixed inside of me

this current desire cannot set me free

twisted

and broken

what's going on?

 

it started like a silly game

but not it's not that game we play

the reality's almost gone away

i cannot find the words to say

distraught

confused

what's going on?

 

 

blah.

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this is the first thing i ever wrote....

the summer sun is setting

the winter light is fading

and you still remain the brightest shining light

 

oh oh oh

 

sing this song

can't you see?

this song is to you

one more dance

and maybe i could get another change

 

you're like that spider on the wall

i try to grab it but it keeps

running away

getting away

going away

 

you let go of me

without saying goodbye

you let go of me

without saying goodbye

 

oh oh oh

 

sing this song

can't you see?

this song is to you

it's just for you

Just one more dance

and maybe i could get another change

 

i can't live without this bright light

Please don't fade away like the rest

please don't go away with this mess

 

'cause i need your light

please keep shining

 

oh you let go of me

[without saying goodbye]

oh you let go of me

[without saying goodbye]

oh you let go from me

without saying goodbye

you let go away from me

without saying goodbye

goodbye

 

no wait

it's fading

please don't fade

 

..and now it's gone

 

 

 

LAME LAME LAME LAME LAME. IT'S SO FREAKIN LAME. i thought this up in bed last night. i have an account but i was too embarassed to post this. what do you guys think? is it that bad? i really want to write more songs but i don't know how or where to start... suggestions would be nice.

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There's Nothing Wrong With It

 

Songwriting Is A Tough Thing To Explain

 

Just Write About Strong Or Important Things In Your Life Or Maybe Things That Fascinate You

 

Remember Everyone Writes Songs Differently

 

A Song Can Start Anywhere If Someone Says Something That You Like The Way It Sounds Write it Down

 

Free Bird By Lynyrd Skynyrd Started With The Line

 

If i Leave Here Tommorrow Will You Still Remember Me

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I thought it was good, Being your first and all.

 

Not saying that it's good for a first also.

 

(EDIT!: I DID NOT MEAN THAT AS AN INSULT!!! Now that I read it back I kind of picked it up wrong)

 

Note To Self

 

 

Well here you are once again

Sitting among the young night

You rarely gain any friends

Unless they are, What you are too

A loser is what they classify you

But you don't care, You're much nicer than them

Even you know that, So you're good to go anywhere

 

You're concerned with their opinions

About you

You wonder what they think

When they view you

You want everyone to be your friend

You seek attention

But you have nothing to offer

So you receive no mention

At all, Not at all

 

Are they really nice, Are they really bad

How could you even know

Sometimes you should just

Find a place to go

Where you can think slow

Where you don't have to think for anyone

But yourself

You're only patient to yourself

But thats alright

Because you're your friend

 

How can I season my mind

Or embellish it

When my thoughts are filled with fiction revenge

I wonder how

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Tears in a dark shade of black

Finding their way down my cheeks

I want them to heal what the world

Can't see, is it too much to ask

 

I close my eyes and start to pretend

That this has a happy end

I try to believe

 

Can it be explained, the way I feel inside

The emptiness, the loneliness

The reason that I cry

It feels like no one's by my side

When it is like a whole crowd

Feels like I'm left behind

What's there to do, When it feels like the

Night sky is out of stars

 

-------

 

Invisible

 

I can be in the middle of a crowded room

and no one sees me

I can cry, I can scream, but no one will

ever hear me

 

It can hurt inside for a very long time

without anyone noticing

I can feel the pain, but my tears are

washed away in the rain

 

When I wanted them to save me

no one was there

When I stood up for myself

no one was listening

why can't they see, how much it hurts

when no one ever sees me

 

I can take a few steps nearer the edge,

and no one stops me

I can fall and no one would ever see

the girl that I used to be

 

It will hurt inside, for a very long time

without anyone noticing

I will feel the pain, but my tears are

washed away in the rain

 

When I wanted them to save me

no one was there

When I stood up for myself

no one was listening

why can't they see, how much it hurts

when no one ever sees me

 

If anyone just could stay with me,

Close their eyes and listen, I just want to be seen

I am visible, I am real, Can't you see

 

When I wanted them to save me

no one was there

When I stood up for myself

no one was listening

why can't they see, how much it hurts

when no one ever sees me

 

I am real, I'm not invisible x4

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Alright so I got inspired by a movie on TNT and just had to write this lol.

 

She looks out through, her windowsill is gleaming with

The touch of snow that’s falling from beneath the clouds

She breathes up a breeze of anguish that’s been running through her heart since

They told her, “You will never get further from here.”

They told her it wasn’t worth to dare it all,

But would the desire disappear?

 

She glances once more up to the dreadful silence

She can’t even touch the song that has been whistling through her parents’ dorm,

But how can a song just run so still through a mind of deserted feelings,

That’s what she asks herself and once more

They told her to give it up and move on

But what if the opportunity roamed near?

 

The girl had a dream,

And would she let it slip?

 

Chorus:

No!

That night she left her home to find out

What that one calling was for

It was quite unusual for her to believe

It was something deeper than how they made her feel

And she wouldn’t look back

Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers

She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door

And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed:

“Gone to get far for more”.

 

 

And so she kept on, her fingertips were falling, they were falling

Into an undetermined state of cold, she felt cold, she would not deny

But her will just roared inside like a little flame that starts to lit in the middle of

a dark empty spot residing in every person’s heart

And even though they told her making illusions out of reality was insane,

She stepped up and told them, “This is my game; no pain, no gain.”

 

They stared at her in awe; she just moved on, she had to keep on panting

Up the frozen heaps of blizzard air that would hit against her lips,

They told her to keep going, just keep going, could she believe her ears?

They told her to breathe in now, breathe it out, they held their fears

To provide her the support she had been awaiting oh, since so long,

Wondered if snowing would turn into storm?

 

The girl had a dream,

And would she let it slip?

 

Chorus:

No!

That night she left her home to find out

What that one calling was for

It was quite unusual for her to believe

It was something deeper than how they made her feel

And she wouldn’t look back

Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers

She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door

And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed:

“Gone to get far for more”.

 

That’s when she saw the truth, and it was glowing like eleven lights

Held up candles in the middle of a fight to stop piercing blades of victorious thirst

And they used to tell her it would come to an end, before it would begin

But look at her now, look who has blasted in, who’s kept going until this day,

In which all the good seeds finally set in growth

 

And the girl had a dream,

And she made it happen.

She made it happen.

 

 

Chorus:

 

That night she left her home to find out

What that one calling was for

It was quite unusual for her to believe

It was something deeper than how they made her feel

And she wouldn’t look back

Her footsteps would leave a trace of shattered layers

She had been dropping down since she crossed through that door

And from the corner of her eye, she saw on the snow, she signed

(She signed with her own hands, into the patches of white)

“I’ve found what I was looking for”.

 

And so she found what I’ve been looking for.

And so I’ve found what I’ve been looking

for.

 

 

 

 

Any C&C?

lol.

Yep, very long, sorry, I just typed away without noticing.

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I dunno if this is a song or just a poem but here it goes.

 

The Truth of Sadness

 

Inside of these four walls

lies the secret of a life

A glorious light burried

within human flesh

The story of her troubled existence

makes it crawl under my skin

 

No contact with reality

made the scars on her arms

Wishes of happiness

pushed down and put a lid on

 

Mr John Smith, someone, Hi

are you aware of how

she's feeling inside

Drowned with depression

and people who doesn't care

Pressure of how everyone

wants her to be

Is pulling her down, down

and everyone lets her go

 

Tell me what you think :)

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Blah...Since when did I get so lovey dovey....Must have been my crush again :P

 

Her eyes, Rival the skies

In the middle of May

I wonder who she loves

I'm sure that its not me

Yesterday I seen a tear escape her eye

As I kept on walking by

I wanted to ask what was wrong

But as a coward, I kept walking along

 

Somehow She Steals My Eye

Shes Always In My Sight

Yes It's Safe To Say That I'm In Love

I've Found Someone Worth My Fight

But I'm Too Scared To Even Talk

I Bet She Would Laugh At Me

But Sometime Soon, I'll Talk To Her

And Then I'll Never Leave Her Be

 

Well the kids make you feel bad

And I know they do

Its such a pity, What you let them do

You know you should be stronger

And not take any of it

Because I know they'll grow up

But until then, Just guard yourself

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HEY YA'LL, DIS IS SARAh! I'M HOLLIE'S FREIND... FIRNED?

FRIEND? YEAH! KAY YA'LL, SOME HAIKU! IS ABOUT ROD. AND TOM.

 

I can already smell the matcha tea.

 

rody smells like farts

he needs to take a shower

smells worse than tims dick

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Okay, another poem that I've written in an atempt to make a difference. Or something :P Here it goes.

Please say what you think. Constructive critisism is welcome :)

 

Long green fields in the sunlight

A boy stands and looks out

On the creation of God

Happiness, Sadness, Light and dark

Truth and lies, black and white

Tears and smiles, Any similarities

between day and night

He strikes his hair away from his eyes

See me, see me

He whispers to the world

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nice and simple linney!!!

here's one i wrote after a failure i had in being together with the girl i used to love..

(please note i'm greek!!! lol)

 

no music in my doom

 

look at me and i will look back at you

or just keep on smiling as you always do..

life isn't short enough to stay the same..

just when you think that you're winning, there's no game..

-drown in thoughts, my life is getting cold.

now your face has replaced the moon..

did i leave so soon?

no colours in this room..

 

refrain:

cav u give me a sign?

because i don't really know who u are..

no more.

maybe i'll have to get to know u all over again..

well, maybe some other time.

because right now i am falling apart.

but u don't seem concerned..

so i'll be leaving, but not very far..

 

-mind grows older as the time goes by..

but i'm out here just too young to say goodbye..

not feeling like it, but almost forced to go..

i now leave u, having spent a life or so..

 

-drown in thoughts, my life is geting worse.

i can't cry my way back to you..

as i always do..

no music in my doom..

 

refrain etc,,

 

 

impressions?

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I dunno if this is a song or just a poem but here it goes.

 

The Truth of Sadness

 

Inside of these four walls

lies the secret of a life

A glorious light burried

within human flesh

The story of her troubled existence

makes it crawl under my skin

 

No contact with reality

made the scars on her arms

Wishes of happiness

pushed down and put a lid on

 

Mr John Smith, someone, Hi

are you aware of how

she's feeling inside

Drowned with depression

and people who doesn't care

Pressure of how everyone

wants her to be

Is pulling her down, down

and everyone lets her go

 

Tell me what you think :)

 

Amazing

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He had that fantastic look of lust in his eye as he bent to one knee, where he produced a blue, velvet box wrapped in red ribbon. Before he said a word, Faith knew exactly the phrase he was going to speak. She waited, anticipated, until the words exited his throat.

“Will you marry me?” He asked softly.

At that very moment, the world had stopped and there was no room to breathe. Faith glanced out of the window to the left of her. The tip of the sun was poking out beneath the clouds; the earth continued its wonderful orbit, and she looked down at Damien, smiling.

“Yes,” she whispered, “Yes I will.”

 

 

opinionzz.

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Becky, that is really good. Cute :) Is there a continue? Would like to read if there was? Or if you could post something longer :)

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so quick so quick

try to focus on a way closer

we're close to ending

don't let this feeling take over your mind

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

your close to heart

but furthest thing to touch

keep our distances

keep dreaming

you have to see

this is the only way it could be

history is only repeating itself

 

it's only talk

why don't you try, begin some action

you can't photograph these words

learn my method.

understand my way.

is this how you wanted it to be?

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

 

so quick so quick

you'd wish i'd ring so clear now

so quick so quick

i won't let this water fill your lungs

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

 

a mask on this untold feeling

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

do you know how to live any other way?

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

 

[Chorus]

 

give me something to help for

give me something to cry for

give me something to love for

give me something to live for

tell me something i don't know

and i won't think back

i won't look back anymore

 

you'd wish i'd ring so clear now

so quick so quick

i won't let this water fill your lungs

 

(don't let go)

 

 

my second song. can you guys please tell me, is it bad, okay, or good? and if it sucks, how could i make it better? yeah, i know some lyrics are familiar with conditions lyrics.

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so quick so quick

try to focus on a way closer

we're close to ending

don't let this feeling take over your mind

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

your close to heart

but furthest thing to touch

keep our distances

keep dreaming

you have to see

this is the only way it could be

history is only repeating itself

 

it's only talk

why don't you try, begin some action

you can't photograph these words

learn my method.

understand my way.

is this how you wanted it to be?

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

 

so quick so quick

you'd wish i'd ring so clear now

so quick so quick

i won't let this water fill your lungs

 

(don't let go)

 

[Chorus]

 

a mask on this untold feeling

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

do you know how to live any other way?

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

 

[Chorus]

 

give me something to help for

give me something to cry for

give me something to love for

give me something to live for

tell me something i don't know

and i won't think back

i won't look back anymore

 

you'd wish i'd ring so clear now

so quick so quick

i won't let this water fill your lungs

 

(don't let go)

 

 

my second song. can you guys please tell me, is it bad, okay, or good? and if it sucks, how could i make it better? yeah, i know some lyrics are familiar with conditions lyrics.

 

 

I really like it, especially this part: a mask on this untold feeling

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

do you know how to live any other way?

(closer now, we're getting closer now)

 

I can't really put my finger on what it is that makes me like it, but I really do :)

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Okay, another poem that I've written in an atempt to make a difference. Or something :P Here it goes.

Please say what you think. Constructive critisism is welcome :)

 

Long green fields in the sunlight

A boy stands and looks out

On the creation of God

Happiness, Sadness, Light and dark

Truth and lies, black and white

Tears and smiles, Any similarities

between day and night

He strikes his hair away from his eyes

See me, see me

He whispers to the world

 

wow this is amazing. especially the last two lines. they hit close to home

 

im inspired. im gonna try to write something later

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Thank you Mike! Glad to hear that you liked it :) Lookin' forward to read yours :D

 

 

EDIT* I found a poem/text (something) that I wrote about 2 months ago, And I wanted to share :) I know that the last sentence kinda already exists..

 

The hardest part with letting someone go

Is that you'll always be alone

No one's there to be the shoulder you cry on

No one's there to help you get better

The only thing that is holding you back

From drowning in misery

Is the memory of all the good times you had

What doesn't kill us, Only makes us stronger

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There is almost no one who writes in this thread :(

I just wrote a song and I wanted to share.

 

Inside Herself She's Bound

 

Voices echoing inside

Screaming, saying: you're behind

Walls built up around

Inside herself she's bound

Forced herself to open her eyes

So she wouldn't see the bleeding soul inside

People saying: You don't deserve to live

She is trying hard not to see the ending

 

[Pre-Chorus]

Six more steps and she will fall

Six more minutes and finished is all

 

[Chorus]

Whispers in the wind

Telling her to jump down

Failure, misfit, loser

Not a single hand reached out

Not a single tear shed for her

Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud

Hopes that a miracle will pass by

Waiting for a day when the sun will shine

 

Surrounding peoples seem to adore

Living to bully, that's what they're for

Watches life through a linse

Can not find the amazing things

Patterns created to knock her down

Echoes of the shattering sound

She lives a retouched life

Where whoever wants leaves a scratch inside

 

[Pre-Chorus]

Six more steps and she will fall

Six more minutes and finished is all

 

[Chorus]

Whispers in the wind

Telling her to jump down

Failure, misfit, loser

Not a single hand reached out

Not a single tear shed for her

Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud

Hopes that a miracle will pass by

Waiting for a day when the sun will shine

 

Sitting down, watching the sun

But it never shines on her

Soon to be, letting go

In belief of a better place

Where there'll always be someone

Who'd like to be her rescue

Her life is shattered like broken glass

And someone needs to fix it fast

 

Surrounding peoples seem to adore

Living to bully, that's what they're for (x3)

 

[Chorus]

Whispers in the wind

Telling her to jump down

Failure, misfit, loser

Not a single hand reached out

Not a single tear shed for her

Save me, she thinks, but doesn't say out loud

Hopes that a miracle will pass by

Waiting for a day when the sun will shine

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You're very good! :D I'll tell you a secret, I'm jealous and I hate you for being this good.

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