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Yeah, well. I am like obsessed with that particular piece. I've written it in my notebook a coulple of times already! I am the master of notebooks! I own like 30 of them. I really like to write :roll: But seriously, I love that part. I'm gonna say just like Mike. I wish it was in a song :)

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Haha, lol. Yes. that's what everyone I know says too. But I like them. The one that I bought a month ago is almost full now. Just like 20 pages left out of like 120 :P And fyi, not all of the notebooks are full.. Just like, 3 hahaa xD

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ohhh lol, I think buying new notebooks are very inspiring to me. Is that why you get that many? :P

 

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(Also Mr. Quiet, I'll edit my posts and put more in here to get back on topic)

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Yes, that may be the reason :P Haha, sry for ot. Maybe I should post something that I've written today :) This song is called:

 

To Be Okay

 

I painted a picture

I turned out just fine

Then I noticed

I had drawn your eyes

 

Picked it up, threw it away

But ofcourse , I cannot forget that day

 

Chorus

When you said bye bye

We'll never be together again

I won't be fine

You thought I was a waste of time

You promised me the world

And then you made it turn

I won't be fine

'Cuz it was all a lie

 

You held me hand

When we were outside

You thought I would understand

Why you left me behind

 

But I don't, I don't

 

Chorus

When you said bye bye

We'll never be together again

I won't be fine

You thought I was a waste of time

You promised me the world

And then you made it turn

I won't be fine

'Cuz it was all a lie

 

Bridge

I'll collect your picture, cannot throw it away

'Cuz I've never stopped loving you

Ever since that day

I'll try to be okay

 

Chorus

But you still said bye bye

We'll never be together again

And I won't be fine

You thought I was a waste of time

You promised me the world

And then you made it turn

I won't be fine

'Cuz it was all a lie

 

I know now

That you were never really mine

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Yes, Nice ending. I liked it! But I hate that I could hear a song in my head when I read other peoples things but when I make mine I just can't go anywhere with it.

 

Edit: You HAVE to be a singer for a band.

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Haha, thanks :D And just so you know, I hear a melody in my head when I read yours..

Actually, I really want to have a band and be the singer, but I just have to find the right people that are willing to participate to the fullest. Or something like that. Gosh, I sounded real "grown up". lol.

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Brother

 

Hey there my tortured blood

Nothing of our blood can relate

But I know you're my closest friend

It's sad that you're all alone again

 

Can you believe that mother took your kids

Maybe it's for your better health

Well you still have a lot to learn

You're in the spotlight,

And pretty soon it'll be my turn

 

 

Cry Again, My Tortured Friend

So Unfortunate, So Alone

You Deserve Everyones Sympathy

And Maybe I'll Be There

On Your Respected Chair

You're In My Heart

And We Were Always There

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More people should totally post in this thread.

 

 

the silence was deafening and laced

with heartbreak and escape

undisguised and unashed, i saw them turn around

and stare, and stop,

stop looking at me like that

 

stop falling apart like that

i'll talk back, i'll back track, i'll change tack,

if it'll help, if i can help

 

i clawed my way to the top

and left my mark,

those that fall will know me by

the way they scream,

and i;ll get ready to leave

this all behind.

 

explain this ? no i don't think i can,

couldn't find the words, anyway

 

i would fight for you,

i would live and destroy and die for you,

was that a shiver from the cold,

 

or from the fear ?

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.....

 

Post it then!!!! :D:D

 

Edit: If you feel comfortable that is.

 

Yeah, Aoife, post it =) Would like to read it! I'm sure it's great.

 

err id actualy rather not bth

its actualy crappy ive decided

well, meh its aiight

 

still dont wanna post it

haha

its kinda - idk

cheesy, yet depressing, yet... idk lol

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And you think mine aren't cheesy enough?:shifty:

 

 

 

Edit:

 

 

Everything here's so stupid

And you're adding a lot to it

I pay attention to the things you did

And you never even knew this

 

 

So bye

And hi

To everyone

So long

 

Everyone can impress me

And anyone can confess to me

Theres nothing private being thrown around

The quiet ones, They seem to make no sound

As if we really could hear

As if we really were near

Anything close to being friends

And now we'll avoid each others fears

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(note, this is all off the top of my dome)

 

im sitting here in this lonely room

sorrounded by the nothingness

i feel when im not with you

 

you entered my heart

and left without a goodbye

you left my beating heart

and left me here to die

 

maybe, there's hope tomorrow

that i will find you

 

(ehh, mommy says i sleep :[ ) haha, idk, laters!!

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Jorgi, I agree. More people should post here. And that is real good!

 

Okay, Aoife... :(

 

Chris, I spot talent :D

 

Brian Kim, that's very good :)

 

I do not have anything to post for the moment, but I hope to write a song tomorrow, so, later :P

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Gone

 

They like to ruin my name

Making themselves rise above me

They expect me to laugh at myself

And appreciate every single con they can see

They force me to consider them family

I wonder how far deep the pain goes

In the root of the tree

 

I can't benefit myself

Through any of their help

It just can't be

I've loved and live with them

There's nothing that can make me leave

Except for them

So if I ever find myself gone

From my family

I know it wasn't out of pure hate

I was only looking out for me

 

And if any of their love is true

They'll let me be

But I still know they'll decide for themselves

My true intentions

Just to comfort themselves

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Gone

 

They like to ruin my name

Making themselves rise above me

They expect me to laugh at myself

And appreciate every single con they can see

They force me to consider them family

I wonder how far deep the pain goes

In the root of the tree

 

I can't benefit myself

Through any of their help

It just can't be

I've loved and live with them

There's nothing that can make me leave

Except for them

So if I ever find myself gone

From my family

I know it wasn't out of pure hate

I was only looking out for me

 

And if any of their love is true

They'll let me be

But I still know they'll decide for themselves

My true intentions

Just to comfort themselves

 

 

its awesome! really! i love it! we should start a band!:D:D:D:willy_nilly:

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