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i haven't been on here on awhile but i wrote this a few days ago:

 

The Shadows

 

Walk among the shadows

They're talking about you

Shh, be quiet

Listen.

Don't move, observe

Do you feel them watching?

They want what you have

Life, body form

Quick. Run.

No time.

They're coming.

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This is a story of a girl in pain

She was just standing in the rain

Whenever she got a chance to hide herself

It was a plesure that she'd never tell

 

Would she? Has she? Did she?

Will you ever know... Listen to the story

 

She got an oppurtunity to wake up

Her dream was just to be the top

But then again, she couldn't stop

Now shes just a girl or what?

 

I to lazy to write more...

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Morphine and Nicotine you set me free

Dad do I disappoint you?

Round the back allies that's where I call home,

I'm not coming back tonight.

Don't tell me that I can't 'cause I'll prove you wrong,

Fuck you and believe in me.

I know I'm not perfect but I'm trying to be better.

Believe in me.

 

superduper rad, there.

 

 

live thread, liiiiiiive.

 

stand tall;

i defy you to define me

i am your queen-

more than i have ever been

no one told me about the rain

on your face

reign me in

 

let us begin.

her laugh was loudest

but i am your last-

hiding behind marvellous masks

they warned me about the cracks

on the floor

relax

 

we are fact.

your lights don't lie

and i am home-

i am perfection set in stone

no one thought to leave me

on that wall

let it be

 

you need me.

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a short story, thingy.. don't know what it is. but here it is:

 

My mouth moves to the unbelievable words. My lips form the breathtaking, backstabbing letters. Spelling them out perfect and clear. I still don’t understand them. And you’re long gone from the empty space inside of me. The hollow used to contain you, but now it is being replaced by something strained and itchy. I cannot for the love of God understand what is there now. But I don’t like it. I repeat the strange and confusing words you left on the porch of my heart. “I don’t love you anymore.”

 

And so the time passes. I spy on the stupid clock, thinking if I stare at it long enough, It’s going to stop, right? Right..?

 

My feet are dressed in green converse, as I hurry on the surface of the lake. I run as fast as the ice can carry me. You’re standing by a huge hole in the thick ice, and I try to scream at you to stay still and wait for me, but you’re not listening. And then you jump down into the freezing deadly water.

Maybe the nightmares mean I miss you. When you slip through the ice and die, maybe it’s my own brain forcing itself to think you’ve died, instead of just left me? Maybe. Either way, it still hurts.

 

I guess our relationship was always built on top of a deck of cards-house. And I assume our romance was always that fake, like an illusion. But now when it all has left with the summer, everything is cold and uncomfortable. I wonder what made me believe you ever loved me at all? Could it have been the “I don’t love you anymore” as you left, that made me think this over. Because when we were together, you never uttered the words “I love you”. But I guess you did after all.

 

I won't say it sucks. Not going to say it is too bad. Because it is truthfully as if something's died within me. My body is only an empty shell where my everything once were. And it is pure and raw torture without you.

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This is a story of a girl in pain

She was just standing in the rain

Whenever she got a chance to hide herself

It was a plesure that she'd never tell

 

Would she? Has she? Did she?

Will you ever know... Listen to the story

 

She got an oppurtunity to wake up

Her dream was just to be the top

But then again, she couldn't stop

Now shes just a girl or what?

 

I to lazy to write more...

 

 

that's really good Ana! :D <3

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You step into that special place in my heart

I tell you to stay still, don’t mess anything up

And you stay perfectly still for some time

When I’ve settled in and the paint has dried

 

You rip me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

 

You put on your plastic smiles

Promise forever and ever but the inc never dried

So the time passes by, your promise was never sworn

It cuts to the bone because I am all alone

 

You ripped me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

 

Abandonment, my worst enemy

Crawls closer and sets Its aim on me

And if you’re playing the charade

Why can’t I play a part too

But make-up cannot hide the tears I cry because of you

 

You ripped me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

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a short story, thingy.. don't know what it is. but here it is:

 

My mouth moves to the unbelievable words. My lips form the breathtaking, backstabbing letters. Spelling them out perfect and clear. I still don’t understand them. And you’re long gone from the empty space inside of me. The hollow used to contain you, but now it is being replaced by something strained and itchy. I cannot for the love of God understand what is there now. But I don’t like it. I repeat the strange and confusing words you left on the porch of my heart. “I don’t love you anymore.”

 

And so the time passes. I spy on the stupid clock, thinking if I stare at it long enough, It’s going to stop, right? Right..?

 

My feet are dressed in green converse, as I hurry on the surface of the lake. I run as fast as the ice can carry me. You’re standing by a huge hole in the thick ice, and I try to scream at you to stay still and wait for me, but you’re not listening. And then you jump down into the freezing deadly water.

Maybe the nightmares mean I miss you. When you slip through the ice and die, maybe it’s my own brain forcing itself to think you’ve died, instead of just left me? Maybe. Either way, it still hurts.

 

I guess our relationship was always built on top of a deck of cards-house. And I assume our romance was always that fake, like an illusion. But now when it all has left with the summer, everything is cold and uncomfortable. I wonder what made me believe you ever loved me at all? Could it have been the “I don’t love you anymore” as you left, that made me think this over. Because when we were together, you never uttered the words “I love you”. But I guess you did after all.

 

I won't say it sucks. Not going to say it is too bad. Because it is truthfully as if something's died within me. My body is only an empty shell where my everything once were. And it is pure and raw torture without you.

 

 

I don't know exactly what is good or bad about stories or anything, But I know whether or not I enjoyed reading them. Obviously I liked this, And the bold part damn near gave me chills. It was real great.

 

You step into that special place in my heart

I tell you to stay still, don’t mess anything up

And you stay perfectly still for some time

When I’ve settled in and the paint has dried

 

You rip me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

 

You put on your plastic smiles

Promise forever and ever but the inc never dried

So the time passes by, your promise was never sworn

It cuts to the bone because I am all alone

 

You ripped me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

 

Abandonment, my worst enemy

Crawls closer and sets Its aim on me

And if you’re playing the charade

Why can’t I play a part too

But make-up cannot hide the tears I cry because of you

 

You ripped me so hard apart

The sign where I wrote “me and you” is gone

And I see what everyone says hurts the most

Faith cannot heal my heart when a friend breaks me down

 

I don't know what's good or bad about poems either, But I think I can sense that you've improved! Everything is alive! Like a human, Like a person, Your emotions are breathing and that is pretty epic actually.

 

(I'm jealous)

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I don't know exactly what is good or bad about stories or anything, But I know whether or not I enjoyed reading them. Obviously I liked this, And the bold part damn near gave me chills. It was real great.

 

 

 

I don't know what's good or bad about poems either, But I think I can sense that you've improved! Everything is alive! Like a human, Like a person, Your emotions are breathing and that is pretty epic actually.

 

(I'm jealous)

 

 

 

 

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oOo, Found an old song I did a long time ago. you can tell it was during my teen years because its so depressing. it's almost embarrassing. epitome of self pity hah, well I'm still a teen but...i'm not in that "phase" anymore hah, the sun shines bright now a days.

 

master of breath and death

 

a moon holds a bad shadow

Resting it's light on top of the clouds

that are neither drifting or flying it's a night like this

that has safeties dying

 

i submit to this over rated world

i realize the rotten with the way of reason hurled

aside to dominate the righteous

and the forgotten

 

i grew tired

my inspiration, mired

in the hopelessness

 

i overwhelm

with aggravation

reserved for this revenge

of a realm

 

thank you soooo much! :D it's been so long since i've posted here, I've missed seeing everyone's talent on here! and that's really good! :P

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I seriously want this thread to have much more posts! and this is not a song or anything. just maybe like a spoken word thing

 

 

 

Tabaca

 

I draw the ghost

from the instrument

Because the ghost itself calms my soul

Is it a part of an architect

I'll never ever really ever know

 

I want to pull from the stars

The knowledges of good and evil

I want to eat the fruits

From the tree I was told not to consume

They think I'm crazy

Because I dance hazy

But it's them that cannot hear the tune

 

I want to find where

The betterment of evils begin

It's said we must to bad to do good

And I'm drenched in the waters of sin

 

I have a blood that was long before me

But I'm now in someone elses circle

What can I do, I know it's too late

Because now I'm in another circle

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I seriously want this thread to have much more posts! and this is not a song or anything. just maybe like a spoken word thing

 

 

 

Tabaca

 

I draw the ghost

from the instrument

Because the ghost itself calms my soul

Is it a part of an architect

I'll never ever really ever know

 

I want to pull from the stars

The knowledges of good and evil

I want to eat the fruits

From the tree I was told not to consume

They think I'm crazy

Because I dance hazy

But it's them that cannot hear the tune

 

I want to find where

The betterment of evils begin

It's said we must to bad to do good

And I'm drenched in the waters of sin

 

I have a blood that was long before me

But I'm now in someone elses circle

What can I do, I know it's too late

Because now I'm in another circle

 

this thread definitely needs more posts, like, definitely. bold is fave, chris, love it.

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I would sure like to post something here, but I have never written lyrics or poems, and so I've just settled for reading stuff you guys post here. But, I have to say that I really like your work Christopher. Like, pretty much everything I remember you posting in this thread. Keep at it, and one day I will rip you off for my own music.

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Idk, but I've been having serious writers block, so at least this is something. My hot topic guitar pic was the inspiration o.o

 

Rock The Arts

 

The type of music we live by is taken for granted

But all of the rest we just don't understand it

I'm gonna open your heart

Open your eyes

Look you will all look at the music as if your spies

 

You have to rock the arts

Keep on hearing music forever

 

When you open your eyes

Open them wide

Find the beat, look inside

You have to get lost in the music

Find the rhythm the vibe the power just use it

 

You have to rock the arts

Keep on hearing music forever

 

If you blame me

Oh no....

If you blame me

Oh no...

 

You have to rock the arts

Keep on hearing music forever

 

You have to just let go

Find the joy the power the love yeah the music

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I've just done a couple of lines for each one because I haven't finished them yet (they're all seperare songs) so I just gotta think of more and mix them together haha.

 

1.

My unspoken words fill this empty space,

They whisper in my ears their delicate words,

My breath is shaking,

These strings are breaking.

 

2.

Your eyes were once my light,

But they lead me into the darkness of your soul,

I was blinded,

Hidden by your shadow.

I thought it was you I knew beneath those lies,

I thought the truth was somewhere buried behind those eyes.

 

3.

Take my hand, fingers tight, I will promise you tonight,

That we'll sing until the winter sunshine dawns.

 

xD

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Ignore the chords:

 

C->F->G->Dsus2

 

My heart skips a beat, as those glorious feet

pirouette onto the dance floor

I don't mean to stare, but i'm in love with those moves

i just can't let go of this moment

 

i catch your eye, i remember that i

cannot, take another step towards you

I remind myself, that I'm deeply in love

It doesn't matter how far away she is

 

Am

 

D (C Shape) -> Bm -> Em

 

 

i can't ruin this again

i won't ruin this again

 

I wish you liked me, I swear you said you did

Make your fucking mind up.

I’ve got to let go, but I lean in to kiss

Your sweet scented lips

 

We’re tight in embrace, I’m spiralling down

Into an empty abyss

Of nobody to love, but just bodies to hold

This isn’t what I want

 

i can't ruin this again

i won't ruin this again

 

Fuck it, I’ll always be alone

There’s no helping me now

I’ve pushed away all my past lovers

And the futures looking worse.

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My heart skips a beat, as those glorious feet

pirouette onto the dance floor

I don't mean to stare, but i'm in love with those moves

i just can't let go of this moment

 

i catch your eye, i remember that i

cannot, take another step towards you

 

love that, dude.

 

 

i haven't written anything in so long, but i kind of miss it, so i'm trying to get back into it. slowly. painfully. and craply.

 

 

the morning laughed right in my face

the veins of these drains broke

my dreams and my taste

for all things sweet and all things complete and

you broke my bones but still won't leave

 

i believed in those gods and you believed in me

and i fell to the floor and knelt on my knees where

the answers once were but i felt the change and

we felt the days pass us right by

 

keep your eyes to the sky

as the sun keeps them dry

and the blood in the clouds bid us all goodnight

and i bid you goodbye and i wish you good life

 

but i wished once before when you let me survive

and it got me nowhere and we are both nowhere

and i don't know where this leaves us tonight;

 

you burned brighter than the brightest of streetlights

and you hit harder than the hardest of delights.

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VERSE 1:

If you think

Everything's fine (x4)

If you believe

We keep tryin' (x4)

Well...

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

VERSE 2:

If you think

Your still a friend (x4)

If you think

All is gonna mend (x4)

Well...

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

BRIDGE:

If you still live in the past

Nothing in your life will last

Everything you think you do

Isn't true, but

I'm gonna go on

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

 

 

^Repetitive, but fun

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VERSE 1:

If you think

Everything's fine (x4)

If you believe

We keep tryin' (x4)

Well...

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

VERSE 2:

If you think

Your still a friend (x4)

If you think

All is gonna mend (x4)

Well...

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

BRIDGE:

If you still live in the past

Nothing in your life will last

Everything you think you do

Isn't true, but

I'm gonna go on

 

CHORUS:

I'm gonna go on

Gonna go on (x5)

 

 

 

^Repetitive, but fun

 

 

 

Dude that could some type of pop hit. Just need some killer melodies right thur.

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Dude that could some type of pop hit. Just need some killer melodies right thur.

 

Lol, I have the chords written down since like the lyrics, are repetitive.

 

 

 

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I'm putting a new song i wrote here so i wont double post.

(Btw, this have little notes and three vocalists since i wrote it for my band)

 

SEE IT IN YOUR EYES

 

VERSE 1:

N: That twinkle in your eyes

The spark that connects to mine

Things were better then

L: And Worse now

N and L: And I try i try i try i try

 

CHORUS:

N, L, and me: But I cant see it in your eyes (x2)

N: But I cant see why (L: i still believe)

N: But I cant see why (L: the only thing on my mind)

Both: Is you you you you you you

 

VERSE 2:

N: That look on your face

No happiness to trace

I know im just crushing on you

But somewhere I know

Both: I'm not im not im not

 

CHORUS:

All 3: But I cant see it in your eyes (x2)

N: But I cant see why (L: i still believe)

N: But I cant see why (L: the only thing on my mind)

Both: Is you you you you you you

 

BRIDGE:

L: I know I miss you (x2)

Both: I know I miss you

 

CHORUS:

All 3: But I cant see it in your eyes (x6)

N: But I cant see why (L: i still believe)

N: But I cant see why (L: the only thing on my mind)

Both: Is you you you you you you

 

All Three: And I still cant see it in your eyes

(eyes like how hayley sings "you" in "all i wanted")

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This is currently untitled. I decided to tackle the subject of war a little. I wrote it in a structure that TDWP uses in their most recent album. I plan on playing this song for the new genre I invented (or I think I did) called AcoustiCore, lol.

 

 

Say hello to the existence

These are weapons hidden by anger

That hide what is truly there

Repay those that were once suffering

 

All I ask is to feed the crimson sky

The blood from all of the red-soaked rivers

 

Keeping in mind, all that is in protest

Keeping in mind, what this world has become

And all that we have given up on, now

Only the good eidolon is possible now

In this time only you can trust

 

This pain in the back of my throat

Engulfs the separation of both mind and thought

Is this the reason why we push forward?

Let them die, and get ready to continue

 

All I ask is to feed the crimson sky

The blood from all of the red-soaked rivers

 

Mannerism becomes equal to denial

For what has truly become of us

Beauty is now what war hides

In face, the beauty can only be seen when horror erupts

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chorus of a random song im working on:

 

i'm addicted to my own worst enemy

in love with the hater in front of me

i cant believe the pain you are

i cant believe the shame you are

all the tactics you've used on me

all the lies i finally see

shows im in love with an enemy.

 

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its about being in love with someone you consider not a friend, but an enemy, or in my case, someone who i'm too scared to be with and because of that, never will.

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New solo song I'll record sometime soon prolly, thinking of calling it 'iron sight'.

 

Peer down this sight and squeeze the kill

Tracked down to satisfy a fill

Wounded and bruised the bird began to sing

"Trade me this pot for a cage and I'll make you my king"

 

Encased in a cage made of gold

Giving the fabled illusion that I’ve sold

Something on my own

If merit brings meaning then I can't help feeling locked up

 

Peer out watch night turn into day

These jeweled bars ensure where I'll stay

"Dear Bird your songs have fallen ill"

"My boiling offer is standing still"

 

oh how i long to feel the wind

fulfill these wings from tail to chin

old songs of joy won't ride this breath

Give this bird flight or give me death

 

You can hear the already recorded stuff here if you're interested.

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