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not very good at all, just wanted to be the first to post ! :

 

look how far we've come

now this is where it ends;

overpowered by perfection

but we'll be fine.

 

we are the mould you fit in,

i'll take back what i'm owed

and i'll move on, i'll walk on by,

i'll break you right down.

 

that hit, that hit came so fast,

that hit, that hit will be your last,

right on cue; i'll never forget you.

 

this road goes on with no signs,

this path i'm on is not mine,

but it's designed to break you down.

 

i'll hit, i'll hit so fast,

this goodbye won't be our last,

and i'll break you right down,

right down.

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And here I thought Mr. browncoat would do one :nono:

 

Edit:

 

I Can Say

 

I have no one

And I thought I was happy

Seems I'm going to give in after all

 

This can't be fun

I have no one

I've never had a friend the last I recall

 

I won't know why

I wear a smile

Since the last time I was happy

I can say it's been awhile

 

Why Did You Leave

Now You're Long Gone

The Independent Self Of Me

Was All I Counted On

The Funny Thing Is I'm Sorry

 

I'll feed my pain

Over and over again

It seems that, That's what I want

 

I won't need the rain

And I won't need a friend

That idea only comes to me to taunt

 

I won't know how

To make your love mine

The last time I was here

I can say I thought I was fine

 

Why Did You Leave

What Have I Learned?

The Sympathetic Better Me

Is This What I've Earned

The Funny Thing Is Now

I Know I Was Never Sorry

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Very short poem. :)

 

 

I'm done with this,

I'm done with you,

you hit me where it hurts,

the disease is contagious,

Forget this!

I quit!

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Summers Gone

 

The girl of summer

Summer was all for her

She was my night time dream

or so it would seem

I can say I've seen her day

I can say she went away

I can say my heart was hers

I can say it was for her to play

 

Summer Dreams

And Everything

Those Were You

Or So It Seems

You Were All Mine

Just As I Was All Yours

But Now I'm Back Behind

Saying You Used To Be Mine

 

Your care so old and young

I've never had so much fun

In your bright face I found

The dreams that never won

After so many battles

You finally stopped just to submit

Don't know you know

They'll be there forever

Now you'll never ever forget

 

My Summer Dreams

Are A Used To Be

That Is You

Yes That's What It Seems

I Was Hers, For That I'm Sure

Now I'm Thought To Be Insane

Just Like Her

 

 

 

(This is pretty much "I Can Say" version two)

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Nothing Is Better Than Math Class

 

Crossing my fingers

And hoping that this will never end

Hoping for everything I want

I miss you now that it’s over

And I can’t wait to see you today

And though you are pushing away

I keep on wanting you

 

[chorus]

With every move I make

I can never take this heart and push it upon you

Never admit to you

I could never admit to you

Just exactly how I feel

 

That time of day

Is all I wait for

Just wanting to speak, to you

What a rush

What a joy

It’s just only to get my hopes up

 

[chorus]

 

One step and I’m afraid

Covering my face

I try to fix myself

If only I could know you

But I wait for the day

I still stay afraid

What can I say?

Are you what I want?

What I need?

 

[chorus]

 

My heart beats much faster

My movements become slower

My head pounds

My mouth drops

And I am struck in your beauty

For once in my life I feel right

Only when it’s you

 

 

 

Ack, I've a huge writer's block, so this is nothing great...

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This is a bunch of unfinished fragments to songs I never finished, or will never finish. So it may sound a bit bipolar.

 

Fitting all the right pieces together

Missing every single memory of you

Just wishing you were still here

To lighten up my day

 

Another day, another night

Of me wishing you away

But you are gone and I feel this under coming distress

 

I wished you were here

And I wished you were gone

 

Is there anything I can do to make things right?

Is there anything I can do to make things better?

In my life?

Or can I forget every single bit of determination

Of things that I cannot say

Open your heart

No more burdens to cross out my insides

 

Is it only me alone?

Nothing can cure this disease

All the things I didn’t say wont go away

Forget it in the end

 

Reaching out for you

You hold back as if you didn’t want to be saved

Get away, as you run away

If you cant stand me then why bother?

Could this be it, or am I falling?

My respiration could be, due to lack of communication

Is this what you wanted to happen?

I’m guessing not

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i had an emotional momment.

so i wrote a short thing.

i don't really know what to call it.

but it's true.

 

What happens:

When your is sinking so far under.

And you can't stop yourself from drowning

You try to find help them through the pain

But all it seems to go to waste

 

as you watch yourself fade

watch yourself fade

watch yourself fade

 

i just want to hold on to you

as letting go

would surely mean ending

my past, present and future

 

i've never felt so afraid

never so afraid

never so afraid

 

let me be free

of this pain that i see

and i'm drowning

going under

 

you just stand and watch

stand and watch

stand and watch.

 

i love you.

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i'll give up eating and take up smoking

and learn to hate the life i forgot i'm living

i swear i got soul,

but i gave up breathing.

 

close the door, i keep on leaving,

wide open the same way i came in

i swear i've got soul

but i gave up believing.

 

i heard what you said

but not the meaning

close your eyes and start explaining

please ? i'm pleading,

explain the love i keep on,

keep on bleeding

 

i swear i got soul

but i gave up freedom

i swear i got soul

but i gave up feeling.

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i'll give up eating and take up smoking

and learn to hate the life i forgot i'm living

i swear i got soul,

but i gave up breathing.

 

close the door, i keep on leaving,

wide open the same way i came in

i swear i've got soul

but i gave up believing.

 

i heard what you said

but not the meaning

close your eyes and start explaining

please ? i'm pleading,

explain the love i keep on,

keep on bleeding

 

i swear i got soul

but i gave up freedom

i swear i got soul

but i gave up feeling.

 

I LOVE THIS. This time I'm serious, The way I was thinking of my new one this one kinda of gave it this melody. I love the "eeding" things to it. It's great

 

 

 

 

Admit it, You Did It

 

You know what they'll do

Will only ever make or break us

Will we give them our pride

Have we lied, When we let them take us

 

What were our truths

And was it ever right?

Are we afraid of confusion

So much, That we lived in the night?

 

The darkness of suspense

I'll be too scared to admit it

When did this fallacy start

Who thought of this, And who did it?

Listen to the sounds

As they find other ways to think for you

Play with your blame

Find the same eyes, Deep in despise

Play with the fault

Like it's your game

Everything will always stay the same

 

Is this who I love

The one who took my vow

The one whose push grew to a shove?

Your strong love

Turned into a strong hate

Isn't this your fashion?

I've made a wrong move

I'll finally admit it

You've made the right move

With your hateful reaction

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Jorgi, that was amazing :uhh: and...ehm.. Ernie, I kinda stole one of those unfinished fragments of songs, hope you don't mind, I was inspired by it.. I borrowed this one:

 

I wished you were here

And I wished you were gone

 

soo, this is what I came up with..

 

 

i'm talking to the image

of my own reflection

mirror, mirror on the wall

who was it that i wanted to hold

 

hold in my arms

feeling the electric love

i wished you were here

and i wished you were gone

so instead of having the cookie

it ate itself

 

so why did i blow it

feeling so unsure

memories of a person

that i used to know before

 

dear reflection of myself

did i let myself drown

or did i let the world drown

with me stuck in the empty nothingness left

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not very good at all, just wanted to be the first to post ! :

 

look how far we've come

now this is where it ends;

overpowered by perfection

but we'll be fine.

 

we are the mould you fit in,

i'll take back what i'm owed

and i'll move on, i'll walk on by,

i'll break you right down.

 

that hit, that hit came so fast,

that hit, that hit will be your last,

right on cue; i'll never forget you.

 

this road goes on with no signs,

this path i'm on is not mine,

but it's designed to break you down.

 

i'll hit, i'll hit so fast,

this goodbye won't be our last,

and i'll break you right down,

right down.

 

i reallly like it . awesome jorgi (:

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^Jorgi is the master of this thread. We others are like students. Jorgi owns us all.

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I Have Cobra Pride:

I have Cobra pride,

Cobra Starship on the sly.

Kiss my sass and Guilty pleasure,

it makes me dance while under pressure.

When they play music it's a hit,

I love every second of it.

Fangs Up high, and Starship low,

I love you Cobra Starship, GO! GO! GO!

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Did this right after I woke up when I forgot to set up my curtains.

 

 

 

The sun awoke me

It told me of what to do

It spoke to me with it's glare

Way up there

How could it be me and you

 

The sun crept into my room

And kissed my face

The understanding flash

It falls so fast

The sun in my place

 

Blue skies confusion flies

Up around all around the stars

We'll give it what we have

Even life, Anything that won't be ours

 

Love, Above, I've had enough

Of what and where and why

We could never build this place

Of ground and water and sky

Take with you lies, Taught all over

Everything fantasy learned

Teach death, Teach life

Teach anything I think is absurd

 

We're the children of the sun

Making right of wrong with fun

We're the children that can't be won

The sun is done so here's the moon

Eyes, Despise all lost in skies

We're taught to walk so soon

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APATHETIC

 

Look...

Brown eyes bloodshot and glazed.

She's been crying.

Silver streaks still stain her face.

Dried evidence of salene pain.

Do you see it?

Can you feel the salt burning behind her lids?

 

Look...

Soft lips half parted in a wordless plea.

She's been shouting.

Her anguished cries still echo in her soul.

Even when her very voice goes silent.

Do you hear it?

Can you feel the skin inside her throat grow raw?

 

Look...

Bloodied hands extended out.

She's been reaching.

Trying to touch what she can't see.

And searching for what she can't scream.

Do you like it?

Can you bear to see her crawling blindly in the dark?

 

Will you help her up?

Will you wipe her eyes and clean her wounds?

Will you save her?

 

Look...

Brown eyes staring out unseeingly.

She's been broken.

Her soft lips cease to speak.

Her hurt hands no longer reach.

Did you want this?

Could you have stopped it if you tried?

 

If you had picked her up.

If you had dried her eyes and healed her wounds.

You could have saved her.

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Black oceans will bring pain

And the angry tide

We tell time of my kind

The true dreamers

 

I will lead who ever

Who ever wishes to follow

I'll lead through a sea of uncertainty

So we all will achieve our dreams

 

I know others have tried before

But I know what lies beyond that door

A place were we can live free

And just live to dream

 

I will lead who ever

Who ever wishes to follow

I'll open doors

That were closed before

 

We were born to succeed

And not live cowering in fear

We were born to succeed

And free our dreams

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Thank you i have alot of others on the website in my sig

 

Oh My mind

it kills itself everyday

So I can't take another crying

No please not another dieing

 

Oh let my troubles be my troubles

Let me search through the rubble

For fragments of my mind

But theres some I'll never find

 

But I'll search forever

Until things get better

I'll search forever

I just pray things get better

 

Oh let my troubles be my troubles

Let me search trough the rubble

For fragments of my mind

But theres some I'll find

 

They say everything takes time

But this has taken to long

But I'm still searching

When I know there gone

 

Oh let my troubles be my troubles

Let me search trough the rubble

But Im afraid this isn't a way to live

People have taken alot and

I've nothing left to give

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I LOVE THIS. This time I'm serious, The way I was thinking of my new one this one kinda of gave it this melody. I love the "eeding" things to it. It's great

 

Jorgi, that was amazing :uhh: [/b][/i]

 

i reallly like it . awesome jorgi (:

 

^Jorgi is the master of this thread. We others are like students. Jorgi owns us all.

 

you guys make me happy inside.<3

 

 

am actually going through epic writer's block. i'm fighting through to pretty shocking results, but fighting nontheless:

 

draw hearts and stars

up and down our arms,

'cause the real ones are far too high

for us to reach.

trace those lips with fingertips;

it's just too late to leave.

 

when the rain gets loud enough,

we'll stand and scream our lungs out.

we'll stand and scream our lives out,

out loud so they'll know we lived

(at least once, if not forever)

 

stand on the edge of rooftops,

closer to the sky, that way, you said,

deny the way we fall that way,

we're broken but we're still beautiful

alone but we're still usefull.

 

when you figure this out, let me know

when you figure me out, let me go

because we're broken but we're still beautiful

we're alive but we can still lose it all

just let me know.

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