The Song/Poem/Writing Thread - Part 2

[777]

Trevor, That is real cool. Makes me jealous.

[Trevor]

thanks guys

 

The chorus is a metaphor for someone who's surrounded by amazing things, but is unable to move forward- hence the gold cage. It's my life story right now haha! The verses were written around it more as an analogy of my take on the music business.

[Trevor]

new one, im not bitter i swear

 

wake up you're alone again

despite the man that's in your bed

there's no sympathy

when you settled on settling - so

wake up and tie down your shoes

the everyday has become old news

don't you dare start to cry

come to terms with this mediocre life

-

no time will ever be enough to mend

the wounds you left when you decided you belonged to him

i'll try my best to erase you from my mind

but you can't make love go away

-

join your hands, now with hands your hearts.

repressed emotions play the part

my hats off to you

for this performance said "i do"

don't stop now keep your smile wide

never forget your alibi

you and love are thick as thieves

so bite your tongue and, feign the weakened knees

-

when the day is done and you lay your head down

end the scene

tell me who's face it is when you close your eyes

and start to dream

 

[Erin]

Chris (C!) told me I should post this here so...

 

so young, so naive,

being taught what to believe,

deep down I know what's near,

so I wait, alone with fear.

 

prayers have become victims of fate,

all the love i had has turned to hate,

and i after all that you do,

i still wait for what was promised by you,

 

so young, so naive,

starting to doubt what i used to believe,

wondering what i should do,

i used to look for answers from you.

 

now everything is new.

[nickkk]

i will live (it's really akward...its about all my past loves, my relationship right now, and some other stuff going on...)

 

now i'm afraid to fall alseep.

my only fear is if i see you in my dreams.

 

the bone chilling feel when you enter the room is inhuman.

i can't bare to say i'm alone.

the warmth of regret fills in my heart when you leave.

the light has already shone.

 

if my love hadn't burnt out

would you have stayed?

would you have never been replaced?

all the lies that i hear

are only about you, dear

i just want you back

 

the gentle mixture of love and pain

i feel as i scream your name

its like a window, brittle but clear

i can feel you all the time, but i know your never coming here

 

if my love hadn't burnt out

would you have stayed?

would you have never been replaced?

all the lies that i hear

are only about you, dear

i just want you back

 

i have to keep alert in my own head

to make sure you will stay clear from my mind

i think about you all the time

but you wont be back

 

i have to be sure that i will never fall in love again

i no longer believe

i've watched people decieve

and now its happened to me

 

if my love hadn't burnt out

would you have stayed?

would you have never been replaced?

all the lies that i hear

are only about you, dear

i just want you back

 

you are my everything

but now your gone

like a perfect chord longly forgotten

the sweetest song is the sound of your voice

wil i ever hear it? i no longer have a choice.

 

dear, you weren't my first love

but now im a hell of a lot sure you are my last

i will no longer live in the past

or the future

 

i will live for my own life

not for yours

i will live for my band

stop doing lovesick chores

i will live for my friends

joking around, calling you a whore

i will live for family

i need to see them more

i will live for my life

glad you've walked out the door.

i will live.

[Echelonforever]

now i'm afraid to fall alseep.

my only fear is if i see you in my dreams.

 

the bone chilling feel when you enter the room is inhuman.

i can't bare to say i'm alone.

the warmth of regret fills in my heart when you leave.

the light has already shone.

 

if my love hadn't burnt out

would you have stayed?

would you have never been replaced?

all the lies that i hear

are only about you, dear

i just want you back

 

the gentle mixture of love and pain

i feel as i scream your name

its like a window, brittle but clear

i can feel you all the time, but i know your never coming here

 

This is seriously incredible! It explains like exactly how I'm feeling right now.

[nickkk]

This is seriously incredible! It explains like exactly how I'm feeling right now.

 

thanks. i just wrote this song about every emotion i basically ever felt...

its about a lot of conflicting stuff all around me...like love, and family issues, and past loves, and friendships, and damn my life is confusing.

[777]

Yeah you could stretch all of that into a novel or something, epic!

[Erin]

before we know it, words won't mean a thing,

bombs and bullets will do all the talking,

peace will be a thing of the past,

it's a shame that it's happening so fast

 

everywhere we look there's war,

people using weapons to settle the score,

where do we draw the line,

an eye for an eye leaves the whole world blind.

 

when darkness is all that remains,

will we realize we’re to blame?

And when everything fades to black,

will we realize there’s no going back?

 

everywhere we look there's war,

people using weapons to settle the score,

where do we draw the line,

an eye for an eye leaves the whole world blind.

 

day in and day out,

more deaths to cry about,

time and time again,

Lord, help us, amen.

[nickkk]

Just A Love Song (<- working title)

 

i think i'm stuck in the middle again

i'm not sure how to get out

all i know is that i want you

that i'm being selfish and untrue

 

i think i should take a class on this

i dont wanna let anyone down

don't know which was is right

that im going both paths tonight

 

i think i am being a selfish fake

i feel a passion, so infinite and sweet

i only know you don't feel the same way

that you chose them over me

 

you won't know how i feel

you wont ever know how i feel

to be with somebody else

as you already are

you dont know how confusing it is

to be in love with you

and be with someone else

 

i know that you share your flares

with somebody else

no body ever cares

if this game is unfair

 

i know that i am jealous

that im acting stupid

you wont ever see this song

or by the time you do my love'll be gone

 

i know that i am still learning

the ropes to everything

that im still the new kid

who is just a friend

 

you won't know how i feel

you wont ever know how i feel

to be with somebody else

as you already are

you dont know how confusing it is

to be in love with you

and be with someone else

 

i wish i could know how

everything would turn out

if i would have you

or still be untrue

 

i wish i could see your thoughts

find out what you see

if i am just so confused

or if there's something more to me

 

i wish i could find out

why you chose the other

because i know that

they aren't who you want

 

you won't know how i feel

you wont ever know how i feel

to be with somebody else

as you already are

you dont know how confusing it is

to be in love with you

and be with someone else

 

i hope you dont know this

maybe you will soon

but all im sure of

im not ready to let you know

 

i hope it doesnt last

so i will have a chance

and by the way

i really hate this annoying state of mind

 

i hope it doesnt last

on both ends

and by the way, i'm sorry to say

but your lover is gay

 

you won't know how i feel

you wont ever know how i feel

to be with somebody else

as you already are

you dont know how confusing it is

to be in love with you

and be with someone else

 

and you will never know me

and you will never know this kills me

and you will never know my jealousy

[Wildman]

This is a song my friend and I are working on, there are a lot of lyrical changes to this, but I wrote the majority of it.

 

Are You Aware?

 

I don't know if it's right or if it's wrong

I don't know if I'm good enough for you

Are you aware of the trouble I go through?

Are you aware of the lies I say for you?

 

Go away, run and hide

From the pain I'm living in

But the sensation of the pain is what I need

What I truly need

 

Is this all I have to do?

All the lies that follow you

Am I enough?

Or am I going out of my fucking mind

 

Here's the words and the voices

That cloud our heads in shame

Is it real or is it out of my reach

Hate today... For today... This is the day

 

Go away, run and hide

From this pain I'm living in

But the sensation of this pain is what I need

What I truly need

What I truly need

 

I don't know if it's right or if it's wrong

I don't know if I'm good enough for you

Are you aware of the trouble I go through?

Are you aware of the lies I say for you?

[777]

Chris (C!) told me I should post this here so...

 

so young, so naive,

being taught what to believe,

deep down I know what's near,

so I wait, alone with fear.

 

prayers have become victims of fate,

all the love i had has turned to hate,

and i after all that you do,

i still wait for what was promised by you,

 

so young, so naive,

starting to doubt what i used to believe,

wondering what i should do,

i used to look for answers from you.

 

now everything is new.

 

 

 

I love how easily it is for me to understand that a mistake is teaching you something righteous or either something sinister but either way is for your benefit. My favourite part is "Prayers have become victims of fate, All the love I had has turned to fate" that part hits home with me and yeah sure the rhyme is real close and is always a "ABAB" rhyming scheme but I forget about that during reading.

 

Either way when someone reads this (poem) it's all about their eyes and what appeals to them. Their interpretation only reveals to them themselves so thats why I enjoy this one.

 

 

And Ernie Ball, That is real awesome. I'd quote it but I don't know how to do it in an edit!

[Jorgi]

i didn't know if we could find it

but you shone bright enough to blind me.

the sun sets on the stairs where she sat

and counted the cars

underneath the dreams

with the flames and the stars-

you are enough.

 

well i flew high but you saw me,

you clipped my wings but

the glory lives on.

we're left where the sun lights you up

like the gold in your eyes

and the wind held me close

from the leaves and the liars-

i am enough.

 

we are the flaws in all the best laid plans,

and i am floored by the worst of demands

but it's enough.

[777]

Good of you to leave one at least Jorgi.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

playing songs of mine ain't as fun now

Listening to your voice makes me insane

Friday night was my night to be me again

But I cracked that bitch another in the end

Pretty tied up in my fragile frustations

Cause I cracked that prick another one again

 

Caught in my smile

Yeah I know it's fake

Caught for a while

Yeah I know I'm going to hell

Far be it, Their understanding long away

 

I ain't leaving here

Until every ear has given way to my say

 

There was a time when I thought she was the one

Then time went by and no longer was it fun

Friday night was my night to be me again

Bitch cracked me one I deserved it

Don't you think?

 

Paralyzed now

By the shock of sheol again

Fucking hell I must have paved the way

[Jorgi]

nice of you to leave one too, chris... ha

 

I ain't leaving here

Until every ear has given way to my say

 

...

Friday night was my night to be me again

Bitch cracked me one I deserved it

Don't you think?

 

...

 

Fucking hell I must have paved the way

 

that's rad, by the way

[777]

oh snap woops

[Wildman]

New poem.

 

Wasted

 

Wasted

Jumped into a body of water

Wasted

Got shot by some mob boss

Wasted

Got blown up in a car wreck

Wasted

 

GTA much?

[777]

sorry D:

 

 

 

 

 

Whatever makes you happy

Could make me happy as well

I know you're an angel

A messenger of some kind

Took me five minutes to notice

You were in my mind

I'm always searching for a way

And then again I find

Just another way to say

I don't belong where I want to be

Don't belong to me

 

I always live my life

On a border line

Balancing life and death

Inhale just to exhale another crime

I always live my life

On borrowed time

After the start

And before the end

Again I lost my mind

Just when I decided

I don't belong where I want to be

And don't belong to me

[holleh]

A close friend of mine recently passed away from an overdose. I wasn't really planning on posting this, but decided why not, right?

 

This dirty ballroom dance floor,

Houses just us two,

In a promising escapade,

Lined up like new.

But the days were numbered,

Weeks were short,

And none of us could tell,

That other than a regular morning,

An illness, my friend befell.

And the last I spoke,

Was heartfelt and true,

Sympathetic in nature,

Positive in virtue.

But this conversation seems come and gone,

With only clouds to blame,

For the miscommunication,

That belittles all but your name.

See we were two you couldn't part,

A red sea amongst the blue,

And if I had another chance,

I'd reach across to you.

From the kitchen counter,

Where we stood and said our prayers,

Like humble little gentlemen,

A folly of fumbled errors.

With the miscarriage placed in between our feet,

These words were not enough,

To truthfully withstand a bond,

That no man can overcome.

A lust for something more in life,

A thirst for what's not there.

A pleasantry of morbid taste,

A pleasure we don't dare.

But in the midnight hours friend,

We took to things in stride,

For every time the sun came up,

There were still things left untried.

A little here, a little there,

A pact made through and through,

But now I can't go back on this,

I can't see past to you.

The fog that falls on me is thick,

And dense with problems unsolved.

Where did we go wrong?

When the world stopped turning for those precious moments,

Where did we turn on?

When did substance turn into sustenance,

And when did we forget,

That in our lives we owed ourselves,

To move past that little threat,

Of doubt and chaos and the seeds that bind,

Us to our little craft on oceans bare,

A vessel hard to find?

When did the current pick up fast and when did we part ways?

How many times did I count sheep backwards,

To move in reverse so many days?

And now I see you all the time,

In a place I know too well.

"A bright light shines on those who wait,"

My friend, only time will tell.

If you're there, save me a seat,

And pick the best guitar.

Pump up the crowd and tell them all,

I can see them from afar.

Hold your breath and count to three,

And if the light sure shineth there,

Then you'll be seeing me.

(Eventually)

[nickkk]

Teach Me

 

(Ow...)

You were tired, confused, and careful

Believing its the best for you

I would rather bleed the wrath of one thousand seas

Then to realize there's a world without you and me

I will use this knowledge you gave me today

To figure everything out, to figure this world out

 

Did anyone tell you life was easy?

I won't believe them if I were you

Broken bottles to stab our blackened hearts

Because there's no living left to do

Love you no more

Love you no more

 

You were happy, fun, and beautiful

Believing the pain has stopeed

I would rather live the life of two million moons

Then you realize everything's wrong when it comes to you

Stay far away, stay farther away

 

Did anyone tell you life was easy?

I won't believe them if I were you

Broken bottles to stab our blackened hearts

Because there's no living left to do

Love you no more

Love you no more

 

(Three billion things I've left undone)

You can't see the wizard if the movie's not real

I'm not anyone

But all I need is you

All I need is you

 

Did anyone tell you life was easy?

I won't believe them if I were you

Broken bottles to stab our blackened hearts

Because there's no living left to do

Love you no more

Love you no more

 

Not sure if anyone said it was hard

But I don't believe anyone but me

 

Life without you is better than our past

Pain, pain, pain

Everybody feels it

Pain, pain, pain

How about you?

[777]

Absolutely my favorite.

 

Experience talks in this one.

 

Edit: Ahh wth I'll edit another in here.

 

 

 

 

You chose war

And will kill tonight

Won't you know God in fright?

Down the path of time you'll go

Red blood in the river flow

 

Polished steel reveals to you

Delivered death

Inside of you

You chose a path not much will go

Dark red blood in the river flow

[Linney]

A close friend of mine recently passed away from an overdose. I wasn't really planning on posting this, but decided why not, right?

 

This dirty ballroom dance floor,

Houses just us two,

In a promising escapade,

Lined up like new.

But the days were numbered,

Weeks were short,

And none of us could tell,

That other than a regular morning,

An illness, my friend befell.

And the last I spoke,

Was heartfelt and true,

Sympathetic in nature,

Positive in virtue.

But this conversation seems come and gone,

With only clouds to blame,

For the miscommunication,

That belittles all but your name.

See we were two you couldn't part,

A red sea amongst the blue,

And if I had another chance,

I'd reach across to you.

From the kitchen counter,

Where we stood and said our prayers,

Like humble little gentlemen,

A folly of fumbled errors.

With the miscarriage placed in between our feet,

These words were not enough,

To truthfully withstand a bond,

That no man can overcome.

A lust for something more in life,

A thirst for what's not there.

A pleasantry of morbid taste,

A pleasure we don't dare.

But in the midnight hours friend,

We took to things in stride,

For every time the sun came up,

There were still things left untried.

A little here, a little there,

A pact made through and through,

But now I can't go back on this,

I can't see past to you.

The fog that falls on me is thick,

And dense with problems unsolved.

Where did we go wrong?

When the world stopped turning for those precious moments,

Where did we turn on?

When did substance turn into sustenance,

And when did we forget,

That in our lives we owed ourselves,

To move past that little threat,

Of doubt and chaos and the seeds that bind,

Us to our little craft on oceans bare,

A vessel hard to find?

When did the current pick up fast and when did we part ways?

How many times did I count sheep backwards,

To move in reverse so many days?

And now I see you all the time,

In a place I know too well.

"A bright light shines on those who wait,"

My friend, only time will tell.

If you're there, save me a seat,

And pick the best guitar.

Pump up the crowd and tell them all,

I can see them from afar.

Hold your breath and count to three,

And if the light sure shineth there,

Then you'll be seeing me.

(Eventually)

 

wow, this is golden absolutely amazing!

[SephieVampire]

Okay, every one of these are awesome!

I, myself love to write poems that don't ryhme.. Hahaa...

I have been told that they are good enough to make into lyrics.

Heck one of them i posted on another site was read and the person who read it thought it was done my a professional.

I am no Professional though. i am just your normal (sometimes) teenage girl..

But weldone everyone! and keep it all up..

We have some very talented people here..

[nickkk]

Trying a new-ish style of writing, kind of like for a conceptive album.

 

In Wonderland

 

Happy unbirthday

Today is your lucky day

Will you be sorry to stay?

Are you sorry to stay?

We'll it won't be okay

 

In way over her head...

Celeste! Celeste! Celeste!

As I call your name you still won't come back!

Celeste! Celeste! Celeste!

Are you still jealous of Juilet?

Juilet means nothing, it's not the end!

We could raise the undead

Or so I said, Celeste.

 

Come back to us

Come back to us

Your words like burning fire

They are oh so dire

Just give them a chance.

 

In way over her head...

Celeste! Celeste! Celeste!

As I call your name you still won't come back!

Celeste! Celeste! Celeste!

Are you still jealous of Juilet?

Juilet means nothing, it's not the end!

We could raise the undead

Or so I said, Celeste.

 

She's in her wonderland

Just won't understand what is best.

Just won't know who to trust...

 

Celeste, celeste, celeste

Come out from inside your head

We'll raise the undead

And forget Juilet

Celeste, celeste, celeste.

 

Please come back.

[MarMaramore]

i forgot how amazing you all are.

geez.

holleh, awesome.

 

wrote this about... 8 months ago.

you can talk all you want,

and i'll still feel alone,

because on my own is where i am,

and on my own is home.

you can write all you want

and i'll still feel so tired

'cause a letter is only half as good

as your little post-it smile.

And you say that you miss me

And you say, "it can't be the same"

And you tell me, it's no different

Than the other times you forgot my name.

You've taught me a valuable lesson

You know I won't soon forget

You taught me to design these walls of steel

And never to trust again...

when I look up and I see

My wrists, arms, and legs bound, along with my feet

I know who to thank

I know who's pullin' my strings

And where they want me.

Put words

In my mouth

And tell me

To stand out

Of the crowd

In which I'm stuck

"Well, you never had the beest luck, kid"