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hey mariah i really like that^ poem of yours - out of interest, where is the last line you quote from ("Well, you never had the beest luck, kid")?

 

Also, your sig is brilliant - did you design that yourself?

 

 

I was dating someone and they told me that I've never really had the best luck.

So I quoted them.

I just sort of found the heart on photobucket. But as far as the phrase goes, it's just this gay-kid quote. (:

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yea just meant the image, tis funky!

 

right, this is my first poem post so please let me know what you think.

 

Young Love

 

Exultant times,

Inseparable.

We were young loves,

Quintessential.

 

Our passion radiated,

Hot-yellow sun beams.

Your mind, body and soul,

My every dream.

 

In the thousands of memories,

I swim and bask.

I relish each thought of you,

To the very last.

 

I would die now,

To be in your embrace.

I love you, how

did we get to this place?

 

Forever you're lost,

I tore you apart.

Why do I not search?

Ouch.

My unripened heart.

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I would have thought you'd have been doing poems all your life! You have the array of words to keep it interesting the flow is quite the same so it's not an ocean to drink. It's really great!

 

 

 

 

Space Dust

 

No matter how many tears

The earth cries

Doesn't matter

As to the number of the wishes

Nothing will bring you back

The clouds beneath your feet

And the stars themselves at your neck

With nothingness as your seat

The skies and our love

Still lay beneath your feet

 

You found out the secret

And why they keep it

The dead themselves

Without the alive to see it

We're here we're the living

You're on your journey

On a loop of light

Repeated

 

 

 

That's for anyone who knows someone very dear that has died.

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mike and chris, they're beautiful :)

i haven't written anything in so long, so this is gross

 

 

 

sunrise and moonlies -

 

money says it better than the l.u.s.t. i speak in letters

and the car lights highlight your star-spangled eyes

you can't forget her but don't think

i'll let you go as easily as this - you exceed me

in all by my fist in your face - i couldn't have put it any other way;

i wish i knew what i'd do without you

 

i love the way your heart beats and the feet

you tap all over my broken teeth

the honey dripped from your eyes and into my life

i'll look for luck if you shut the fuck up - we're both stuck in this

and i miss nothing but the way that you taste - i wouldn't have it any other way;

where would we be without us

 

so we'll sit and we'll drink as they express the unexpected

and i'll assess the unaffected - don't think

we've fooled them for one single second - we expect the unimpressive;

this is a message.

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Space Dust

 

No matter how many tears

The earth cries

Doesn't matter

As to the number of the wishes

Nothing will bring you back

The clouds beneath your feet

And the stars themselves at your neck

With nothingness as your seat

The skies and our love

Still lay beneath your feet

 

You found out the secret

And why they keep it

The dead themselves

Without the alive to see it

We're here we're the living

You're on your journey

On a loop of light

Repeated

 

 

 

That's for anyone who knows someone very dear that has died.

that's beautiful <3

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This isn't a song or a poem, but this is my attempt at a novel that I tried writing my freshman year. Tell me if you think its good, if it is, I'll continue on writing it. (Also, ignore the grammar errors)

 

The Angelic

By R. Ernest Wimperis

 

 

 

Prologue

 

Only the good may posses it, but all evil cannot. But if there was no evil, every body will. But now the people who don’t have it kill to have it. But it all comes at a cost, for the people that do, they are able to pass to the evil. There are different types of this, but there is one of them that is different, this one has been given through vicarious love.

 

The truth is, many good people have no right to own it, not even all the Gods and Goddesses of this world. But that changes. The holy spirits do not earn them, they kill innocent lives for them. All can save lives but the thing is, very few even decide to use them.

 

One person can change everything, if you let them breakaway and give them the chance.

 

 

Chapter 1: First step living life not knowing, Second step, living life and knowing

 

The sky was just turning blue in the early morning, the cool summer morning breeze was just settling in its place. In the deep wood of the town of Tihuyb lay a peaceful home with a brick chimney and a stone outside and a roof made of straw. About a quarter mile from the home was a young man and an older man chopping wood for fire at night. The young man had red hair, and a slight amount of freckles, he was a little thinner than his father that had graying red hair.

 

As that breeze blew, it rustled the sweat on young Xeno’s back. “Dad, I’m supposed to meet Morkro later this morning to go hunting for wild boar.†Xeno’s father turned around to look at him. “I tell you Xeno, there is something about that boy, I don’t trust.â€

 

“He seems like an all right guy to be around,†Xeno replied defensively. “He just moved here and I feel we should be more welcoming to him.†His father turned around and looked at Xeno with a shine of worry in his eyes and said. “Son, does that boy have a gem?â€

 

“And what if he doesn’t, would you hate him? Listen, I’m 16 I think I can fend for myself, he’s younger than me, he’s what 14 going on 15. We also have much in common, we met in town by the butcher shop when I was delivering boar, he also—†Xeno was cut off by his father. “Are you sure he that young, looks can be deceivingâ€

 

“Well dad, you know, even if he hurts me, you know what will happen.†Xeno’s dad kindly replied. “Even so you’ll still be in pain.â€

 

“It’s okay, anyway I’m going to go now†Xeno said.

 

“Be careful son†as his father waved him goodbye

 

Xeno scurried off toward the house to grab his weapon and ropes and what not. Soon after he left and met Morkro by the butcher’s where they met.

 

***

“So, you’re here, its about time,†said a snarled voice toward Xeno.

 

The voice of the person was Morkro, he had black hair and seemed to be oriental, and he was pretty tall for his age and had a worn down gray robe, in which his weapon hung from his belt.

 

“I got here as fast as I could,†said the young out-of-breath Xeno. As Xeno stopped rubbing his cramped side. “The butcher said he wanted us to get him at least two boar, he’ll pay us 43 ralst for each one we kill and 14 extra if we skin it,†said the voice to Xeno.

 

“That seems cool with me,†Xeno said, “and what is the weapon you intend to use Morkro?†Asked Xeno as he turned to Morkro. Morkro replied, “I have a long sword dagger, and what’s that, a thin sword. What a worthless piece of metal.â€

 

“It was my mother’s, she gave it to my father to give to me when I turned 14, I’ve had this sword for a couple years, it’s probably—â€

 

“Time is wasting, let’s go before the butcher cuts the deal,†Morkro said as he started to walk away. “Hey wait up for me.â€

 

The two young men traveled a bit before they reached to the forest a quarter mile away north, and all of a sudden they heard a rustling noise move behind them then all of a sudden a giant boar, well over three feet tall came running toward both Xeno and Morkro.

 

“Look out!†Xeno shouted as he pushed Morkro out of the way.

 

“I could of handled it myself, watch where your going and—ugh,†Morkro said as he shielded the boar away with his sword.

 

The two young men were fighting this odd boar, it had shielded armor siding and horns and long tusks. The boar was pushing them deeper and deeper into the forest. Soon Xeno stood back held his ground and focused all his mind on his sword and suddenly his sword was flashing a greenish yellow aura of light and all of a sudden, he took a slash at the air in the direction of the boar, breaking off all the armor at that particular boar, leaving it vulnerable as Morkro finished it off.

 

“How the heck did you do that, you must have been very focused,†Morkro said surprised. “I eat my fruits and vegetables,†Xeno replied jokingly.

 

“Ha ha funny, you’re a real jokester now†Morkro said a little agitated. “Hmmf.â€

 

“Well, I guess you cant can’t do that with your ‘long sword dagger’†Xeno said back to him, like he seemed to be the better man. “Your just jealous of me and my intense skills passed down my—†his voice trailed off.

 

“Boys, settle down,†said a calm welcoming woman’s voice.

 

“Oh hi Ashley†Xeno said as he recuperated, himself from joking around.

 

Ashley walked by Xeno, and sat down on a tree stump. She was beautiful; she had short brown hair, brown eyes, and an appealing shape to her. She had a smooth smile and thin cheeks. “So Xeno, is this Morkro?†She said calmly.

 

“Why not just ask me, I’m right here, I hope you know that!†Morkro said rudely. “Anyway, Susie, are you single.â€

 

“My name is not Susie, and I’m not interested, I have my eyes on one of the villagers†Ashley said. Xeno sighed and looked down. “What wrong Xeno?†Ashley said sincerely.

 

“I… just… wanted a, um, bigger boar†Xeno said depressingly slow. “Oh, so the two of you were hunting. You know my views on hunting and killing.â€

 

“Well how much ralst do you make doing nothing?†Sneered Morkro as he sat down by the trunk of a tree a couple feet from Xeno and Ashley. “So Yvette, how come you’re here. And… how old are you, ma’am maybe sometime we could—†Morkro was cut off by Ashley. “First of all I’m 17 and I’m far too old for you, and I came here because my silly brother’s armoring experiment of some boar went awfully wrong and went into the forest, so would this of happened to of been that boar?â€

 

“It did have some sort of shield but I decinegrated went I destroyed it with my focused energy.†Xeno said exiting from his depression.

 

“I thought we were hunting,†Morkro said, “you, Sally, do you have a weapon of something, can you heal, cast spells or what?â€

 

“I heal and I’m good at it too, but I’m not a full fledged healer yet,†said Ashley, “even so, you guys go out on your own, I’ll go back and tell my brother.†Soon after Ashley left with a wave good-bye and the two young men headed on their way once again, after bringing the boar to the butcher and went off.

 

***

“Stay here and be quiet,†Xeno whispered, as they slipped behind a tree

 

“Hey Xeno, let me tell you something,†Morkro whispered gently.

 

“Can it wait, we must continue, or we’ll have no ralst to split,†Xeno whispered.

 

Morkro was a bit enraged with anger, due to the fact that he wanted to be first all the time and if he were told otherwise he’d have a fit. Morkro as many people saw in him was a little trustworthy; Xeno’s father could see the difference. But was Morkro really bad, Xeno thought not. He seemed to be gentile, was he?

 

“I was the one worried about the ralst we were about to split, what the hell is wrong with you, you know what, I don’t give a damn about this anymore,†Morkro said angrily as he pistol whipped Xeno in the chin with the tip of the sword and sheathed his stomach.

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WATER THE FLOWERS

 

There are some things

I didn’t want to know

About your love life

About your love life

I throw your pictures at the walls

Cause I despise you

And I know you do

The same

And I can’t believe that you’d

Date him

Because he was

My best friend

And I know you’d like nothing better

Than to fuck with

My Mind

 

I won’t let you get to me

I know, I’ll make it through your disease

I don’t need your confidence

I’ll make my own

 

Your picture adorns the lamppost

With no hope

They’ll never find you

Secretly I am smiling

For your loss

Because this is what I dreamt

 

I won’t let you get to me

I know, I’ll make it through your disease

I don’t need your confidence

I’ll make my own

 

OUT OF THE BLACKNESS. INTO THE BLUE.

 

Blue sky reflects the cold sea

I close my eyes and wonder

How this happened (to me)

She lived next door at number 23

Used to see her everyday but now

 

She’s moved away

She’s moved away

 

I know it’s just a summer romance

But then again it always ends better [everyone shouts] in films

I refuse just to let this go to waste

But God has better things to do

 

Then help me out

Then help me out

 

Loop the rope around my neck

There will be no blood

No cleaning up to do

Just forget about me

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I wrote this in the space of 5 minutes just out of pure frustration.

 

My heads a mess, It's in the clouds

Im all torn up, Can you hear the sounds

Of my heart beating,

Baby of my heart beating.

 

I'm all alone, looking for something to do,

But everything in here just reminds me of you,and

It hurts,

Baby it hurts.

 

Ive been waiting for your call,

Just to hear your tender words,

I've been crying inside

Do you know how much this hurts?

But ive been waiting.

I've been waiting.

 

My heart skips a beat, whenever you are near

But you feel so far, and it brings a tear

I miss you,

Baby i miss you.

 

Ive made my mistakes, I've ran and hid,

I've grown up now, i regret all i did,

I'm sorry,

Baby im sorry

 

 

Ive been waiting for your call,

Just to hear your tender words,

I've been crying inside

Do you know how much this hurts?

But ive been waiting.

I've been waiting.

 

Ive been waiting for your call,

Just to hear your tender words,

I've been crying inside

Do you know how much this hurts?

But i'll keep waiting,

Baby i'll keep waiting.

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upon the high

way up in the sky

said this is nothing

but a fucking breeze passing by

it's just like war

winning spoils from doors

just like blending

from angels to all the whores

 

my knuckles stay all bruised

cuts from "I-owe-you's"

nevermind this all

Adrenaline

Hand in hand to my own fall

 

 

It was a fight

and I was the winner

but there's no real loser

giving love to her

and then I abuse her

 

 

No more bullshit. this is real. this is life.

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This is a concept song I wrote for a new style of music I want to start working on. Also note that I was listening to VersaEmerge when I wrote this.

 

Concrete Seams

 

Reasons ficticious

Thoughts relinquished

Is it worth fighting stained demons?

Good is withering

The thickness of the forest

The depth of the fog

Lost in a dusty whirlwind

Come to the darkness, let it subside

 

Carving these names into my blood

Hoping freedoms cannot be reconciled

Repitition is futile in days of exchange

Stories end with no beginning

Waving goodbye to thos no longer existant

 

Towers, wires and spires

The men in caves are once again forgotten

Substantial rains of acid are warming

Skin burns the thought of a memory

Grasping our broken facets

Fading into the forgotten tomorrow

Strange figures, their surrounding lies

Off the grid, bound for destruction

 

Some things can no longer be forwarned

Crumbling towers, where martyrs cower

Giving up on everything for a worthless cause

Not only beginning this hate

Born into a world of reversal

Ripping and tearing at the concrete seams

Waiting for the day where we can all be forsaken

I know this all too well

 

Melted moons, a hotter sun

Gentile force is used in need

Honesty is a second option

Being on a vicarious level is equivelent to vermin

I can feel our own struggles

We are all begging for some mercy

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Wrote this a few weeks ago i think. not too good but i like it so.

 

 

 

 

i'm stronger than this

you say to me

but what i hear is

it's what i'm going to be.

it's taking over me.

 

i try to talk to you

but you go and light up

talk to me please

i'm sorry to interrupt

 

i don't want to see your face

on my tv screen

showing your body

at the crime scene

with the needle in your arm

and a drink in your hand

i'm trying to help you

don't you understand?

 

so much talent

going to waste

can't you see

you're a big disgrace

have you found what you misplaced

 

i try to help you

but you just shoot up

let me help you

i'm sorry to interrupt.

 

i don't want to see your face

on my tv screen

showing your lifeless body

at the crime scene

with the needle in your arm

and a drink in your hand

i'm trying to help you

don't you understand?

 

don't you understand?

talk to me when your sober (sober)

don't tell me that it's over (over)

i've heard it a hundred times

and i'm still here by your side, aren't i?

 

 

i don't want to see your face

on my tv screen

showing your lifeless body

at the crime scene

with the needle in your arm

and a drink in your hand

i'm trying to help you

don't you understand?

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I like that a lot Erin. When I read it I hear mellow music in the back round but of course those lyrics are as good as anything really. Hah I find that piece easier to make an "onthespot" song with. Good stuff.

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I like that a lot Erin. When I read it I hear mellow music in the back round but of course those lyrics are as good as anything really. Hah I find that piece easier to make an "onthespot" song with. Good stuff.

 

Thanks! and I was definitely thinking mellow music with a slower, but steady beat.

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No Last Leader

 

Tyranny lasts only tormental seconds

The riches frown upon the last apparent truth

Gifts only come when costs become depleted

Unraveled lies lay upon healed scars

Clocks tick as our anger grows

The churches pray and take no meaning

Congregations wilt as pockets crumble

 

Look through the lens feel the rejection

Some things broken are not as easily fixed

Sing to the sirens, sink their ships

Hidden mountains deep in a smog haze

True kings have not leading need

Solace kills and opens eyes in vices

 

To believe only points out all that is wrong

An artifact does not persuade people

Greed is enought to avoid life in fairness' sake

Escape one object that binds all

Books burned for the love of protest

Spreads like cancer, faith fades for youth

It will live, it will die, time will tell

 

Stories do not tell the art of creation

Fables fall in acts of myth

Lies speak in every known tone

Only one life cries to the sadness

Agony pits in the soul of leaders

A life of lies is only a waste

Desecration fades only to shine brighter

 

I've been working really hard on my new music and all the vocals are me (surprisingly), I found a way of singing coursely and it sounds pretty decent with the fact that I'm tone deaf.

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im scared now that they know me

i showed them my home

and it's too late

they know where to go to get me

i know that they dont want me

and i know that im powerless

in front of them

 

they say the worst of me

and i know they ignore my best

i can't sleep or keep going

i cant do anything at all but suffer

but i will try to finish the rest

 

i cant die before then

i cant go yet because im still bad

what if its too late

and hell is my fate?

im sorry my father

but my fear is too strong

i only hope you planned it

so that i may get along

with my body and my mind

please dont leave me behind

 

 

 

 

 

good one ernie ball, i love the variety of your words and they are strong. it fits a strong one stripped of strength theme, the words not the overall order of phrases. to each their own, everyone has their own view, what you may see as strong i may see as weak, that type of deal. which should excuse my potentially incorrect view of your work. but even then, its good.

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im scared now that they know me

i showed them my home

and it's too late

they know where to go to get me

i know that they dont want me

and i know that im powerless

in front of them

 

they say the worst of me

and i know they ignore my best

i can't sleep or keep going

i cant do anything at all but suffer

but i will try to finish the rest

 

i cant die before then

i cant go yet because im still bad

what if its too late

and hell is my fate?

im sorry my father

but my fear is too strong

i only hope you planned it

so that i may get along

with my body and my mind

please dont leave me behind

 

 

 

 

 

good one ernie ball, i love the variety of your words and they are strong. it fits a strong one stripped of strength theme, the words not the overall order of phrases. to each their own, everyone has their own view, what you may see as strong i may see as weak, that type of deal. which should excuse my potentially incorrect view of your work. but even then, its good.

 

 

I see what you're say. I agree with you on the order of my phrases I have made several changes to this since I have posted this. Any you can view it however you want, what you think is correct it probably is, as the same if someone else looked at it.

 

As for your posting damn, that's just too good. I never expect anything less whenever you post your material. This one in particular is deeper than a lot of the ones you've posted recently (somewhat).

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"Pigeon."

 

Birds were never free

They're chained to the sky

With breaks between

Starved myself for weeks

The bird and the worm

Have yet to meet.

 

Ignore this nature of mine

 

I'm no child

I'm no messenger pigeon

I'm just winged

And desperate

No hunting tradition

 

They were there

When my blood turned to sugar

And I was sweet for a moment.

Scurrying like ants

But still standing in the same

Spot they have been

For decades

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"Old Woman"

 

I'm told

Someone loves me

But what's left to love?

The broken old woman

Stealing bodies of the young

 

I'm worried for my sake

I'll find my own way in

I've borrowed,

I've taken

Much more than I've given

 

No kind hand has ever

Taken me up

And shown me

Unconditional love

No strong man

Or woman

Has taught me enough

About undeniable love.

 

A bed is left unmade by me

I'm truly sorry, Mother

A bed was left unmade today

I won't forgive you, Father.

 

I'm told

Someone loves me

But what's left to love?

The broken old woman

Stealing bodies of the young

__________________________________

 

"Play By Rules"

 

Who am I to practice

All I practiced as a child

When my eyes have seen the world around

And pointed out the lies?

Who are you

To call ME naive?

When I obviously

Fend for myself.

 

Just play by rules

Try to hurt me

Waste your time

But I'm not interesting.

Past, floating

Down the drain

Left a spiral

Down-falling ring.

I'm finally free.

 

Give me hope with what you say

Nothing takes memory away,

When you lock me up inside this shell

A small reminder of my own little hell.

I'm no longer alone,

But I fend for myself.

__________________________________

 

"Phoenix"

 

This is a recipe for disaster.

What's eating you?

What's eating you?

And when you're paper thin

Your promises devour you.

 

I'm losing sleep,

Staying up after

The lights go out.

The lights go out.

And when you're living in

Paper thin skin,

You drift about.

You drift about.

 

No matter how many words

I fill you with

You won't get full

You'll just get rid

Of these words.

 

All the king's horses

And all the king's men

Couldn't put you back

Together again

From old ashes

Comes new life

So burn me, lover

So I can stay alive.

__________________________________

 

I'll set sail on an ocean of crows

On the wings of my father, over disappointment road

Solid wood organs inside me feel nothing but a heartbeat

__________________________________

 

Like wolves, we need another.

Like dogs, we're chained to our paths.

Placed in the same cold cave every winter

Like wolves, we travel in packs.

__________________________________

 

I've been looking for a way

To get my passions entertained

And take the trouble from my bones.

So give me a thumbs up,

And a short, short trip,

And get me back on the road.

__________________________________

 

If there were anyone on Earth that I'd like to meet,

it'd be the thing under my bed, in my closet that screams,

"No parties, my beasty, it's time to get sleepy

because that's where I want you, and there you should stay."

I can't sleep when you're howling, "Delightful, it's night"

I can't take it, can't take it,

Just take it away!"

If I could meet anyone on this Earth, I say

I'd like to meet someone to take this awful burden away.

__________________________________

 

I've seen your demons

They look quite like mine

And when I get going

I'll let you know

If my heart starts to pound

And you are not around

I'll tell you

I've found another

 

And I'll start to bruise you

More than I meant to

And I'll start to push you

Around

 

Well, where are your demons

You've asked me to kill?

What do I do with this

Let me know...

And if my hands start to cramp

And I haven't got to them

I'll tell you

Your demons still live

 

I'll get past them

To you

And make you believe that

I need this

I need you

Don't bleed here.

__________________________________

 

You have my soul in your bag

But i have nothing in hand

I loathe myself for living this way

And I've got blisters

From walking with you in the Summer

And covering you in the rain

But it will never be the same...

 

You've stolen my ever

And thrown it to the birds

And you take and take things back

Like you never had said them at first...

I could use some pins

To help my brittle skin

Stick to my fragile bones...

And I could use a few good thoughts

To get me home...

But it will never be the same...

__________________________________

 

Clouds encircle the sky

And I'm at home

In a house that isn't mine

I've been

Underwater all my life

And I'm breathing air that isn't mine.

__________________________________

 

The red ring,

It chases itself as it waits

For frames to catch up

Second by second

I'm learning to cope with impatience

__________________________________

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