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The Song/Poem/Writing Thread - Part 2

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you guys make me happy inside.<3

 

 

am actually going through epic writer's block. i'm fighting through to pretty shocking results, but fighting nontheless:

 

draw hearts and stars

up and down our arms,

'cause the real ones are far too high

for us to reach.

trace those lips with fingertips;

it's just too late to leave.

when the rain gets loud enough,

we'll stand and scream our lungs out.

we'll stand and scream our lives out,

out loud so they'll know we lived

(at least once, if not forever)

 

stand on the edge of rooftops,

closer to the sky, that way, you said,

deny the way we fall that way,

we're broken but we're still beautiful

alone but we're still usefull.

when you figure this out, let me know

when you figure me out, let me go

because we're broken but we're still beautiful

we're alive but we can still lose it all

just let me know.

 

 

bold are lostprophets

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^grrr.. couldn't you keep that to yourself? lets not make Jorgi unhappy.

 

 

 

and..yes I am actually kidding. or, well, not really, but, oh well, I guess you understand. I'm just going to shut up now. Have a good day.

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haha i don't even mind :) to be honest it's a delightful coincidence. usually i listen to music and yeah, that influences what i write, but considering i would never put myself through the torture of lostprophets its pretty amazing i've managed to pick up the same words as them.

 

shucks, i say, shucks.

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just googled it and the only thing that has similarities is "standing on the edge of rooftops" and the screaming part, even though it says "everybody scream your heart out".

 

thank god. you had me terrified there for a bit. will have to change my writing style, more comparisons to lostprophets will make me suicidal.

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oh no, relax, who cares about lostprophets anyway? you're going to be more famous than them with your lyrics! Everyone's going to be like, who's lostprophets? :mrgreen:

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just googled it and the only thing that has similarities is "standing on the edge of rooftops" and the screaming part, even though it says "everybody scream your heart out".

 

thank god. you had me terrified there for a bit. will have to change my writing style, more comparisons to lostprophets will make me suicidal.

 

google is not the end all mate.

 

everything i bolded, was pretty close to lostprophets lyrics, not that im a lostprophets fan and would know that obviously :roll:

 

who cares its only a coincidence, i was just pointing it out

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ah but google is my lifeline !

hah it's cool man.

 

oh no, relax, who cares about lostprophets anyway? you're going to be more famous than them with your lyrics! Everyone's going to be like, who's lostprophets? :mrgreen:

 

i very much doubt that beyond belief, but it's nice to hear all the same ;-) thanks

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I wrote this for my lit class. We each had to pick a picture and write a poem about the picture. Mine was of some dried up flowers on a mountain with the sun peeking over shining on them. Here is the poem I wrote about it. I got an A. :]

 

Beaming rays of hope

 

Standing on the peak of the dark mountains,

Shadows linger all around me.

Darkening clouds hover,

Draining out my thoughts ,

flowers grow beside me,

dry, defeated, beaten down.

 

These flowers symbolize my life,

they symbolize me.

 

The earth around me is dry,

dry like the dirt

The sun rises in the distance.

Beaming rays of hope,

Bright and strong,

The hovering clouds want to overshadow it.

 

The sun breaks through,

It shines on the flowers,

It shines on me.

 

A cool gust of win blows through my hair.

birds sing in the distance,

I look down at the flowers,

They are different.

The darkness has disappeared.

The flowers are rejuvenated.

 

They have hope.

I have hope.

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^ Ooooh, I like that, it sounds happy!

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^ wow, sam i love that! ;D it made me happy . haha

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Sam, OMG, like, woow.. It was amazing, like reaally amazing :D

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okay, so i don't usually write , like, at all. xD

but i just wrote this . uhm, it's probably sucky, it is haha . so don't be to harsh (:

don't know if they're finished, but i'll post it anyway .. xD

 

tears are burning down my cheeks

you couldn't just leave it like that

eyes are hurting and i'm starting to feel weak

but i won't give in

i won't let my guard down

 

this was the last time you've had your way

but somehow, in all my heedfulness

you blurred yourself into my mind,

forced yourself into my heart

and you were all i could think of

like i was hypnotized

 

you showed me the way to hell

and fooled as i was, i followed the path

walking through darkness

bleeding on the way

i found out to late, it was a trap

fighting my way through these demons

knewing that you already had me

 

i wouldn't give in.

 

------------

nightmares keep repeating themselves

in a collision i see his face

his damaged face

bones are broken

scattered scars across his cheeks

 

i cry, i scream

but no one face to look at me

and i'm not asking for it either,

just to notice him, save him for me

cause i can't.

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i just wrote a chorus, i was really angry at someone

 

These four walls, they're closing in

You're out to get me, you're under my skin

I wish i could stop it all without a fight

but you're the one causing this living disaster called my life

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okay, so i don't usually write , like, at all. xD

but i just wrote this . uhm, it's probably sucky, it is haha . so don't be to harsh (:

don't know if they're finished, but i'll post it anyway .. xD

 

tears are burning down my cheeks

you couldn't just leave it like that

eyes are hurting and i'm starting to feel weak

but i won't give in

i won't let my guard down

 

this was the last time you've had your way

but somehow, in all my heedfulness

you blurred yourself into my mind,

forced yourself into my heart

and you were all i could think of

like i was hypnotized

 

you showed me the way to hell

and fooled as i was, i followed the path

walking through darkness

bleeding on the way

i found out to late, it was a trap

fighting my way through these demons

knewing that you already had me

 

i wouldn't give in.

 

------------

nightmares keep repeating themselves

in a collision i see his face

his damaged face

bones are broken

scattered scars across his cheeks

 

i cry, i scream

but no one face to look at me

and i'm not asking for it either,

just to notice him, save him for me

cause i can't.

 

wow, hun, that was awesome :hug:

I really love this part:

 

walking through darkness

bleeding on the way

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wow, hun, that was awesome :hug:

I really love this part:

 

walking through darkness

bleeding on the way

 

aw, you really think? :D it means a lot, thank you hun :hug: =)

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Sam, OMG, like, woow.. It was amazing, like reaally amazing :D

 

aww thanks hun. :):hug:

 

^ wow, sam i love that! ;D it made me happy . haha

 

hehe. thank you dear! :hug:

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cross that line,

pretend i've been there before,

perfection is close;

but not the word i was looking for.

dead ends, lost friends,

it can't be much further.

 

the smoke in my eyes

blind my goodbyes

and i ache form the cold

but not from your gaze

we're not too old to forget,

surely i'll never forget;

well i'm waiting.

 

but the odds are not on our side,

with you by my side,

the sun is finding its way through the sky

we'll sit by the firelight,

where i'm waiting.

 

take to the ground, the grave

the way you say my name

in my ear;

we're already here, already here

but we can't go much further.

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^awesome lyrics :)

 

I've had a hard time writing something I've been proud of for a long time, but I actually like this.

 

Portraying a part

 

distract my tears which blind my eyes

force them to freeze

I want to remember this goodbye

 

spoken heartbreak fills my head

now when I think about it

I just want to forget this

 

I don't want to remember the pain

or the look in your eyes

As if I stabbed you in the back

 

A betrayel of the first degree

and you didn't have the time to plea

I let go when you need me the most

Can not trust

Can not stay

Everything has to fade away

 

a broken promise surfaced today

you blamed it on me

but it didn't make you feel free

 

those hidden words which I used at times

were the ones you found

and I don't remember letting you know

 

will you ever stand on your own

like you do now

but standing with your head held high

 

A betrayel of the first degree

and you didn't have the time to plea

I let go when you need me the most

Can not trust

Can not stay

Everything has to fade away

 

melted promises and empty truths

this will forever be the day

when I explained it to you

 

to touch upon love

has never been what I've done

I've always been acting

portraying a part

a part of a once lost and broken heart

 

what I am doing

has once been done to me

I guess that's why I chose the role

of always make believe

It was familiar to me

 

A betrayel of the first degree

and you didn't have the time to plea

I let go when you need me the most

Can not trust

Can not stay

Everything has to fade away

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