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that's great :D

 

I don't think I've posted this one.. sooo.. here ya go.

 

Your pain is so much worse than mine

 

When it feels like my heart is broken

And my eyes are all empty of tears

I keep breathing

Knowing that I'm not alone to feel like this

Because somewhere you are crying

Regretting that you left

I know that the pain I feel

Have a life of its own inside of you

 

So I continue on

Knowing that your pain is worse than mine

And by knowing that

I think, I'll make it somehow, without you

 

Even though my life is so much better now

I find myself missing every bit of the past

But the one final part of the past

Is something that I don't think about

I don't want to think about when you left me

 

So while my heart is bleeding

And I just want to die

I cry because there is a void inside

Somewhere where you used to be

Is now a hole

And with each second passing

It grows

And soon it will outgrow me

 

But I keep on living

Knowing that your pain is worse than mine

I keep on breathing

Knowing that the pain won't let you breathe

Cause even though I miss you with every bit of my broken heart

I am glad that you feel worse than me

I am glad that you aren't enjoying the fact that I've cried my eyes out

 

Because your pain is so much worse than mine

But knowing that you are crying

Makes my oxygen almost fade away

 

Because ofcourse I still love you

How could I stop

I can't pretend for a second

That I'm not

In love with the person who made me feel

In love with the person who also made me bleed

Because you regret leaving me

 

But we stay apart knowing that two broken souls

Cannot be one

Once broken, never whole

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sorry for double posting, but this is one of my original songs, check it out:

 

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GREATNESS ^^^^^^^

 

 

Good job Linney, I applaud you.

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Omg Linnea - That Is Sooo Cool - I Checked It Out YouTube So Now You Now Have A New Big Fan :D Fantastic

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GREATNESS ^^^^^^^

 

 

Good job Linney, I applaud you.

 

thanks :hug:

 

Thats brilliant :D

 

thank you Matt :D

 

Omg Linnea - That Is Sooo Cool - I Checked It Out YouTube So Now You Now Have A New Big Fan :D Fantastic

 

thank you so much :D

 

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oops, I forgot to post a little something that I wrote just now, I was completely inspired by the feeling that the song "Dead & Gone" ( it was a cover though)gave me, such a free feeling, so happy, it made me feel as if I was as light as a feather :D Here it is:

 

Dream

 

There's no need to dream

When your dream is

impossible

 

And when it begins to hurt

You wish it would just

leave

 

Cause the pain it causes you when you realize it's not going to happen

It tears you up

More than anything fysical ever could

The bare thought eats you up inside out

And no one can make it go away

Unless what you dream suddenly becomes possible

 

There's no dream ahead of you

if you choose to keep your eyes open

so close them, close them

You'll never see it coming

The magical dream suddenly becomes real

 

And there it is, in your arms

And the power you feel

It's just so real

Nothing could ever make it fade

Not even a thousand mistakes

Cause what is left

Is here and now

And connect the two

That's an amazing magic combined

 

You begin to feel the air

Raise you to the sky

And all of your worries

Have mysterically died

You understand now

That this must be that feeling

The one that life is all about

 

You are in heaven now

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Dream

 

There's no need to dream

When your dream is

impossible

 

And when it begins to hurt

You wish it would just

leave

 

Cause the pain it causes you when you realize it's not going to happen

It tears you up

More than anything fysical ever could

The bare thought eats you up inside out

And no one can make it go away

Unless what you dream suddenly becomes possible

 

There's no dream ahead of you

if you choose to keep your eyes open

so close them, close them

You'll never see it coming

The magical dream suddenly becomes real

 

And there it is, in your arms

And the power you feel

It's just so real

Nothing could ever make it fade

Not even a thousand mistakes

Cause what is left

Is here and now

And connect the two

That's an amazing magic combined

 

You begin to feel the air

Raise you to the sky

And all of your worries

Have mysterically died

You understand now

That this must be that feeling

The one that life is all about

 

You are in heaven now

 

 

These parts are the highlights for me :D and I thought you did a great jawb.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I thought I'd comment more on other peoples things from now on. Just a bit more.

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I Cant Stop Listening To Hey Hey Violet :D Its Fantastic

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Inside Your Walls

 

So here I'll wait

For another thought that's crazy

And then I'll be a friend

And let this insanity save me

And let me say what I want to say to you

And if I ever say you're wrong

Then I'll know that I'll be too

 

Make your move

Leak out your surprise

Then I'll find

Truth hiding in your eyes

My conscience lives

With confusion

And I live

With our illusion

 

Walk with me, On the road so narrow

I'll be your strength

I'll be your arrow

Forgive yourself

Don't chase your sin

Push down your walls

And let me in

 

 

 

yadda yadda.

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I've written a couple lately. but nowhere near as great as you guys' work. :P

I don't really feel like putting up where breaks and verses go etc. sorry. :P

 

"Jessica"

i'm in between whether i'm in between, and where i lie, i'm lost for dreams,

no escape, i can't break free, of things that make

me, me. broken i lay, slowing down, i'm tearing down what's left of days,

and i've been so lost without, something sweet to smile

please talk to me, please, i need to know what's wrong with me?

please talk to me, please, i need to know what i need to be?

it seems to me...

that i just don't know what to do...

and i never know the right words to say

to keep you by me...

when the day is over and i haven't spoken a word

it feels like i just can't go on without you ruling my world

and the times we close the curtain, hoping for tomorrow

to be the greatest feeling in the world...

these airwaves, just don't seem to be

good for you or good for me unless we're alone in person

it's been so long since i've felt anything near this love

and it's just something i haven't had in a while...

it's going to be, something hard for you

and something hard for me

but hopefully i can be yours, i'd be happy if you'd...

 

"An Eye, Another Exercise"

caged in my own thoughts

i find that you keep breaking my heart

and i'm drowning in guilt

at how i let you break down my walls

it seems that you just don't understand

that i have a heart and you hold it in those hands

and it's like you just don't care

that i need you here, and i need you by me

maybe i'm not serious enough because

it's like i'm crushing my own heart

maybe i don't know what you want

don't you feel like you can talk to me?

maybe it's all in the way

that i say that i need you and i'm still crying without you

maybe it's just all my fault

that i let you pull me in and push me right out

 

"Drowning"

i sit and i find

that everything i've ever worked for

was just another way out

and another thing to look forward for

i'm drowning myself

in perverted thoughts i can't help

 

it seems to me

i'm not worth anything

and i work so damn hard

towards this "nothing"

i would love to bring me

back to where this started

 

i'm scared that

i was just hiding

from myself

i'm afraid of everything

it seems that i don't know what you're thinking

 

"Like 2009"

Good morning,

Good morning

I'm screaming

"How are you?"

It's cold out,

It's cold out

I've shivered

Too long now

I'm wondering

I'll wonder

What I'll say

What you'll say

We're quiet

We're awkward

Like 2009

I'd rather take my own time

And bring us back to then

To when the honesty was fluid

And these times were just a matter of

How?

 

"Are You Nervous?"

do i ever say the right things?

or am i still just talking to myself?

at this world's end

I'll hopefully still be holding your hand

 

and you've got nothing to say

and it seems like you're just using me

if i could read you, like you know me

i'm guessing i'd find another version of me

 

you make me jealous, like i have never been

when i'm invisible, it seems i don't exist

i'm so so so so sorry, i can't be perfect

but i need you with me and i don't know how else to say it...

 

you second guess me like you second guess your wardrobe

you ask me if the end is something good for us both

i'm so so so so sorry, that i'm not worth it

but i need to be in your arms somehow, or i'll never give up

 

***this one is really really long and slow... i hate it, but love it. eh...

 

"Under Oceans"

i swear, this life is like an ocean. it's all smooth sailing until you reach the dark parts. it gets a little choppy

and then you hit the big waves. sometimes, you lose a man at sea, and sometimes, they jump. i don't understand how the tides work

yet, but i do know this: life is an ocean just waiting to toss you around and flip you upside down. but i always want you to know,

if you ever fall overboard or feel like jumping, i will always be your raft. always.

and i guess i just dont know how to say it

but you're just so sticky sweet and i don't know how you don't see it.

you're the only reason for the smile on my face

and the beat of my heart loses count when you're out of trace...

when i fall, i fall hard and i'm scared of the dark

if i dig, i know that i'll find more than i bargained for, sadly

in my mind, i'm scared, in my room, i'm scared, in your arms, i'm scared.

i've done more than one can imagine to damage myself and i'm so close

to isolation, in these feelings of guilt.

i'm hanging on the edge of safe and forever and either way i know

i can't keep smiling forever, when the day's over, i find that darkness is friend,

if i weren't so scared of what it held...

once i knew you as "comfort", and a few times even "love"

then you pull the rug out from under me and tell me i don't make you happy

you tell me you don't make me happy...

assuming that you loved me once, assuming maybe twice

you dont really understand exactly how much i rely on you. for hope and comfort and love and things in between.

i really dont know how it happened, but for a second i was starting to believe you looked at me that way too. i mean, i know that

i'm not a dream. i dont know how i could be. i understand that. i just dont get how i got to be with someone

so amazing and let myself believe that they cared as much as i did

and let them hurt me more than anyone ever has.

i asked little of you. "just love me and be honest if you don't"

and i hope to some high power out there that maybe, just maybe, i might be over you soon.

you broke my heart, i don't think that needs to be explained,

but it's broken. i had hoped that the clothespins i used to hold my heart together were working,

they did, and for the briefest moment i felt loved.

i don't understand you, or what you want...

i guess i'm just meant to be...

lost?

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fnarrrrrrrrr.

 

let's leave tonight, i'll forgive you later

i swear i'll try not to think,

where you've been or what you've seen

i'll find out later,

i'll be worth it all in the end, i'm all you have

in the end i'll stand, i'll laugh,

and forgive you later.

 

well i'll say it now, i thought i missed you,

with your loud ways of saying goodbye,

but the way we left,

with no words at all,

suits me just fine

suits me just fine,

i'll miss you later.

 

take those lies laying down,

be indifferent but be different

to everyone else,

i'll find out later, i will,

i will forgive you later.

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Ok.. so these are my lyrics for GCSE music, they're not very good :lol: Theres meant to be a duet kinda thing but I cba to highlight it all again as I've already done it in a word doc... so.. here they are

 

Mistake

 

Baby, don’t leave me, I just can’t do this by myself

And now I’ve gone, I’ve shed my final tear

And it will, take me, years to get, over you

But you’ve gone, so I may as well start now

 

But I can’t wait for you to come on home

I lie awake at night and you’re not there to hold

I’ve made such a mistake, can you ever take me back?

I want you now but I don’t want you to hurt

 

Everything, around me, reminds me of you

Yet I don’t have the strength to, push you from my mind

I’m so, sorry, for all that I’ve done and

You light, my life up, with just a single smile

 

But I can’t wait for you to come on home

I lie awake at night and you’re not there to hold

I’ve made such a mistake, can you ever take me back?

I want you now but I don’t want you to hurt

 

I was broken inside and you tore me apart

But I’m down on my knees and I want you to need me…

 

And now you’re back my world has brightened up

I lie awake at night just to hold you in my arms

You never made a mistake and I’m just glad you’re back

I want you now but I don’t want you to hurt

 

And now you’re back my world has brightened up

I lie awake at night just to hold you in my arms

You never made a mistake and I’m just glad you’re back

I want you now but I don’t want you to hurt

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I Cant Stop Listening To Hey Hey Violet :D Its Fantastic

 

haha, thanks :D

 

and Mariah, wow, you write soo good! :D love it, especially "Under Oceans" and "Any Eye, Another Exercise". Wow. :D

 

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Love

 

When I've inhaled the scent of love

I'll never want to exhale

 

It's that wonderful feeling

That never becomes familiar

And you don't ever want to free myself from it

You'd love to drown in it

 

I've heard it's the meaning of life

The one and only truth

I've seen it blossom

But I've also seen it stirr up the water

 

But that fantastic feeling

The one that feels so unreal

It's just something I've read about

Love is foreign to me

 

So like a hunter that searches for its prey

My heart is looking for the item

That will make any worries fade away

 

But is it possible to miss something

That you've never had

It's like missing someone

You've never known

But I've heard of that and it is possible

So is love possible too

 

Because I've heard of that from you

 

Yeah I've heard of that from you

Yeah I've heard of love from you

 

And maybe that's why I began to wonder

Was any of that talk true

Cause I've never felt like that about you

 

 

You Left Me

 

Another day has gone and I see that you have grown

You've become stronger than I've ever known

You smile and it's no fear involved

You cry but there is only tears of joy

 

I wish I could feel just like you do

Going around being happy

But right now I can only feel blue

 

I'd go anywhere, everywhere

To feel that free

Cause right now my heart is breaking

And honestly, it's killing me

I'd move a mountain

I'd drain the sea's

To get rid of the pain that came when you left me

 

Another sunset has gone and I know you're no longer scarred

I guess you found it easy, But I think it's really hard

To move on to something different

When you've tasted the true right part

 

I wish I could feel just like you do

Going around being happy

But right now I can only feel blue

 

I'd go anywhere, everywhere

To feel that free

Cause right now my heart is breaking

And honestly, it's killing me

I'd move a mountain

I'd drain the sea's

To get rid of the pain that came when you left me

 

I guess it's true what they say

That love can truly fade away

And I'm sorry to say that you got off this ride

That the grass truly is greener on the other side

 

I'd go anywhere, everywhere

To feel that free

Cause right now my heart is breaking

And honestly, It's killing me

I'd move a mountain

I'd drain a sea

To get rid of the pain that came when you left me

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Heres a new song my band did, we don't have a real recording of it so this was done with fake instruments in fruity loops software but you can get an idea if those chimey things were guitars ha.

 

http://tindeck.com/listen/ikrm

 

Heres part of it with real instruments (live clip from practice).

http://tindeck.com/listen/ukjd

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^it says that the link is broken :(

 

so.. today was a reaaaally bad day. i really don't know what went wrong, but it all just did so.. i just kinda felt like writing. and i really suck at it, but whatever, thought i could post it anyway..

 

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your annoying voice keeps repeating itself in my head

and your words couldn't be more proud

 

it's all a joke

when you say that

you want to help everyone

 

when what you really want is

to make it better for yourself

and to make it harder for everyone else

 

but i don't need your help

or more specific,

i don't want your help

 

and everytime you touch me

it's like you're pushing me

deeper and deeper

harder and harder

into this dark hole

 

but I rather fall, than have you saving me.

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oh baby tell me you remember me ?

i'm the one who broke everything

i'm the one who couldn't stand the sound

of the way you made my heart sing

break it down ? you're far too loud

you're far too tall, but i'm tall, i'm proud

we'll all fall down when what i said

gets proof, gets you, gets me falling out

and back in to where i came from

oh you remember me.

 

well these risks that i'm taking

and the wrists that i'm breaking

are doing just about enough

to drown out the sound of you hating me

bothered ? just a little annoying

i say as i can't sort this all out

i never made you proud, i will,

i will never make you as proud as

you make me

you make me, and you break me

you love me and you hate me

you leave me, you complete me

oh tell me you remember me.

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^wow jorgi, that was really good D:

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Here is some random lines I put together, I think it flows together really nice! Well here is my first post in a long time here:

 

Only a dark sense of digression

 

The was a time when all darkness was gone

Only a memory was left

At that time, all of us were broken

And what little memory we had ceased to exist

It was a sad, disgusting, revolting measure

It was everything to me

It was that of which noting seemed to matter

It was a disgrace to humanity

Why is such a memory erased from a horrendous, discomforting passion?

Sadness is nothing

 

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^it says that the link is broken :(

 

so.. today was a reaaaally bad day. i really don't know what went wrong, but it all just did so.. i just kinda felt like writing. and i really suck at it, but whatever, thought i could post it anyway..

 

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your annoying voice keeps repeating itself in my head

and your words couldn't be more proud

 

it's all a joke

when you say that

you want to help everyone

 

when what you really want is

to make it better for yourself

and to make it harder for everyone else

 

but i don't need your help

or more specific,

i don't want your help

 

and everytime you touch me

it's like you're pushing me

deeper and deeper

harder and harder

into this dark hole

 

but I rather fall, than have you saving me.

 

 

I agree, that day was terrible =/ And I think I know who that poem's about? Anyways, I looove it! And it's soo true too! :P love you<3

 

I wrote a little something the other day.. :)

 

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Invisibly walked through

 

She's the girl

That no one ever sees

She's the girl

That doesn't dare to dream

Because she's the girl

That you don't know

She's the girl

That's never been whole

 

Even though she's the girl

Without a dream

She's the girl

That you'll eventually see

 

You'll see her when it's too late

You'll notice her when she has already faded away

 

And when the emptiness is complete

Full of unspoken words

You tend to miss her

That girl that you never got to know

 

Because even though you didn't see her

You felt her presence every day

And when she's gone

You feel that something has gone away

 

And I really didn't know you

But I really feel your absence

The air is thicker

And the wind has changed

Don't ask me how I know it

But I know you haven't really gone away

 

I know you can hear me

Because I feel you in my heart

I know I didn't know you

But I know that I miss

The girl that invisibly walked through these halls

 

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annnd, I forgot to mention, that I uploaded one of my other studio recordings, an original, on my myspace, it's called "If sunday should come", and like "Hey Hey Violet", it is not complete yet. But you kinda get how the song goes.. :)

 

http://www.myspace.com/linney94

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sorry for doubleposting and for going totally off topic, but, Chris, you have no visitor messages? So I couldn't respond.. hmm..

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I agree, that day was terrible =/ And I think I know who that poem's about? Anyways, I looove it! And it's soo true too! :P love you<3

 

I wrote a little something the other day.. :)

 

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Invisibly walked through

 

She's the girl

That no one ever sees

She's the girl

That doesn't dare to dream

Because she's the girl

That you don't know

She's the girl

That's never been whole

 

Even though she's the girl

Without a dream

She's the girl

That you'll eventually see

 

You'll see her when it's too late

You'll notice her when she has already faded away

 

And when the emptiness is complete

Full of unspoken words

You tend to miss her

That girl that you never got to know

 

Because even though you didn't see her

You felt her presence every day

And when she's gone

You feel that something has gone away

 

And I really didn't know you

But I really feel your absence

The air is thicker

And the wind has changed

Don't ask me how I know it

But I know you haven't really gone away

 

I know you can hear me

Because I feel you in my heart

I know I didn't know you

But I know that I miss

The girl that invisibly walked through these halls

 

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annnd, I forgot to mention, that I uploaded one of my other studio recordings, an original, on my myspace, it's called "If sunday should come", and like "Hey Hey Violet", it is not complete yet. But you kinda get how the song goes.. :)

 

http://www.myspace.com/linney94

 

Yeah.. maybe, i did exaggerate a lot , but most of it is true.. and thanks:hug:

and what you wrote is really good! i like it! :D

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