Linney Posted July 2, 2009 Report Share Posted July 2, 2009 omg I watched your Almost Lover cover the other day and thought it might be you and it was hahayou have an amazing voice :] Haha, Thank you =) stoked on that, Linney ! i can't say i'm satisfied with the way this turned out when the queen of hearts promised us our place, our time she said it would be fine as the house fell down around her as those hearts smashed down beside her the books we read and the songs we sang, in the evening now carry a different meaning well if they mean a lot to you i'll believe them the trees stand their ground outside it's colder in here, in here where the floors hold secrets our home, our lives that we built crashed down around us the dreams fell down beside us and it'll be fine if we believe them the shadows on the ceiling dance once more, with feeling i knew them once, i knew them once and i never stopped believing. thank you and that's amazing, seriously. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blink-182 Posted July 3, 2009 Report Share Posted July 3, 2009 If we can post FanFic's in the section, then please check this out whenever you have the chance. Thank you =) http://www.mibba.com/story/alltimelowrocks182/Death-By-Information/ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 3, 2009 Report Share Posted July 3, 2009 ^it's great, haven't read a fanfiction for a long time, just got to say, it kind of resembles the twilight saga, not much at all. Just the, "I'm with him, but my best friend loves me and I'm causing him pain". Sorry, it's not critique, I love Twilight. Your fanfic was really good, painted a picture in my head, I could really see it playing like a movie in my head. Great job Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eddbanger08 Posted July 4, 2009 Report Share Posted July 4, 2009 One of my old ones: Too Many Unanswered Questions Even if I can not chose, I am not sure I wanna lose, Letting the peices fit, Moving down this hollow pit. Maybe it was a flash, Its more like a clash, The flow of the air, With movement of my hair. So what is lost, So what is gained, Perhaps I finished this game! Please let me go insane, Tell me now, cause I want answers, Too many unanswered questions! So I sit here thinking, My eyes are blinking, What on earth is this, So I am wanting to hiss. Unclear is the light, The sky is the slight, Let me go aloof, By going through the roof. So what is lost, So what is gained, Perhaps I finished this game! Please let me go insane, Tell me now, cause I want answers, Too many unanswered questions! In the end this is a dream, Now I wanna do is scream, Wanting the truth that won't come, Now sit whirring for the hum. So forth I go, So forth I go, Wait, wait and wait, Alright! So what is lost, So what is gained, Perhaps I finished this game! Please let me go insane, Tell me now, cause I want answers, Too many unanswered questions! Got this idea from Black Sabbath's 'Cornucopia'. A favourite song can help the imagination. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 6, 2009 Report Share Posted July 6, 2009 Everything you said sent wave of emotion Just like the wind does the ocean When you gave way to reason I can't do anything else with this! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 6, 2009 Report Share Posted July 6, 2009 ^it's amazing though 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Linney Posted July 6, 2009 Report Share Posted July 6, 2009 oh man! sorry for doubleposting but I totally forgot to post the song I wrote earlier today.. xD Here it is, don't laugh at the name. It is a very serious song. Submarine Hands Down on the bottom of the ocean again Not even trying to come up anymore Their submarine hands reach for me My soul wants to hide I pull away from the monstreous touch Shattering to pieces is more than enough Seeing the sadness in the survivers eyes I am sinking deeper down An anonymous source within my fragile state Speaks up louder than me in this frantic hell Hope the door is locked Like I need it to be Will I ever have the strenght To throw away the key Guesses of redemption have a hold on me After drowning out of this, will I have another chance Can I be the magnet that repells the darkness Or will I be the magnet that gives in For the moment I'm just pretending to smile Knowing hope is light years away An anonymous source within my fragile state Speaks up louder than me in this frantic hell Hope the door is locked Like I need it to be Will I ever have the strenght To throw away the key I've grown up from the stories Where cinderella get her prince I've shut out the dreams Which says I'll be able to see Through the storm that blind my soul Beyond the clouds that makes the sky hard to view Give me the hope that I can trust The faith that won't glue to my heart like wet dust Allow me to feel the touch of his mercy Spread some of that light on me An anonymous source within my fragile state Speaks up louder than me in this frantic hell Hope the door is locked Like I need it to be Will I ever have the strenght To throw away the key Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwik-silva Posted July 11, 2009 Report Share Posted July 11, 2009 This is my music composition - which I wrote using guitar pro http://midishrine.com/midi/29722.mid Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eddbanger08 Posted July 11, 2009 Report Share Posted July 11, 2009 Not bad! How you did it take you to work on that? Good foundations for something Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wildman Posted July 11, 2009 Report Share Posted July 11, 2009 I wrote this roughly 5 years ago in eighth grade, the most depressing time in my life. Any way, this is it: One More Chance My adolecent feeling Crossing no sorrow No wisdom No nothing Repressed thoughts Forgetting what I never was And that was with you I tried so hard But all that left is my second thoughts But as I try My find is dry I try to moisten it, but cant I try to be better Once more Give me one more chance Owe me what is left Then I find nothing Nothing at all Balancing a weight on each side of my mind Showing no affection Showing nothing I could do better than you My mind is on you, and only you I admit my wrongs and past regrets I regret what I've done For you I forgive OK, not my best work, very unorthodox writing too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwik-silva Posted July 11, 2009 Report Share Posted July 11, 2009 Not bad!How you did it take you to work on that? Good foundations for something Cheers I think it was just one night with then extra bits added on and worked on, yeah, there's not really much you can do though when it's recorded as midi Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eddbanger08 Posted July 11, 2009 Report Share Posted July 11, 2009 I wrote this roughly 5 years ago in eighth grade, the most depressing time in my life. Any way, this is it: One More Chance My adolecent feeling Crossing no sorrow No wisdom No nothing Repressed thoughts Forgetting what I never was And that was with you I tried so hard But all that left is my second thoughts But as I try My find is dry I try to moisten it, but cant I try to be better Once more Give me one more chance Owe me what is left Then I find nothing Nothing at all Balancing a weight on each side of my mind Showing no affection Showing nothing I could do better than you My mind is on you, and only you I admit my wrongs and past regrets I regret what I've done For you I forgive OK, not my best work, very unorthodox writing too. Yeah thats a really good song... it reads like it came from the heart. But considering you wrote it like five years ago... thats decent Heres one of my old ones: The Burning Green (Emotional Remains) I never said that I would take this task, Even though it meant far too much, It takes up for the madness lark, You should have known this much. But your issues are like granite, Those eyes of yours are set in stone, I feel the greyness of your soul, I know your emotions have taken their toll. But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see, So why do it again... you wont be? But the lights can only tell me so, Why you sank to that extreme low, I’ve been there myself but not like that, Even despite being made to feel like a rat. Where you gone? Somewhere is better than nowhere, This dark pit into where you've sank, But I know where you hide, that somewhere, I can't do much for you as you've gone rank. But your issues are like granite, Those eyes of yours are set in stone, I feel the greyness of your soul, And I know your emotions have taken their toll... But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see So why do it again... you wont be? But I'm not to prepared to take the blame, Either way the burning green makes me see you, Lights are shining in, lights are shining in, Right through your soul, burning like a flame, You've been consumed by despair, You must repair, You must repair, I cannot help you to put it right... I did damage to myself helping you, But reach down inside, you've got strength, Allow the spirt to rise in green flames, Of the burning green, burning green and the flames of emerald frailty... But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see, So why do it again... you wont be? So go forth, so go forth. Make the change... Hope it was decent Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MSkeleton Posted July 14, 2009 Report Share Posted July 14, 2009 And all they do, is thinking about theirselfs. Never asking about what I want or what i do. They do everything they want, and not thinking of me. Not thinking about what i want, Not thinking about how i feel, Not thinking about the things i do. They are going on vacation, well then marjanne can stay home. Are we gonna ask her if their is something she wants to do? No! Why should we?! She lives under our roof. And just need to listen to our rules. Well if you both really setting this through, and i will go just like the other two. And then my birthdays. 2 years and now almost 3 years in a row, you aren't gonna be there. The first two we didn't celebrate, no you gave me your present and it was enough. Now i need to celebrate it on dads birthday. Well thats fine with me. But i guess you will text me "happy birthday" when the day is their, just like you did before. And no i don't forget the things you do for me. And the things you gave me. But still, it isn't fair how you both are treating me. Im almost 18! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catie Posted July 14, 2009 Report Share Posted July 14, 2009 aww i can relate to that! it's good Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 14, 2009 Report Share Posted July 14, 2009 Yeah thats a really good song... it reads like it came from the heart.But considering you wrote it like five years ago... thats decent Heres one of my old ones: The Burning Green (Emotional Remains) I never said that I would take this task, Even though it meant far too much, It takes up for the madness lark, You should have known this much. But your issues are like granite, Those eyes of yours are set in stone, I feel the greyness of your soul, I know your emotions have taken their toll. But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see, So why do it again... you wont be? But the lights can only tell me so, Why you sank to that extreme low, I’ve been there myself but not like that, Even despite being made to feel like a rat. Where you gone? Somewhere is better than nowhere, This dark pit into where you've sank, But I know where you hide, that somewhere, I can't do much for you as you've gone rank. But your issues are like granite, Those eyes of yours are set in stone, I feel the greyness of your soul, And I know your emotions have taken their toll... But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see So why do it again... you wont be? But I'm not to prepared to take the blame, Either way the burning green makes me see you, Lights are shining in, lights are shining in, Right through your soul, burning like a flame, You've been consumed by despair, You must repair, You must repair, I cannot help you to put it right... I did damage to myself helping you, But reach down inside, you've got strength, Allow the spirt to rise in green flames, Of the burning green, burning green and the flames of emerald frailty... But I can tell, that the emerald light tells me fire, I can see the green lights upon the rocks! Its the force of the burning green, I could tell that you were not clean, I've wasted my time helping to see, So why do it again... you wont be? So go forth, so go forth. Make the change... Hope it was decent Trust me man it IS! Decent! I'm jealous. I like the words you choose. I think I'll.....Steal some for later on Water Far be it for me to find Myself showing all of you Who I am and what I'd do In situations playing you I'm not worse, Nor am I better We're all equal in our own ways It's said we must approve men Of all the sorts But how may I find possibility when I hate you Say I'm immature I wont contest In fact I'll admit but what else can you say When the war wrote us this song And said farewell to our last shared day Aren't we just like water Cause we always find a way No matter if the heat is hotter We're not set to stay We'll break through rocks somewhere in time And even drag some of it with us We'll soar the skies and take our time down We'll circle the earth always forever Always found around Edit: It's my sight And don't you ever Don't you dare have it changed Look at how you see yourself Is it exactly what you want? Well just like you I once looked at Things not belonging to need Only what you want Only what I want For so long we've lived life's taunt Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 14, 2009 Report Share Posted July 14, 2009 Aren't we just like water Cause we always find a way No matter if the heat is hotter We're not set to stay We'll break through rocks somewhere in time And even drag some of it with us We'll soar the skies and take our time down We'll circle the earth always forever bomdigidiggidy. i don't generally name things i write, but as i have such a strong feeling about something right this second, i'm going to name this one: i have a fizzy foot keep your hands closed tight around my neck, this is the best of you i wouldn't like to interupt but i can hear them calling your name i can hear them but they all sound the same breathe it out, the stories that i loved i heard them for the last time as you pull out from the driveway and into your new life, and i say good luck but dream about me good luck but dream about me the fluorescent lights that race past my eyes cold but comforting they remind me of you reassuring, but not safe to stay don't tell me, i know it's okay your eyes don't believe it but speak it and we'll see this through i said i heard them and i heard the truth i swear i saw them and i saw them lose. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 lol a fizzy foot? the material is awesome! ! I like I like... but the title? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ignorance Posted July 18, 2009 Report Share Posted July 18, 2009 I've been fiddling around with this for a while. Here goes nothing. (poem) Pain. Lies. Yelling through the phone, trying to prove your innocence while he denies the truth, breaking the relationship you tried so hard to build. The relationship he still wants, but denies. He wants to believe your telling the truth, but he denies any thoughts he has about it. Denial. You cry. You feel like your going to vomit. Tearing inside you. He still says your lying, then hangs up. Without a goodbye, because it would be to painful. He still wants to deny it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eddbanger08 Posted July 18, 2009 Report Share Posted July 18, 2009 Something In Your Reflection Hey you, what are we going to do? Your reflection is so clear and that's what you are, It's so clear and pure I can only know it's you, Now tell me are we going to go far? I feel something in your reflection, It makes me feel like I'm alive and kicking, I'd never compare you to a reflection, You are my glowing sun and I know you are shining! Feelings are right as the night, The sight of a golden love is so bright, There's something in your reflection! So here are now, is this love? I look up to the sky and look at the blue, Someone has released a dove, Am I dreaming but is this really you? I feel something in your reflection, It makes me feel like I'm alive and kicking, I'd never compare you to a reflection, You are my glowing sun and I know you are shining! Feelings are right as the night, The sight of a golden love is so bright, There's something in your reflection! So yeah love is a word, That is something too well heard, I see your reflection as solidarity, Your attractive nature is like that of divinity, Lush, loveable, likeable and longing, All that one wants in a woman of loving, I find faith in my life thanks to you, Eternal heart will thine lay through. But you are a part of me and I am a part of you, But you are a part of me and I am a part of you, Whoa... I feel something in your reflection, It makes me feel like I'm alive and kicking, I'd never compare you to a reflection, You are my glowing sun and I know you are shining! Feelings are right as the night, The sight of a golden love is so bright, There's something in your reflection! But you are a part of me and I am a part of you, But you are a part of me and I am a part of you, Whoa... My attempt at being deadpan romantic... Actully that was not the original idea, but still. Must be some crazy reason maybe. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
STOPthissong! Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 I don't really think these two verses should be in the same poem/song but I'm gonna go ahead and post them anway... Forgive and forget? What a load of crap. I'm suffering with a lack of respect for the mumbles you bear. One more sentence and there's a chance I'll snap. I'm sure you'll be sorry then. Time will cool and time will erode. but time will never be my medicine to heal. The creaking hands are my enemies why do they pass so slowly? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwik-silva Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 Becca that's amazing And they fit together perfectly Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
STOPthissong! Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 why thank you ^____^ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
closesttoheaven Posted July 29, 2009 Report Share Posted July 29, 2009 you had your way i was stuck in the same day you came today i was ready for you to stay that's when, you made a promise, you wouldn't fade you made a promise, you wouldn't disappear you made a promise, and i'm still here you made a promise, and i'm still here you had a way of making me smile you made my day and it was only awhile until, you made a promise, you wouldn't fade you made a promise, you wouldn't disappear you made a promise, and i'm still here you made a promise, and i'm still here you had your way, but it seems like you've changed you made a promise that you wouldn't fade away you made a promise that you wouldn't disappear you made a promise, and i'm still standing here you broke your promise somehow i'm still standing here ----------------------------------- I wish I didn't write songs that suck ass. critique and honest opinions please?... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted August 6, 2009 Report Share Posted August 6, 2009 My Head Has Hair M-m-m-my head has hair My head has hair So many women Have long hair Their heads have hair Their heads have hair So much care invested Into their hair I see a hare I see a hare it's easter time but You didn't stare Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wildman Posted August 7, 2009 Report Share Posted August 7, 2009 One Word Paragraph Did you think that I was gonna cry to you? Did you think that I was going to fall apart? Not now, not never Forget it This is my time show And lest me know what I am to do I'm not that broken, inside Tell me if your sorry But please don't waste my time Still lost yes sorrow still runs through my veins Is this what I waited for? I dont think so I never waited for anything like this This is what I hoped But I doubt it would last forever Missing you, still enthralled with hate Can't cover up this drowned back decision Cover up this pain in my lie I'm not that broken, inside This moment I'm waiting for Probably wont be as I hoped You are what I save for Hold me back with feelings I cannot cope As we hold untrue Let this be the last time When all I wanted was you Count me in too Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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