Hey guys, do you guys critique or just read. I only ask because I have 'songs' but I dnt know how to improve them. I mean they don't have a chorus or a hook. Just raw words from my head....
Am feeling exposed but I will put something up anyways... be nice...
I want to be something else
Someone new, but who...
I can't seem to decide on my path,
Where I should reside,
Or who's by my side
I often think why
This skin is foreign to me,
truly unhappy when,
she...
Because I lay still, dormant to the outside world,
Hidden from those I love
She's taken my place,
I want it back,
I often scream cries,
It's been so long though,
I don't even understand,
I'm unable to comprehend,
what I'm looking for,
I know it's misisng but cannot place my hand over it,
The search continues,
My unended song.