Natasha Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 dzzzzzzzt. i was so close to forgetting you and those blue eyes with your alluring words and promises and pretenses, i fell for those white lies and those impatient fists so close i'll step back and let it sink in and you'll get out with tales of new beginnings and love and laughter, i long for when you screamed and shouted of dreams let it begin save explanations for later and savour this with moments of fate and trust and tragedy, i waited for with blows to confidence and carelessness we accept mistakes blameless and shameless, i'll follow through, i'm so in like with you. <333 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feli Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 Err, I found this just roaming through my Word Documents, haha. It's just heaps old, like around two years old or so, I wrote it when I was 11-12. So you can imagine it doesn't make much sense, and take in count english is just my second language! x] It didn't really have a name, guess Anonymous Avenue it will be, or I dunno, any suggestions? The traces of my pen have gotten thicker I glance back at that old street, I’ve gotten weaker, weaker I shift my pencil, lines get neater Memories of a heart repeat The taste of today has gotten bitter, bitter I stop, Now, whoa! Feeling a breeze of splatter get right through me, I come to realize I was blind enough for not to see The rope is no longer tight, I’m not exactly what you wanted me to be Oh, now, CHORUS: My pace gets faster among my steps Screaming your name at the top of my lungs, I’ve decided to break into reality Since pretending may lead us to fatality, oh My eyes were covered with the same bandage That tangled beneath your fingertips, Going back to where we began, Anonymous Avenue will get us fixed Oh whoa oh whoa Oh whoa oh whoa With fading glimpses of truth I was fed Irony gets curious, huh? I learned it’s not worth to regret, regret I do guess some things are better left unsaid A fake grin can get atrocious, oh Well, hey, what do you expect to get? Go on, Now, whoa! Feeling a breeze of splatter get right through me, I come to realize I was blind enough for not to see The rope is no longer tight, I’m not exactly what you wanted me to be Oh, now! CHORUS: My pace gets faster among my steps Screaming your name at the top of my lungs, I’ve decided to break into reality Since pretending may lead us to fatality, oh My eyes were covered with the same bandage That tangled beneath your fingertips, Going back to where we began, Anonymous Avenue will get us fixed Oh whoa oh whoa Oh whoa oh whoa And don’t tell me, now you’re falling outside the square You’re coming to discover the true world’s end, Don’t come up with the same tale, you were not prepared Just accept life’s not always easy, sometimes you got to bend, hey! Oh, Step up, Now, whoa! CHORUS [bis]: My pace gets faster among my steps Screaming your name at the top of my lungs, I’ve decided to break into reality Since pretending may lead us to fatality, oh My eyes were covered with the same bandage That tangled beneath your fingertips, Going back to where we began, Anonymous Avenue will get us fixed Oh whoa oh whoa Oh whoa oh whoa Anonymous Avenue will get us fixed It's probably hella sucky, I need to start writing again. But oh well, that's what happens when you were a little 11 year old girl who had illusions of writing songs. xD I actually have a good beat for it and stuff inside my head. Hm. Any C&C or tips to improve it even if it's just heaps old? :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 ^ i really like it. :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 I love it too! <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Feli Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 Seriously? lol, thank you both. :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 Thank You Sometimes I disobey my will to live Thanks to you for this You disrespect my cons And yet it's you I miss Sometimes love, Is so terrible I found this out the hard way Now this is the price I pay I'm alone with hurt today You tore down all my dreams You ruined my good intentions You made me diluted You strengthen my uncomfortable tension All the negative between us Is what you did Now you made me do an act of revenge Some would say you deserve this Some would say I'm a fool But I'd rather die Than be your portable tool All My Anger And All Of My Danger Created By You, What Did You Do Now I'm You I Hate Myself, Thanks To You Edit: Another! Little Kid Sometime today, I'll sleep Knowing that I'm forever alone Or so it seems, I got more years But it still seems so hopeless The souls I know are none to few Its time for the end of me And the beginning of someone new I'll turn to myself once again When I'm in need of some help I know how to comfort myself now No longer I scream and yell For someone to arrive at my hearts door Some people are kind, I love them so But how are they When they're with the ones they love Theres not much I can say About their own double lives But there'll be some Whose words, Hurt like knives How are we suppose to ignore any of that So Tell Yourself, Little Kid That Life Isn't All Depressing Look At What You Have Because It Could Be Worse Live Today, Live Tomorrow Don't Live Too Deep In Sorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jammer Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 I actually posted a song called this ages ago, but I deemed it too cheesy so I ended up re-writing it. It probably still sounds cheesy. Rachel Every time I close my eyes I still see that vivid day That time you smiled and greeted me You told me your name But I wasn't paying attention Too infatuated was I... Woah I still like your emerald eyes I still like your pearly smile I still like your exuberant spirit Oh Rachel... The days passed us by They turned to weeks and months Time always flies by When we shared a space But you still remained unaware Of my eternal desires... *chorus* I always watched from a distance I made sure that you remained safe But you were never aware of it I've always wanted to be by your side But fate always had another course for us You were always facing away from me But I prefer things that way... *chorus* Facing away from me (Eternal desires...) Oh my dear Rachel (Watching from afar...) I will always love you (Even if it isn't mutual...) Oh Rachel... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xxbecksyxx Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 if you don't want to see pure suckiness, look away now. I saw your face, When you weren’t watching I heard your voice, When you weren’t talking I felt your footsteps, When you weren’t walking Never felt this way before Can’t breathe Can’t sleep This feeling is new to me Queasy Uneasy Just listen and believe me This is how it’s meant to be You and me Me and you It’s 100% true I can’t describe it It seems so unreal The world is spinning rapidly And when I’m near you, This is how I feel (Chorus) Is this what it feels like? Is it really true? I can’t spend a day without you Yeah, this is what it seems True enough to believe, yeah (Chorus to end) you may look now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xxbecksyxx Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 I’ve been lost all along Searching for something non-existent Living somewhere I don’t belong I’m sinking, sinking… How can I stay, When being with you is Making me crazy? I’m running, running… Last train from London, 10 o clock from Kings Cross Away from this dungeon The cage you locked wasn’t bolted tight The walls are closing in My heart is loosing it’s rhythm This one final sin I’m falling, falling… The daggers are here Spearing us all To shed one final tear I’m swimming, swimming… Last train from London, 10 o clock from Kings Cross Away from this dungeon The cage you locked wasn’t bolted tight To be or not to be This is just the beginning Throwing away this key I’m floating, floating… Help me burn down these bridges And cross these long rivers Wedged between endless ridges We’re bleeding, bleeding… Last train from London, 10 o clock from Kings Cross Away from this dungeon The cage you lock wasn’t bolted tight Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jaseyyann Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Pathetic The fork in the road, is growing by the hour. Minutes turn to seconds, and the right path disappears. There's no way of knowing, where to go anymore. At least before, there was guidance. By now, lonesome has taken its toll. Help me help me. Falling falling. No where to go but down. Left, right, forward, back, directions disappear. I'm sinking. Isn't it sad, that this is me without you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
notoriousfat67 Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 say what you will. Be honest please. even if you think it sucks. Im a bit rusty anyway so i wont think you're an ass for saying so when this is over all my former life will be is something i can only see in my dreams and memories everything I've gone through and everything i've been will all mean nothing like a candle in the wind all the opportunities gone every love I've ever know lost a broken existence is what i've become and everything was the cost this is so empty this is so empty this is so empty i am so empty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 this was written in an actual mess, you should see the page it was written on its pretty ace, haha. i tried to make sense of myself. at the point of no return ? i'll get back to you on that one older and wiser but still left with no one not mistaken but a mistake nontheless, how long 'til we get through this ? asking for answers, but not how you tell them was that you on the other side or just a reflection ? a trick of the light, or a flicker of emotion don't say a word you'll give yourself away don't say a word i have nothing to say slow down, slow down, take your time and your things, leave and relax and remember how we lived that life good times and bad memories with lost hearts and lost door keys is this really happening ? i'd take it back but i meant everything, i asked for dreams but not how you live them i'll build another wall right where you knocked me down, knock me down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Defiance Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 *puts jorgi back on the list of people i want to have sex with* *wanders off* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jammer Posted June 30, 2008 Report Share Posted June 30, 2008 The Day the World Ended Events that stick in your mind Billy taken from us In a flash of steel and blood I still remember his last words He told me to live my life But that looks like a tough road... I still remember the day the world ended Those words cut me deep And they still hurt me But some of us weren't so lucky Walk this road on my own... Some things you never forget Jacob was so young But in a flash he was robbed Of all he possessed and cherished I still feel his blood on my hands And it never scrubs away... *chorus* The day my world will end Is as inevitable as the tide And I can't escape from it But I can delay the inevitable And live my life to the full Then maybe I can leave this world With a sense of accomplishment... *chorus to end* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted June 30, 2008 Report Share Posted June 30, 2008 let me just say you all are a bunch of talented people. i wanna post something, but i haven't written anything new in ages! *dies* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
STOPthissong! Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 where do you guys get your inspiration from? I'm finding it really hard to write things at the moment. Nothing is coming out of me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 where do you guys get your inspiration from? I'm finding it really hard to write things at the moment. Nothing is coming out of me life, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
777 Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 lol ^ Anyways, I'll edit this post after and put a new one here. Edit: This is random, But the words felt right. Good going, You embarrassed me again I'm sure you didn't know of it So its not your fault I can only blame me But I'm too tired to beat myself up So I'll finally move on What am I supposed to do When I'm ashamed once again I laugh at myself When I show my weaknesses to my friends Somewhere theres someone else in my head Sometimes he helps, But most of the time he worsens me If I tell, You about him Or them, They will only tell me That its futile and theres no meaning Well I told you, My minds divided And all she or he has to say is only demeaning Wheres the fire I so loved I seen a glimpse of her beautiful lips They said "Please Be Kind" But I don't think I'm so mean Where were those words going They weren't meant for my ears But they were still directed at me Is there something I cant see I told myself, My Minds divided And I can only blame that I still feel the pain when I attack it So I think Its over for me today Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Defiance Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 i only write songs which amuse me, or make me scared so i get inspiration from jorgi's face. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 oh snap. everyone has a plan B, put your plan As away (they won't work anyway) place your hands over your heart as if you could keep it there forever (nothing lasts forever) spare me the sadness rising up in your throat i've heard and seen it all before (i don't know anything at all) this is going to hurt you far more than it's going to hurt me (comfortably numb, i promise) it's not you, it's me you will try to keep busy (i will try to keep breathing) we'll fix this love wasn't built in a day but prayers make no difference, said the priest, when you send them in the wrong direction (love is just a word, when you say it like that) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Defiance Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 mate where do you get all this sadness from YOUR SUCH A HAPPY CHILD! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 mate where do you get all this sadness from YOUR SUCH A HAPPY CHILD! Your visit to hitchin just made me so depressed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Defiance Posted July 1, 2008 Report Share Posted July 1, 2008 Your visit to hitchin just made me so depressed. damn i better come up again tomorrow, then you might jump off a bridge or something Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 lol ^ Anyways, I'll edit this post after and put a new one here. Edit: This is random, But the words felt right. Good going, You embarrassed me again I'm sure you didn't know of it So its not your fault I can only blame me But I'm too tired to beat myself up So I'll finally move on What am I supposed to do When I'm ashamed once again I laugh at myself When I show my weaknesses to my friends Somewhere theres someone else in my head Sometimes he helps, But most of the time he worsens me If I tell, You about him Or them, They will only tell me That its futile and theres no meaning Well I told you, My minds divided And all she or he has to say is only demeaning Wheres the fire I so loved I seen a glimpse of her beautiful lips They said "Please Be Kind" But I don't think I'm so mean Where were those words going They weren't meant for my ears But they were still directed at me Is there something I cant see I told myself, My Minds divided And I can only blame that I still feel the pain when I attack it So I think Its over for me today I love how what you write, you can tell exactly how you feel about something. Its powerful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 slow day slow day slow day slow day light-hearted ? i wouldn't be so sure it's the heaviest part of us all i'm sure i'll scream, i'll shout no ! save my arms ! i might need them one day ! as my heart thuds a march of abandonment in the bins outside my house you told me once i was beautiful maybe that'll save us. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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