-parawhore- Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 ^uh-huh. i kno i mean really whats not to love? haha i made that up when i felt really high from eating lucky charms Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lewymocha06 Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 http://www.bebo.com/Link.jsp?Url=http://www.lewymochapoems.bebo.com ^^^ thats it:) Hope you enjoy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
x broken Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 well here's a chapter of a story-thing i'm writing it's really short i know I walked depressingly over to the office to pick up my map of the school. My eyes were stung red from the crying. I walked a little more until I found the office. I hesitantly opened the door. The brown and red color-schemed room was pretty small. There was a lady sitting at a maroon desk. Dangling off the edge of the desk was a piece of paper that read Ms. Greayn. I didn't know if I should say it "Grain" or "Green." I skimmed the room for a little while until something remarkable caught my eye. I suddenly felt a lump in my throat. I immeadetly forgot the entire English language; that's how unbeliavable this person was. The boy standing a few feet away from me had an amazingly-shaped face. His features were... surreal. I was sure I was in a dream. No usual white clouds, though. Oh well. This boy was not hot, or cute, or anything like that, he was just... amazing. He had very, very dark, brown hair, not black, but from a distance it would seem black. It went in a straight formation and he had a little bit of side bangs. Not too noticable, though. It took me a few moments to realize that he was staring back at me. His expression was hard to read, though. Did he think I was pretty? Or did he think I looked like a freak? I couldn't tell. The voice of Ms. Greayn disrupted from my carefree thoughts. "Excuse me?" she said in a nasaly voice. I looked at her, slightly embarrassed. My cheeks felt hot. "Oh, um, yes, I'm looking for a map of the school." I couldn't help myself from keeping to glance at the boy. He was still staring at me. I looked over to Ms. Greayne. She was fumbling through a drawer full of messy folders and papers. She suddenly pulled out a ruffled, large piece of paper. "Last one," she said flatly. "You're lucky." I couldn't smile, I was too dazed by the angel boy. I walked slowly out the door. I saw a bench outside the office and sat down to keep myself from passing out. I just couldn't believe it. Nobody in the world was that perfect-looking. I didn't notice the few kids that were walking by me. They all seemed like floating zombies on their way to a meeting, with very dull expressions on their faces. It was pretty much horrible. Suddenly, the boy came out of the office, and once again, I was at a loss for words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 ^ Very nice! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Ninja Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 Wrong I would have liked it if you had felt the same way But I know you can't help that you don't I would have been so happy to be with you But it's not gonna kill me that I won't All I want now is a friend Why'd you have to let it end? What's so wrong with me loving you? What's so wrong with showing I care? What's so wrong that you have to run? What's so wrong that you won't be there? I would have liked it if things had worked out for us But I know some things in life just can't I've explained my feelings a thousand ways But your argument is like a chant Why repeat yourself so much? Are you really that out of touch? What's so wrong with me loving you? What's so wrong with showing I care? What's so wrong that you have to run? What's so wrong that you won't be there? If loving a friend is wrong Take the melody from every song If loving a friend isn't right Then take the day and call it night I don't love so you'll love me too I love because that's what hearts do What's so wrong with me loving you? What's so wrong with showing I care? What's so wrong that you have to run? What's so wrong that you won't be there? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted August 29, 2007 Report Share Posted August 29, 2007 ^ Great job! I loooove it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lyn Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 i kno i mean really whats not to love? hahai made that up when i felt really high from eating lucky charms that uh-huh was an uh-huh of sarcasm. XP well here's a chapter of a story-thing i'm writingit's really short i know I walked depressingly over to the office to pick up my map of the school. My eyes were stung red from the crying. I walked a little more until I found the office. I hesitantly opened the door. The brown and red color-schemed room was pretty small. There was a lady sitting at a maroon desk. Dangling off the edge of the desk was a piece of paper that read Ms. Greayn. I didn't know if I should say it "Grain" or "Green." I skimmed the room for a little while until something remarkable caught my eye. I suddenly felt a lump in my throat. I immeadetly forgot the entire English language; that's how unbeliavable this person was. The boy standing a few feet away from me had an amazingly-shaped face. His features were... surreal. I was sure I was in a dream. No usual white clouds, though. Oh well. This boy was not hot, or cute, or anything like that, he was just... amazing. He had very, very dark, brown hair, not black, but from a distance it would seem black. It went in a straight formation and he had a little bit of side bangs. Not too noticable, though. It took me a few moments to realize that he was staring back at me. His expression was hard to read, though. Did he think I was pretty? Or did he think I looked like a freak? I couldn't tell. The voice of Ms. Greayn disrupted from my carefree thoughts. "Excuse me?" she said in a nasaly voice. I looked at her, slightly embarrassed. My cheeks felt hot. "Oh, um, yes, I'm looking for a map of the school." I couldn't help myself from keeping to glance at the boy. He was still staring at me. I looked over to Ms. Greayne. She was fumbling through a drawer full of messy folders and papers. She suddenly pulled out a ruffled, large piece of paper. "Last one," she said flatly. "You're lucky." I couldn't smile, I was too dazed by the angel boy. I walked slowly out the door. I saw a bench outside the office and sat down to keep myself from passing out. I just couldn't believe it. Nobody in the world was that perfect-looking. I didn't notice the few kids that were walking by me. They all seemed like floating zombies on their way to a meeting, with very dull expressions on their faces. It was pretty much horrible. Suddenly, the boy came out of the office, and once again, I was at a loss for words. that's very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lyn Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 okay i do believe this is the best song i've ever written. i wrote straight from experience this time. which i've learned is much easier. title props go to josh although it's only temporary. Rising Up FIRST how long did it take me to realize you were the one and how long did i wait before i started walking towards the son how could i have not found you before you knocked on my heart and i opened the door CHORUS you've always been there. now i'm facing the facts you always care i'm covering up my tracks. now that i know how i won't turn back now SECOND i've found you. i won't walk away. cause i know now you're the only way you really are as real as you seems now i know this isn't a dream CHORUS you've always been there now i'm facing the facts you always care i'm covering up my tracks now that i know how i won't turn back now BRIDGE i was stuck in the dark you brought me back it always seemed to be night but now i've walked back into the light bridge could use some work. but other than that i think it's pretty good. honest opinions please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 ^ I like it, deary! Good job! Can't wait to see more from you. I wrote this one right now, and promised Tasha I'd show it to her, so here 'tis. Hold On Tonight Hold on, hold on tonight Kill me, kill me I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me get it over with Hold on, hold on tonight What are you searching for? I can help you find it. What are you running from? I can help you hide. I know you’re in pain And I want to hold you But you need to hold on too Just hold on, hold on tonight CH: I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me in, let me in tonight I’ll hold you as you cry Show me you want your life Don’t go through with this All you’ll do is hurt me. Is that what you want to do? Do I mean nothing to you? I need you here, with me. I love you more than you’ll ever know We’ll get through this together Don’t give up, don’t give up tonight. CH I won’t let you leave And I won’t leave you. Go ahead and cry I’m holding you. Just let me in tonight Just hold on tonight. ----- As you have probably guessed, it's a person talking to someone suicidal. And the italics at the beginning are the suicidal person talking (kinda weird, so I may change that). What do you guys think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XMusicDudetteX Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 Very nice Arya =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 Oh hey, deary! I didn't know you were online. And thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 ^ I like it, deary! Good job! Can't wait to see more from you. I wrote this one right now, and promised Tasha I'd show it to her, so here 'tis. Hold On Tonight Hold on, hold on tonight Kill me, kill me I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me get it over with Hold on, hold on tonight What are you searching for? I can help you find it. What are you running from? I can help you hide. I know you’re in pain And I want to hold you But you need to hold on too Just hold on, hold on tonight CH: I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me in, let me in tonight I’ll hold you as you cry Show me you want your life Don’t go through with this All you’ll do is hurt me. Is that what you want to do? Do I mean nothing to you? I need you here, with me. I love you more than you’ll ever know We’ll get through this together Don’t give up, don’t give up tonight. CH I won’t let you leave And I won’t leave you. Go ahead and cry I’m holding you. Just let me in tonight Just hold on tonight. ----- As you have probably guessed, it's a person talking to someone suicidal. And the italics at the beginning are the suicidal person talking (kinda weird, so I may change that). What do you guys think? <3333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333 hehe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 2, 2007 Report Share Posted September 2, 2007 Awww, thanks, haha. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
meganm15 Posted September 3, 2007 Report Share Posted September 3, 2007 ^ I like it, deary! Good job! Can't wait to see more from you. I wrote this one right now, and promised Tasha I'd show it to her, so here 'tis. Hold On Tonight Hold on, hold on tonight Kill me, kill me I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me get it over with Hold on, hold on tonight What are you searching for? I can help you find it. What are you running from? I can help you hide. I know you’re in pain And I want to hold you But you need to hold on too Just hold on, hold on tonight CH: I won’t let you leave I won’t let you die Let me in, let me in tonight I’ll hold you as you cry Show me you want your life Don’t go through with this All you’ll do is hurt me. Is that what you want to do? Do I mean nothing to you? I need you here, with me. I love you more than you’ll ever know We’ll get through this together Don’t give up, don’t give up tonight. CH I won’t let you leave And I won’t leave you. Go ahead and cry I’m holding you. Just let me in tonight Just hold on tonight. ----- As you have probably guessed, it's a person talking to someone suicidal. And the italics at the beginning are the suicidal person talking (kinda weird, so I may change that). What do you guys think? that was kinda..AMAZING Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Emzy Posted September 3, 2007 Report Share Posted September 3, 2007 wow you guys are so good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bee-theriot! Posted September 4, 2007 Report Share Posted September 4, 2007 A Sickening Thought Indeed Only a masquerader would know they say The feeling of being dressed up that way Beneath their maskings colorful and bright Smiles beem bold and lightly white Yet others do know the feeling well But instead they hide a second hell Thinking it better to hide than show Their blue veins run a bloody flow A sickening thought indeed the party screams So illogical and deathly it all seems Yet the confident do not know How bad it feels to hide than show A rotting to tear through the bones While confidence sits drinking tea with lovely scones Lonely sits fakely to please the party goers The fisod will smile, but the heart it lowers -fin Shy Hands Do Conquer A push, a feeling Driving a quiet revealing Shy hands do conquer The hate of a warlike encounter With a brush, with a breeze The coldness will freeze The opponent stands still His heart in a seige of will Stammering and clammering For an answer to silent hammering When this gentle hand soothes The wounds, and cools Every ounce of pain caused By battles of anger, he is paused To feel the hand of peace Reach down and push deep To a heart calloused by war After all what is love for? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lyn Posted September 4, 2007 Report Share Posted September 4, 2007 those are good, brianna. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 A Sickening Thought Indeed Only a masquerader would know they say The feeling of being dressed up that way Beneath their maskings colorful and bright Smiles beem bold and lightly white Yet others do know the feeling well But instead they hide a second hell Thinking it better to hide than show Their blue veins run a bloody flow A sickening thought indeed the party screams So illogical and deathly it all seems Yet the confident do not know How bad it feels to hide than show A rotting to tear through the bones While confidence sits drinking tea with lovely scones Lonely sits fakely to please the party goers The fisod will smile, but the heart it lowers -fin Shy Hands Do Conquer A push, a feeling Driving a quiet revealing Shy hands do conquer The hate of a warlike encounter With a brush, with a breeze The coldness will freeze The opponent stands still His heart in a seige of will Stammering and clammering For an answer to silent hammering When this gentle hand soothes The wounds, and cools Every ounce of pain caused By battles of anger, he is paused To feel the hand of peace Reach down and push deep To a heart calloused by war After all what is love for? wooow. mine sucks compared to this. plus it's not finished. Not Named. =/ pick the scabs, leave a mark let me know that i'm still alive, bleed it out am i gonna die? i can't breathe, i can't see, am i fading out again this time? -no chorus yet- hit me hard, knock me out bring me to my knees give me pills, force em down break my bones, make me scream am i bleeding? am i breathing? no i'm fading again, or is it just a dream? -no bridge yet- lol. help? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
justSMILE♥ Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 wooow. mine sucks compared to this. plus it's not finished. Not Named. =/ pick the scabs, leave a mark let me know that i'm still alive, bleed it out am i gonna die? i can't breathe, i can't see, am i fading out again this time? -no chorus yet- hit me hard, knock me out bring me to my knees give me pills, force em down break my bones, make me scream am i bleeding? am i breathing? no i'm fading again, or is it just a dream? -no bridge yet- lol. help? i like! can i help with the chorus?? you dont have 2 use it. am i real? am i fake? i just want to feel what you feel. am i real? am i fake? please dear god help me, help me i pray. its kinda bad =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 wooow. mine sucks compared to this. plus it's not finished. Not Named. =/ pick the scabs, leave a mark let me know that i'm still alive, bleed it out am i gonna die? i can't breathe, i can't see, am i fading out again this time? -no chorus yet- hit me hard, knock me out bring me to my knees give me pills, force em down break my bones, make me scream am i bleeding? am i breathing? no i'm fading again, or is it just a dream? -no bridge yet- lol. help? Wow. It sounds like a couple songs I wrote a few months ago. I'll post 'em if I can find 'em, haha. Mind if I take a stab at yours? What do you think of this? No bridge yet, though. Fading Dreams Scabs leave their marks Show that I’m still alive Bleed it all out Will I die? I can’t breathe in I still can’t see Am I fading again? CH: I give in, I give up I break down and let go But does anyone know The secrets I hide The tears I cried When I was alone Bruise my skin, knock me out Bring me to my knees Force down pills, break every bone Hear my screams Am I breathing? Am I bleeding still? No, I’m fading Unless it’s a dream again Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 Here is one that is kinda similar: I’m Sorry Another swing, another hit I see the fury in her eyes I should've known I wasn't fit For perfection, so I'm trapped in lies Pound me down Throw me to the ground Leave me dripping blood Since I'm not worthy of love CH: Please, I'm sorry Don't torture me now I'm sorry I'll never be good enough I'm sorry I'll never be what you want Please, I'm sorry Tell me I'll amount to nothing Since I'm no one at all Scream because I'm crying Don't catch me when I fall Shove me away You're making me pay Break me and kill me Since I shouldn't be free CH Please, I'm sorry Just stop all the pain I'm sorry I'll never be flawless I'm sorry I'll never meet your expectation Please, oh please, I'm sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Itdude Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 wooow. mine sucks compared to this. plus it's not finished. Not Named. =/ pick the scabs, leave a mark let me know that i'm still alive, bleed it out am i gonna die? i can't breathe, i can't see, am i fading out again this time? -no chorus yet- hit me hard, knock me out bring me to my knees give me pills, force em down break my bones, make me scream am i bleeding? am i breathing? no i'm fading again, or is it just a dream? -no bridge yet- lol. help? I got you a name either "Only Skin Deep" or "The Living Dream" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Arya Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 Oooo I like Only Skin Deep Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 i like! can i help with the chorus?? you dont have 2 use it. am i real? am i fake? i just want to feel what you feel. am i real? am i fake? please dear god help me, help me i pray. its kinda bad =/ Wow. It sounds like a couple songs I wrote a few months ago. I'll post 'em if I can find 'em, haha. Mind if I take a stab at yours? What do you think of this? No bridge yet, though. Fading Dreams Scabs leave their marks Show that I’m still alive Bleed it all out Will I die? I can’t breathe in I still can’t see Am I fading again? CH: I give in, I give up I break down and let go But does anyone know The secrets I hide The tears I cried When I was alone Bruise my skin, knock me out Bring me to my knees Force down pills, break every bone Hear my screams Am I breathing? Am I bleeding still? No, I’m fading Unless it’s a dream again I got you a name either "Only Skin Deep" or "The Living Dream" oh my gosh. i love you guys sooo much. lol. arya do you mind if i use the ... i guess you can call it "editting" you did to my song? haha. and courtney, instead of using that as the chorus, i can use your thingy as my bridge! and i can use josh's title of only skin deep? aaah. and if i ever make it big i will be sure to give you guys credit. lol. Here is one that is kinda similar: I’m Sorry Another swing, another hit I see the fury in her eyes I should've known I wasn't fit For perfection, so I'm trapped in lies Pound me down Throw me to the ground Leave me dripping blood Since I'm not worthy of love CH: Please, I'm sorry Don't torture me now I'm sorry I'll never be good enough I'm sorry I'll never be what you want Please, I'm sorry Tell me I'll amount to nothing Since I'm no one at all Scream because I'm crying Don't catch me when I fall Shove me away You're making me pay Break me and kill me Since I shouldn't be free CH Please, I'm sorry Just stop all the pain I'm sorry I'll never be flawless I'm sorry I'll never meet your expectation Please, oh please, I'm sorry wow that was really sad. yet amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
justSMILE♥ Posted September 5, 2007 Report Share Posted September 5, 2007 sure you can use it tash! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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