miss_emergency Posted June 23, 2007 Report Share Posted June 23, 2007 post more!!! im working on another song.. i'm thinking about calling it "A Song For Jack and Sally" because i just watched "The Nightmare Before Christmas" for like the hundredth time.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deanfunk Posted June 23, 2007 Report Share Posted June 23, 2007 that's a cool title! haha...so cool..post soon!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A Dead Lullaby Posted June 24, 2007 Report Share Posted June 24, 2007 I'm like an angel soft and graceful but i'm broken oh so beautifully broken But I still have my heart even if it's ripped apart and I'll still love you no matter what you do because you made it possible to smile even if for just awhile there were no late hospital trips instead I'd kiss your lips And I'd fall in love again instead of trying to make my life end but now that you're gone the only thing that helps is this song There's only one thing that would make me stay if you came up to me and suddenly knew what to say Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deanfunk Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 another piece! haha.might seem emo but it isnt..haha it was just raining when a made this. marble statues and stone epitaphs. a great cloud of melancholy looms over me as i approach the cold, steel gates of this sanctuary i shiver as i step one by one by one... it rains the clouds must know how i feel for it sheds its tears upon me as i walk this lonely road it seems i have no one else the dead seem wistful upon their tombs or so it seems... i pray to the heavens take me to my grave... take me to my grave... i am lost... i blink and its magic. the earth shakes and the dead rise from their graves the dead... they sympathize with me. i plead take me to my grave... take me to my grave... circa feb. 17, 2007 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A Dead Lullaby Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 wow you are really good at this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 wow, you're really good! =] wow! thanks!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 Wow Jana & Aoife, you're amazing! :] thanks!!! yeah i Love Jana's too! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 i LOVE this poem!!! omg... it's freakin' awesome aoife!!!you're amazing... wow!!! thanks Jana!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 new poem... not about my own personal experience, but anyway... Where’s my undo button? How do I refresh? I wish I would have stopped cutting my now torn and bleeding flesh. Now I’ve prayed to God So why am I still in pain? I thought he is suppose to help us, So why can’t he help me from going insane? Where’s my Genie in a bottle to grant me one more wish? But I guess it doesn’t go like that, Its true – life is a bitch. Do you think I’ll ever forget this night? Will it ever disappear? Well, not when my scares will always be in sight, And I’ll be living my life in fear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted June 25, 2007 Report Share Posted June 25, 2007 Aoife, thanks!!! thanks!!! yeah i Love Jana's too! you're work is simply amazing.. that poem you just worte... it's amazing.. seriously.. i think it's because i can relate to it so much.. it's awesome! Tiffany!!! i love your work too! that poem you wrote. it's beautiful.. i love this part>> but i'm brokenoh so beautifully broken But I still have my heart even if it's ripped apart and I'll still love you no matter what you do DEAN!!! yo, my pinoy brother.. lol! you rock dude.. idk if it's just me but i think when it rains.. it helps me write great poems. lol.. the rain is magical!!! hahaha!!! that was an awesome poem!!! ehh, kind of emo.. just a tad.. but it was great anyways!!! woo. im almost done with my song called "a song for jack and sally" i just need one more verse! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deanfunk Posted June 26, 2007 Report Share Posted June 26, 2007 aiofe, thank you!thank you very much..i love your undo and refresh lines there..haha..you were typing that on your pc, weren't you?cool... You know guys, i appreciate you all! and i love all your work!!! And tiff, i made that song based on a personal experience too.. DEAN!!! yo, my pinoy brother.. lol! you rock dude.. idk if it's just me but i think when it rains.. it helps me write great poems. lol.. the rain is magical!!! hahaha!!! that was an awesome poem!!! ehh, kind of emo.. just a tad.. but it was great anyways!!! woo. im almost done with my song called "a song for jack and sally" i just need one more verse! THANK YOU VERY MUCH MY PINOY SISTER! haha! actually, i didnt realize it was kinda emo when i read it for the second time! that's why i put that disclaimer on my post here..haha.. cant wait for your song!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 26, 2007 Report Share Posted June 26, 2007 thanks so much for the comments every! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 26, 2007 Report Share Posted June 26, 2007 new poem... yeah I'm extremenly oppinionated... but whatever... Excuse me Mr. Important Excuse me Mr. Important... Take a look around; Heartbreak and destruction Disaster to be found. Nothing but empty promises Since the day you were crowned, But they're too weak to stop you They don't even make a sound. Excuse me Mr. Important... Take a look at what you've done; Can't you hear the mother weeping? Mourning the soul of her son. That poor little orphan Is searching for his Mum, And for the brave ones in Iraq The troubles just begun. Excuse me Mr. Important... Don't you even care? Of the tears and the blood We've all had to shed? How can you sleep at night When you go to bed? And please answer me this one; When will Africa be fed? Excuse me Mr. Important... We're afraid to loose the fight. You have stolen our stars And you've destroyed the stripes, But, because you don't hear the cries In the middle of the night, You've placed a bad label on the nation, Of red, blue and white Excuse me Mr. Important... Hush - Pretend you don't hear, We'll all carry on together But only we will be in fear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neverment2brag Posted June 28, 2007 Report Share Posted June 28, 2007 ah that sounds so political....or whatever the word is haha okay, like 3 weeks ago, my friend from school killed himself and it hit me heard and im still coping with it. so last night, i was just liek "screw it" and i wrote this. this poem means alot to me. its basicly all my feelings frok the past few weeks. so please comment on it. Confused. Hurt. Empty. Depressed. That is how i feel. Did you WANT me to feel this way?? Is this shit for real? I dont know what else to say. So many emotions running through my veins. Somedays i want to blame you. Other days i feel sorry for you. But at the same time i dont get why you would do this. Yes, you were hurting i suppose. Yes, youve had a rough life. And yes, i should of been more open, And opened up my eyes and saw you hurting. But no, i was too selfish and paraniod at the time. But still...why? I know i shouldnt blame myself, because it has nothing to do with me really. And yes, i didnt really know you well and didnt know what you were feeling. But... I dont know. My head is spinning and in a knot. I just wish that you could of had just ONE more shot, To change or just let it all out. Just NOT ike this... NOT like this. But i cant worry about it anymore. What was done is done and i cant change that. But sometimes... I just wanna go outside and scream at the sky. And just ask God "Why?!" But, its okay i guess. This all happend for for the best. Your out of your misery, Your resting in peace. But you left me here with so much greif. You left me here alone with no one really... But maybe this is a sign for me to ACTUALLY start growing up, And STOP just WAITING for shit to just COME to me. Yes thats one of my MANY problems today. But hey, WHO DOESNT HAVE PROBLEMS NOW A DAYS!? Its a hard cold shallow world. And all you can do is take it as it comes. And grow up, and just..deal with it. Who am iiii to be judging you. I didnt know you. So...i cant say anything really. But ill always have this hurt inside just for you. thats basicly all i can do. But now all i have is little memories. And i just have to live my life day by day. and STOP bringing myself down. Yes its a tragedy. But whats done is done. The memories are fading quickly... Im forgetting your face... but what i will never forget.. Is that this all is just one big discrace. One person that was misunderstood i guess? But i cant speak on that. Cuz i didnt know you well... But what im going throuhg right now is fucking HELL. okay. then i wrote this like a month ago...it seriusly has no meaning. its disturbing kinda, but i dont know. i seriusly dont get how i thought it up ha i wake up in the morning in my bed and thoughts run through my head saying... "dont get up." but i ignore it and stood up and get in a better frame of mind but i go down stairs and what do i find... my mother on the kitchen floor. i check her pulse and nothing is there and then my heart goes into a panic scare shes got a stab in her back and a stab in her arm. whoever did this ment to cause harm. i call 911 and they come and take here away i should of listen to that voice inside my head, i never ever should of gotten out of bed. thoughts running through my head over and over again. i felt lost and paralized. so i get a sheet of paper and pen. because my mother always told me "let it on on paper, no one cries". so i let all my feelings and tears out on that paper, and id never show it anyone, im not a chance taker. the next day was her funeral. i walked up to the cascet and put what i wrote on that paper with her in there and that was the end. and it wasnt fair. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted June 28, 2007 Report Share Posted June 28, 2007 ^^^ the 1st one is amazazing!!!!! soo sad! love the 2nd one too.... new song.... Mistake Hurry up and make up your mind 'Cause I just can't seem to find What it is you’re looking for in me I think it's time I got outta' here and made a few things a little more clear So listen to what I gotta say: You’re a bitch, you’re a fake Damn your lies, you mistake You thought you had me But now I'm breaking free So shut your mouth and just let me be I'm so tired of your excuses And why you're never there But no more do I even need to care I don't wanna hear your bullshit And I don't need to hear your lies But no more do I even want to care, 'cause You’re a bitch, you’re a fake Damn your lies, you mistake You thought you had me But now I'm breaking free So shut your mouth and just let me be Oh, I'm through with you 'Cause your not worth it, no I don't need you And now it's time for me to go Oh, 'cause I'm leaving, it's just me I guess 'Happily Ever After' just wasn't meant to be You’re a bitch, you’re a fake Damn your lies, you mistake You thought you had me But now I'm breaking free So shut your mouth and just let me be... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 wow Susan, your work is really emotional.. and that's why they're so great! i mean, your stuff is real and in your face... that's what i call, AMAZING work. great job. i just hope you're doing ok. i'm glad you had a chance to actually vent and to have the guts to share it with all of us. that's amazing. you're really talented and you've got something really great ahead of you. don't stop writting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 AOIFE... i don't even have to say anything.. because you know you're work is crazy AMAZING!!! i loved it.. the song and the poem.. but i kinda liked the poem a bit more, because i feel exactly the same way!!! hahaha.. but the song kinda reminded me of miz biz.. like another version of miz biz.. cool! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 this is the newest song i just wrote.. it's a bit emo and hardly makes sense so..bare with me please.. lol. Scared Alone there she stands with her tattered dress with her heart that's a shattered mess she cries out to find no one, she's alone and she says she's done she quietly wraps her pain and suffering around her tiny neck and now she's choking and i just wanna her help now... but she doesn't want to let me in. don't you know you need help? don't you know you can't do it alone? did you know i'm here for you? did you know i've always known? so let it go.. just let it go... she cries all night, she runs away, out of sight and she knows i'll be looking for her because i can't live without her, here. and falls another tear, and grows another filthy fear. i need her here. i could calm her fears. and i just wanna her help now... but she doesn't want to let me in. don't you know you need help? don't you know you can't do it alone? did you know i'm here for you? did you know i've always known? so let it go.. just let it go... some people are scared of themselves, they don't know it, but i know it well. she's the one that's scaring me she's the one that's in me... why don't i know i need help? why don't i know i can't do it alone? i didn't know you're here for me.. i didn't know you've always known.. so i'll let it go.. just let it go... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neverment2brag Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 ah thank you jana!! everyones thats read it has said liek "eh" im like DUDE i like spilled my heart and soul out and all you gotta say it "eh" haha. i love the song too, i LOVE the last part of it. Aoife, i love the...the chours of it i guess ill call it. it reminds me of my ex BFF in middle school HAHA she like tried to control me and mold me into like a mini me of her then one day i told her im sick of your lies and all that stuff haha okay im done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neverment2brag Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 hey! found a poem i wrote like a year ago about my friend i was just talking about hahah because she was trying to be friends with me again and yeah. i know its cheesey and it sucks yeah, it was a year ago, i was weird back then haha You thought you ruled me, You thought you controled me, You thought you owned me, But you didnt. You thought that i was you friend, You thought that i wouldnt bend You thought that it would never end But it did. And now its over and you regret everything you said. But you know what I dont care! You suck. You ruined my life and im not gunna cry. Thought i was gunna die Well you thought wrong. Now you wanna take back it all But i dont wanna! Cuz it was the start of a new day. The days that i rise and you fall. You fell, and you fell hard. Just like a deck of cards! You were all over the floor And i didnt care that you were there Cuz i was there too. But i got back up and lived my life And thats what you should do. Because it was that bad It made me sad But i got over it. It was kind of a fad Just like your dad It got really really old. And i finally got tired You were fired And that was that. But in the end you felt bad, You wanna go back up to bat But ill NEVER be friends with you again, And yes i will stick with it. And this is why i am using a pen But now im out of ink....SH!T. ill use this pencil now and take a bow beacause i let my feelings out I dont know how to say this now But, i love to see you pout Yes its mean, I dont mean to be green But thats just me. but it just trips me out that you wanna take back it all But i dont wanna! Cuz it was the start of a new day. a BRAND NEW DAY! The day that i rise and you fall. And that is all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deanfunk Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 okay so like..im really amazed at the poems/songs i read above and DAAMN..sooo good..they are so long yet so full of emotion..i bet you guys felt good after you wrote your pieces. "thoughts running through my head over and over again. i felt lost and paralized. so i get a sheet of paper and pen." And yes i will stick with it. And this is why i am using a pen But now im out of ink....SH!T. don't you know you need help? don't you know you can't do it alone? did you know i'm here for you? did you know i've always known? so let it go.. just let it go... ------------------ red is all i see the sound of her voice pierces my ears. her hair like fire it burns my eyes with beauty and grace it overcomes my senses. -------------------------------- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neverment2brag Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 haha the ink ones so cheesey...im thinking of writing another one, i dunno if now or not. its 3am and im tired so i could write anything hahah Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neverment2brag Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 okay HA this just came to my head...yeah i dont know. it took forEVER to think up the last line though thats why its soo cheesey haha im sitting here confused. feeling a little used. i just got the news. and im crushed... im feeling a little blue. i just might sue. because you broke my heart in two. who knew, one could feel so much pain? no ones around. not one sound. and im bound, to do anything to feel a release. so i lay in my bed. thoughts running through my head. i need some sort of med...ication, to get through all this safely. breathing deep, hands shaking. i begin to weep, i feel an awakening... i can live without you. ill live my life to the fullest. i feel brand new and unwined, i always knew you'd go out all stylish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JadeIsRad Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 Janaaaaaaaaaaaaaa <3!!! You write radical stuff! =]]]] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted June 30, 2007 Report Share Posted June 30, 2007 ^^^awwwwwww!!! thank you muchez and bunchez Jade!!! i love u!!! woo! hahaha... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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