Andrew Posted July 22, 2007 Report Share Posted July 22, 2007 ^That's awesome. Really good =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted July 22, 2007 Report Share Posted July 22, 2007 Jorgi thats amazazing!!!! =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted July 22, 2007 Report Share Posted July 22, 2007 haha, i'm very aware it's anything but awesome, but thank you thought i'd try something happy for a change. P.O. Box Heaven Dear God, I'm unable to sleep, I called, but you weren’t there, I left a message after the beep, But now, I need a favor not a prayer... Hello. How are you? It's been a while, It's just little old me again, I know you have better things to do right now, So, this letter to you I send. Tell the stars that watch down upon me That I'm grateful for their light, And that when they sparkle, I wink back Each and every night. Tell the unborn baby I never got to know That he's the brightest star in the sky, And that I hope to finally meet him one day And we'll play together, both him and I. When Grandma left in January 2007 Off looking for Grandpa she went, Can you please let me know if she found him in heaven? And if so, what was it like when they met? Well, it's getting late; It's time for me to go, It's just gone quarter to three, So as I sleep tonight please let me know, Your little friend, RSVP. That's really good, i've seen that concept done a fair few times, but rarely done well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted July 23, 2007 Report Share Posted July 23, 2007 haha, i'm very aware it's anything but awesome, but thank you thought i'd try something happy for a change. That's really good, i've seen that concept done a fair few times, but rarely done well oh really, well thank you! =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted July 23, 2007 Report Share Posted July 23, 2007 one i wrote a while back... Minority Rules Looking through the glossy pages Models – tall and thin From “How to be size 0 in just 2 weeks" And “How to have the perfect skin!” On "How to have the perfect body" Filling young girls heads with false hopes Telling us how to act and look With ”This Seasons hottest clothes!” Everywhere I look and turn I see them everywhere They make my stomach twist and churn As they’re looking for someone to care I’m not one to stereotype But I’m gona say what I think I just don’t get this blonde bimbo hype Of push up brass, lip-gloss and pink As they walk with their boobs stuck out And shaking their tiny hips in my face I’ll stick to my eyeliner and rock it out And ignore this Barbie-Doll race!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted July 23, 2007 Report Share Posted July 23, 2007 one i wrote a while back... Minority Rules Looking through the glossy pages Models – tall and thin From “How to be size 0 in just 2 weeks" And “How to have the perfect skin!” On "How to have the perfect body" Filling young girls heads with false hopes Telling us how to act and look With ”This Seasons hottest clothes!” Everywhere I look and turn I see them everywhere They make my stomach twist and churn As they’re looking for someone to care I’m not one to stereotype But I’m gona say what I think I just don’t get this blonde bimbo hype Of push up brass, lip-gloss and pink As they walk with their boobs stuck out And shaking their tiny hips in my face I’ll stick to my eyeliner and rock it out And ignore this Barbie-Doll race!! i love this. a lot. <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xLaiamore Posted July 24, 2007 Report Share Posted July 24, 2007 I wrote this on the plane on my way to Vegas.. LOL. Off to where the sun sets and rises the most, I'm 80 percent awake and 100 ready, Let's take off Ready for whatever come what may Party all night pretending it's the last of our lives C'mon! C'mon! Let's drink to this Celebrate life and our happiness Forget whatever happened in the past It's a forgive and forget situation Not life and death Let's dance, dance our night away To the beat we loved for years Sing our lungs out for everyone to hear That's what this night's about Strut our stuff to others I'll sleep until sunrise Just to be with the best Promise me, this will be something you'll never forget. A night filled with memories, not regrets. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted July 24, 2007 Report Share Posted July 24, 2007 I wrote this on the plane on my way to Vegas.. LOL. Off to where the sun sets and rises the most, I'm 80 percent awake and 100 ready, Let's take off Ready for whatever come what may Party all night pretending it's the last of our lives C'mon! C'mon! Let's drink to this Celebrate life and our happiness Forget whatever happened in the past It's a forgive and forget situation Not life and death Let's dance, dance our night away To the beat we loved for years Sing our lungs out for everyone to hear That's what this night's about Strut our stuff to others I'll sleep until sunrise Just to be with the best Promise me, this will be something you'll never forget. A night filled with memories, not regrets. <333 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tineke Posted July 24, 2007 Report Share Posted July 24, 2007 I wrote this on the plane on my way to Vegas.. LOL. Off to where the sun sets and rises the most, I'm 80 percent awake and 100 ready, Let's take off Ready for whatever come what may Party all night pretending it's the last of our lives C'mon! C'mon! Let's drink to this Celebrate life and our happiness Forget whatever happened in the past It's a forgive and forget situation Not life and death Let's dance, dance our night away To the beat we loved for years Sing our lungs out for everyone to hear That's what this night's about Strut our stuff to others I'll sleep until sunrise Just to be with the best Promise me, this will be something you'll never forget. A night filled with memories, not regrets. This is really cool. I like it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tineke Posted July 24, 2007 Report Share Posted July 24, 2007 Thanks for the feedback! This is sort of a sequel to the first noe I posted. Written about six months later if that explains the attitude change, hehe. Grace. I’m sorry but now I just can’t help but hate her. She hurt you. She hurt you and I can’t forgive her for it. And now she’s coming crawling back, Tail between her legs, Saying that we should be full of… Grace. Claiming she’s better now. Watching from afar, I find this harder to trust than you do, And I didn’t even know her. I used to have… Grace. I told my self I was fine. Back when I could deal with it. Anyone else is fine, Just please don’t turn to… Grace. I can’t help it. I don’t have enough… Grace. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eefie Posted July 24, 2007 Report Share Posted July 24, 2007 i love this.a lot. <3 thanks natasha! =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xLaiamore Posted July 25, 2007 Report Share Posted July 25, 2007 Thanks guys! I really appreciate it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted July 25, 2007 Report Share Posted July 25, 2007 i haven't been on my favorite thread in such a long time.. i feel soo bad!!! ohh geeziez... lol.. BUT! now i am back and i am here to say the following people... Aoife Helena Jorgi Lai Tineke Janina you guys totally freakin' ROCK!!! omg!! your work is more than amazing.. you all have a talent that's too awesome for words.. keep writting and i'll keep reading.. i LOVE them all... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xLaiamore Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 Gracias Jana. =) I appreciate it SOOOO MUCH! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 no prob.. you deserve it!!! its totally awesome.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tineke Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
miss_emergency Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 welcome!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Ninja Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 Silence. A few measures of rests, a welcome break in the usual song of broken voices and breaking glass. The slap of a palm on a cheek, a fist on an eye, a belt on anything that gets in its way. It's a horrible song, repetitive, with coda after coda, never ending, but the pauses are wonderful. They're short, far too short, and far too rare, so when they come you close your eyes, immerse your self in them, erase everything so it's just you in the silence. Alone, safe, at peace. Until the music starts again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LovelyLivi Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 Silence. A few measures of rests, a welcome break in the usual song of broken voices and breaking glass. The slap of a palm on a cheek, a fist on an eye, a belt on anything that gets in its way. It's a horrible song, repetitive, with coda after coda, never ending, but the pauses are wonderful. They're short, far too short, and far too rare, so when they come you close your eyes, immerse your self in then, erase everything so it's just you in the silence. Alone, safe, at peace. Until the music starts again. OMG! that is amazing i swear i jus posted that on myspace n was liek look at this dank writting right here that this gurl put on the paramore boards AMAZAZING! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Ninja Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 Haha, I'm glad you liked it that much. If you could put my name on it that would be nice. I'm Claudia. =) Also, I noticed a typo. "immerse your self in then" It should say "them." If you could fix that on your myspace that would be good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LovelyLivi Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 phahah no problemo. you sound liek me with the typos Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LovelyLivi Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 heres one for you a lil emo though back when i was all yuck. today is the day for his story to be told about how everything he touches grows old sell your soul to him thats all he needs he cares about nothing but his filthy greed heartbreaking isnt it all of his lies a puzzles made of tears and sorrowful cries gasping for air reach for the sky never again will there be a goodbye broken wings nowhere to go all the things you wished werent so have come to pass he is back for another soul to steal i dont want it to happen but i wonder how it feels mind weeving through thoughts to figure it out gut wrenching pain without a doubt you were next in line your soul hell steal now you know the end is near nothing left to do but to live in fear what do ya think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Ninja Posted July 26, 2007 Report Share Posted July 26, 2007 It has a really nice flow to it. I think some punctuation would help, though, because I don't think I got lost but it's possible that I did without noticing. I like the image of everything he touches growing old. It's not over-powerful like saying everything he touches dies, and it's really better that way because you can imagine the sad, withered souls he leaves behind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Ninja Posted July 27, 2007 Report Share Posted July 27, 2007 For Now You know I never thought I'd be the kind To fumble with locked doors Never thought I'd fall for green eyes I fell for yours You know I never thought I'd be the one To hit dead ends (again and again) Never thought someone would try to run From what I'd lend And it's what you never thought that gets you Does it hurt? I think you know it does Was it wrong? Some day I'll say it was But for now I'll see your side of things Your confusion and what it brings Will I die? Luck for you, no Will I cry? That's something I think you know But for now I'll tell you that it's fine While wishing what was hers was mine You know I always thought I'd find someone I finally did with you I'd fall quickly for the right one Thought you'd fall, too You know I always thought I'd be happy Won't work out that way (Maybe someday) Always thought giving someone my all Would make him stay And it's what you always thought that fooled you Does it hurt? I think you know it does Was it wrong? Some day I'll say it was But for now I'll see your side of things Your confusion and what it brings Will I die? Luck for you, no Will I cry? That's something I think you know But for now I'll tell you that it's fine While wishing what was hers was mine Thanks for the laughs, thanks for the smiles Though I won't be doing either for a while Thanks for the tears and the pain and self doubt But I hope that at least your life works out Does it hurt? I think you know it does Was it wrong? Some day I'll say it was But for now I'll see your side of things Your confusion and what it brings Will I die? Luck for you, no Will I cry? That's something I think you know But for now I'll tell you that it's fine While wishing what was hers was mine I'm wishing what was hers was mine But for now I'll tell you that I'm fine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LovelyLivi Posted July 27, 2007 Report Share Posted July 27, 2007 i dont believe in punctuation jkjk its hard for me to figure out where exactly i should put things :-l maybe u got lost maybe you didnt. but thnk you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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