Jorgi Posted January 5, 2008 Report Share Posted January 5, 2008 The bell tolls on time as alwaysAnd off we go into the uncertain future With a smile on our faces And a hopeful burden upon our backs To take up the torch for our peers... i really like that. i can't remember if i've posted this or not, but i was rifling through random bits and pieces and found it, i quite like it ? hmmm. I''m starting to feel a little nauseous, i've lost my heart somewhere in my mouth so i'll speak in riddles and heartbeats and just hope you'll understand this time around. Fame and fortune passed right on by, so i better start dreaming again and hope that you'll remember my name 'cause i'll never forget the way you said it, or the way you promised the stars like you meant it. And i'm not quite sure what love feels like, but i've heard it's much like falling well falling's never felt as good, as when i'm falling in love with you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted January 5, 2008 Report Share Posted January 5, 2008 I''m starting to feel a little nauseous, i've lost my heart somewhere in my mouth so i'll speak in riddles and heartbeats and just hope you'll understand this time around. Fame and fortune passed right on by, so i better start dreaming again and hope that you'll remember my name 'cause i'll never forget the way you said it, or the way you promised the stars like you meant it. And i'm not quite sure what love feels like, but i've heard it's much like falling well falling's never felt as good, as when i'm falling in love with you. *dies because jorgi's talent is too great for any human to behold* ...lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lahninja Posted January 5, 2008 Report Share Posted January 5, 2008 it is isnt it! haha shes amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMaramore Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 jorgi!@ omg i totally like love your stuff and stuff.... LOVE IT! lopl.. *watch out for that freak they call "Mariah"* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steesh Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 i really like that. i can't remember if i've posted this or not, but i was rifling through random bits and pieces and found it, i quite like it ? hmmm. I''m starting to feel a little nauseous, i've lost my heart somewhere in my mouth so i'll speak in riddles and heartbeats and just hope you'll understand this time around. Fame and fortune passed right on by, so i better start dreaming again and hope that you'll remember my name 'cause i'll never forget the way you said it, or the way you promised the stars like you meant it. And i'm not quite sure what love feels like, but i've heard it's much like falling well falling's never felt as good, as when i'm falling in love with you. That's Amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 Ohhh jeeee, thanks guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 welllll a while ago i was working on this song. but i got writer's block and couldn't finish it. haha. estella. With each bitter word spoken towards me, Slicing like knives in my back and in my side, My love for you grows like an ocean tide Crashing upon banks of a broken shoreline Who made you so cold, darling? Who taught you these sinister lies? Raised to break the heart of every man, Forge your love and crush their pride Chorus// I’m sorry to say dear, but you’re wide of the mark These lies you have created are nothing but false remarks ...and that's as far as i've gotten. maybe someone can help? idk. if you've read the book great expectations you probably know what this is about. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 i completely adore that. completely. it's perfect. try and think about how you want it to finish ? write down the basic outline of what it's trying to say, the story if you like, and try to pick up from where you left off. if you think of any lines or just single words that could work or could relate, write them down and keep them, and then review them a bit later on and try and fit them in whatever structure you're decided you want to follow, just mess about with words and sentances for a while and something will probably click. perhaps even move on to something else and write something completely different, shift your focus for a bit and maybe some obscure inspiration will smack you in the face. not literally, of course i'm not sure if any of that'll help, but it's how i (attempt) to deal with any kind of block. sometime's things aren't even worth the effort of finishing, but that definitely is, please try ? (: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Natasha Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 i completely adore that. completely. it's perfect. try and think about how you want it to finish ? write down the basic outline of what it's trying to say, the story if you like, and try to pick up from where you left off. if you think of any lines or just single words that could work or could relate, write them down and keep them, and then review them a bit later on and try and fit them in whatever structure you're decided you want to follow, just mess about with words and sentances for a while and something will probably click. perhaps even move on to something else and write something completely different, shift your focus for a bit and maybe some obscure inspiration will smack you in the face. not literally, of course i'm not sure if any of that'll help, but it's how i (attempt) to deal with any kind of block. sometime's things aren't even worth the effort of finishing, but that definitely is, please try ? (: thank you jorgi! i'm definately going to try. (: <3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorgi Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 ahaa, i just re-read what i wrote there and it makes me sound really pretentious and like, poetically educated, but i'm not, i just write whatever the hell i want and it occasionally works out okay whatever. i wait with baited breath or whatever for more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 when i was off my meds for over a week, i was remembering some old, and bad times. andi remembered one of the [really bad] poems i wrote.... as i lay dieing i think about my past-my mistakes what went wrong? could it have been fixed? if this blade, my vein had not kissed? will there be tearshed? will there be pain? are these my last thoughts as my blood drips away? as the memories of my past just fade away? as i lay dieing, i just have to say- i'm sorry. pretty crappy....feel free to make fun of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steesh Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 when i was off my meds for over a week, i was remembering some old, and bad times. andi remembered one of the [really bad] poems i wrote.... as i lay dieing i think about my past-my mistakes what went wrong? could it have been fixed? if this blade, my vein had not kissed? will there be tearshed? will there be pain? are these my last thoughts as my blood drips away? as the memories of my past just fade away? as i lay dieing, i just have to say- i'm sorry. pretty crappy....feel free to make fun of it. That's amasing why would anyone want to make fun of it i'm blown away. Very emotional and deep. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CaughtInTheRiot Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 it scares me sometimes how much emotion can be put into words....just words, simple plain words... and they can cause so much, it's frightening Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMaramore Posted January 6, 2008 Report Share Posted January 6, 2008 ^yeah.... i completely agree Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 ^i agree too. and steven, you really liked it? i thought it was a load of shit.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steesh Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 For shure i liked it Completely un mentionable how good it is. It really struck accord with me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 well thanks...i only posted it casue my friend wanted to tell me it was good, but i doubted her. lol. edit: and nowi cant write anything anymore. its hard to explain, but since the meds, i dont have emotion anymore. well, i do, but nothing strong enough to write about. just enough to function.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steesh Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Your powerful with word Katie Keep it up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catie Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 when i was off my meds for over a week, i was remembering some old, and bad times. andi remembered one of the [really bad] poems i wrote.... as i lay dieing i think about my past-my mistakes what went wrong? could it have been fixed? if this blade, my vein had not kissed? will there be tearshed? will there be pain? are these my last thoughts as my blood drips away? as the memories of my past just fade away? as i lay dieing, i just have to say- i'm sorry. pretty crappy....feel free to make fun of it. lmfao that was horrible! no im totally kidding..... omfg katie i love that for real. its sooooo goooooooooddddddddddd! alot better then somthing i would write. im awful at that kinda stuff. but i love it i really do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 aww thanks. and steven...i dont think i can keep it up. i've been trying to write since april when i went on the meds..nothings coming to me. i just need some inspiration Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CaughtInTheRiot Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 That's the most saddening thing I have heard in what feels like an eternity Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 ^what is? the poem or the last sentence i posted? lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
steesh Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 Haha katie. U really do have a special something when you write I just can't put my finger on it though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
arrrrr x matey Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 is that a good thing? lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CaughtInTheRiot Posted January 9, 2008 Report Share Posted January 9, 2008 The poem. I put it on my myspace. It adds to the emo. lol, just kidding, I just loved it and needed a new poem. The old one was written by this girl who now hates me for loving paramore. Screw that garbage. You have replaced it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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